Darkness.

• Artist: death-is-no-more
• Description: This is something i wrote it is ment to help with inner demonds
  but you may remove what it is you dont like about yourself
  but you will always know its there no matter what
  ^_^
• Date: 08/27/2011
• Tags: darkness

Look into the broken reflection,
Cast your gaze at the person stairing threw the cracks.
There is nothing left for this empty room,
as you look at the empty bottle in your hands,
a smerk curves from your pail lips.
the edge still shard,
smashing the bottle into the remander of the mirror you laugh.
as nothing is left for you here,
the darkness of the room spreads threw to hall.
like a shadow,
you leave the room, the darkness behind.
but forever you will be empty.
Looking into the broken mirror what is it that you see?

Comments

[XxroseXredxX]

Agreed, I really like the idea of this poem. And it would be interesting if you could expand on it and tell a little more.
But definitely need to edit the spelling and grammar.
3/5

[blooba96]

I really liked the idea of the poem, just a lot of your spelling errors and what not caused me to give it a 3/5.

[SkiddyBoop]

You should have went through and edited up your misspellings and maybe made some corrections of your punctuation. I saw what you were trying to do with it but it didn't really keep me interested. But good job for giving it a shot.