Pain

• Artist: p01s0n1vy1234
• Description: I wrote this a while ago.I only just found it again and wanted to know what you think :) Please comment
• Date: 10/18/2009
• Tags: pain

You think that I know no pain
That i have none to gain
But you i can not blame
For battles never won

I have lost and I have found
But I've never sulked around
I've loved and lost again
And again and again

I've watched you from afar
As you sit in my loves' arms
And act as though I'm really calm
But inside I am dead

My two loves' embrace
I never felt so erased
My heart is split in two
My true love or my best friend

Who?

Comments

[Sila Calien]

What kinda bothered me was you seemed to have a rhyme scheme but it suddenly disappeared... also it seems a bit stiff, try to get it to flow a bit more. Other than that its fairly good