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Would it be too much to wish for
if I suddenly shouted
(wiping away your mask-like smile
perhaps just to see
an instant of shock)
DIE IN A FIRE
DROWN IN A FLOOD
CHOKE ON A BREATH
never darken my days again.
- by Rynn Calais |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/04/2010 |
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- Title: Too Much To Wish For
- Artist: Rynn Calais
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Comments and critique are appreciated.
The alternative was 'choke on a doughnut'. - Date: 01/04/2010
- Tags: much wish
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Comments (3 Comments)
- nbetweener - 02/23/2010
- I agree with Miranda; it does need more. Are you wishing you could shout, or wishing to make the mask disappear? Wishing you had the courage to shout, perhaps? I think you could find something better to shout.
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- MyDearMiranda - 01/18/2010
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i liked it
but it could use more detail
it was great tho - Report As Spam
- BatzLove - 01/09/2010
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thats really great! XD i'd love to tell some ppl that... >=3
but anyways that was really fun to read. biggrin - Report As Spam
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