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Daekie

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 15, 2015 8:51 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Ivy Sutors / Sailor Warhol
Reason for Revision: Corrupting to - Poppy Anania-Sedgwick / Corrupt Warhol of Moods
Link to Old Profile: Here
Link to Revised Profile: Here

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 26, 2015 1:38 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Sailor Tantalus
Reason for Revision: SO UH GUESS WHO UNDERPOWERED THE s**t OUT OF POOR TANTALUS'S ETERNAL ATTACK. ME. Tiny radius whoops.

Quote:


Eternal Sailor Attack: Final Temptation!
Sailor Tantalus summons an illusory golden apple, but this time, when he tosses it, it simply rolls to the ground and comes to a halt. It is visible to everyone on the battlefield, but only effects those in a ten-foot diameter of it. Anyone within that radius will become overwhelmingly tempted to have the apple and take a bite, and the desire/urge is so intense that it can cause multiple people to fight* to posses it.

If someone succeeds in getting the apple and takes a bite, they will immediately be overwhelmed with a feeling of guilt and remorse for their actions for the remainder of the attack. This attack lasts for a total of forty-five seconds in effects and aftereffects.

*fighting cannot be lethal, cannot use magic attacks, and is up to the player to decide if they would rather argue/debate/tackle/punch/kick the apple away from the other person/wrestle/lay on top of it, etc

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Eternal Sailor Attack: Final Temptation!
Sailor Tantalus summons an illusory golden apple, but this time, when he tosses it, it simply rolls to the ground and comes to a halt. It is visible to everyone on the battlefield, but only effects those in a ten-foot radius of it, except for Tantalus himself. Anyone within that radius will become overwhelmingly tempted to have the apple and take a bite, and the desire/urge is so intense that it can cause multiple people to fight* to posses it.

If someone succeeds in getting the apple and takes a bite, they will immediately be overwhelmed with a feeling of guilt and remorse for their actions for the remainder of the attack, and someone successfully biting into the apple releases everyone else from the compulsion to fight for it. This attack lasts for a total of forty-five seconds in effects and aftereffects.

*fighting cannot be lethal, cannot use magic attacks, and is up to the player to decide if they would rather argue/debate/tackle/punch/kick the apple away from the other person/wrestle/lay on top of it, etc


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 27, 2015 12:54 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Katherine Chang / Sailor Mie
Reason for Revision: (Note: only the powered form is being revised. Civ profile stays the same.) I had recently gotten my character's powered form, and looking over the attacks I created for her over half a year ago, I didn't really like them that much. So, I pretty much just changed all of them up, and since the attacks are different (with the eternal one being vastly so), I figured that they'd need some crit from shop mods.
Link to Old Profile: https://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24605433
Link to Revised Profile: https://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php/?t=24733381

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 06, 2015 6:21 am


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Gévaudan, knight of Ganymede (previously Wolframite)
Reason for Revision: Purification & plot reasons from the past leading to this
Link to Old Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=18142021
Link to Revised Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24583681

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 06, 2015 11:23 am


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MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Elzo and Marlo Xanis
Reason for Revision: Their attacks are vastly under powered to the point of being ridiculous. Only attacks tho, the rest is fine.
Link to Old Profile: Elzo, Marlo
Link to Revised Profile: Combo
PostPosted: Wed Jul 15, 2015 11:16 pm


The Space Cauldron

MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Anabel Au / Mistral Squire
Reason for Revision: She was rehomed to me and I chose to rewrite her profile in my own words to help my understanding of the character.
Link to Old Profile: Yo!
Link to Revised Profile: Here!

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 10:47 pm


The Space Cauldron

MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Chiku Ajali/Lt Sphalerite [to be Kasih Wiley/Petra Page]
Reason for Revision: PURIFICATION~
Link to Old Profile: Sphal
Link to Revised Profile: PETRA!

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 27, 2015 8:04 am


Aurelius Ambrosius

MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Hyperborea of Cosmos// Ciel Karpusi
Reason for Revision: I'm really not happy with a bow as her weapon now and after doing more battles with her I believe that something that is more of a melee weapon would fit her character more, and since she isn't trained in using a staff in combat it will give her a slight disadvantage in combat which I think would make things more interesting

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Knight-- A ornate long bow in the shape of the infinity symbol /w the three stars made of amethysts (gold colored) strung with a thin silver wire and the same bracer but with the cosmos symbol and the three dots of the infinity symbol made of amethyst.

Spell- Her bow fires an arrow of starlight that explodes like a flash bang, channeling time is 40 secs.

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Knight-- A ornate white Staff with the infinity symbol /w the three stars made of amethysts (gold colored) somewhere on it.

Spell- Her staff fires a bolt of starlight that explodes like a flash bang, channeling time is 40 secs.


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 30, 2015 3:01 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Rohan Dalry
Reason for Revision: Character development, plot development, prepping for possible purification if all goes well.
Link to Old Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=17311999
Link to Revised Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24759447


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Creighton McKinnon
Reason for Revision: Character development, plot development, prepping for possible purification if all goes well.
Link to Old Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=18948281
Link to Revised Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24759459

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 16, 2015 11:20 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Salem Thanatos / Lt Caledonite
Reason for Revision: 8| His ex dun got him corrupted. Oops
Link to Old Profile: Right!
Link to Revised Profile: Here!
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 26, 2015 4:14 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Ys
Reason for Revision: 8D his weapon/magic doesn't fit the guidelines well for a saturn knight, so to be a responsible person, I'm going to try revising it.

Quote:

A pair of decorated masks on sticks, each themed in a different color. One is smiling/leering creepily, one appears to be crying/screaming in horror. Depending on which mask he holds up, those who can see the mask are either filled with mirth or with sorrow, beyond what they would normally feel. Outside thoughts may intrude on the character if the player wishes, giving them a reason for their mirth/sorrow and distracting them. Lasts no longer than 50 seconds and doesn't hinder physical movement, only mental state. Only enemies who look directly at the mask are affected. Now made of hard wood, they are physically equivalent to a sturdy wooden shield for deflecting attacks.

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An elaborate pair of masks in opposite colors. One has a leering face and the other a scowl. When one is held up and channeled through, anyone who sees that mask is filled with an intense feeling of being watched. The scowling mask produces a creepy, malicious feeling, as though someone intends the target harm. The leering mask produces a feeling of being laughed at, as though the watcher has only derision for the target, having judged them and found them laughably lacking.Can last up to 50 seconds or spread out in bursts. Characters prone to suspicion/fear/insanity could be more affected than more stoic/light-hearted people. In addition, some people could be more affected by one mask than the other, depending on their ability to deal with either feeling. Now made of hard wood, they are physically equivalent to a sturdy wooden shield for deflecting attacks, but will break under too much abuse.


He was approved before the shop cracked down on knights having only one weapon, so he was grandfathered in. I would like to keep both masks, if possible, but I can change it to a two sided mask if that's a problem.

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 26, 2015 4:24 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Ida
Reason for Revision: Just wanting to make her profile fit better. It was a mistake to add these to her.

Quote:

~ No Regrets - After coming to some sobering conclusions, Orah has decided that there is no reason to put off to tomorrow what you can accomplish today. She lives for today, filling every moment with the things that are truly important... appreciating life, making others happy, and doing her duty as a senshi. Superfluous things no longer hold any attraction for her. If something is of no benefit, she doesn't waste her time on it and she moves on to things that are a better use of her time and energy. Always, she strives to live so that when she dies she will have no regrets for what she did or didn't do. She loves freely, knowing her time with that person could be short.

~ Fatalistic - Orah's 'no regrets' philosophy stems from her belief that she will die young. She is firmly convinced that there is no reason to plan anything long term because she will never get to fulfill it. She will never have a normal life, so she no longer strives for one. Deeper relationships can be hard for her to form because of this. There is also something sort of hopeless about this view of things and it subconsciously permeates everything.


I want to remove this virtue/flaw combo because I don't feel like they fit Ida all that well any more. She doesn't 'live life to the fullest' like it suggests, and while she still believes she'll die young, it doesn't dominate her life enough to be a flaw I think.

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 26, 2015 7:52 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Kraven West/Lt Alexandrite
Reason for Revision: Weapon Progression Change

Quote:
Lieutenant: Glow Sticks
Captain: A short sword akin to This
General: A long great sword. Glowy. Maybe something a kin to Frostmourne

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Lieutenant: Glow Sticks
Captain: Glowy Axe, with the central portion of the hilt resembling the glowstick. The Axe is pretty heavy, not all that sharp but can still do damage.
General: Glowing, Runic long double bladed Axe, on a long hilt like so


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PostPosted: Tue Sep 01, 2015 6:42 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Umber
Reason for Revision: Want to take weapon progression into a more covert vein that falls in line with his hunting background

Quote:

OLD WEAPON PROGRESSION:

ieutenant - A pair of cloth driving gloves.
Captain - Studded leather gloves.
General - Clawed gauntlets.

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NEW WEAPON PROGRESSION:

ieutenant - A pair of cloth driving gloves.
Captain - Studded leather gloves.
General - Double switchblade gauntlet.


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PostPosted: Tue Sep 01, 2015 10:26 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Carmine Marsten
Reason for Revision: Corruption plot!
Link to Old Profile: Here!
Link to Revised Profile: Here! Although his powered side was not previously in play, I've included it in the same thread for ease of approval.

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