Lament Of The Fortunate

• Artist: ViRabbit
• Description: Hi..This is my first time putting something in the arenas ^^' So I've been toying with poetry a bit for the last couple months..And I came up with this the other day. So please comment and tell me what you think :]
• Date: 07/23/2009
• Tags: lament fortunate death bones skeleton

Mr. Bones, cracked and frowzy,
a loose grin hangs on your lips.
Holes gape and gawk at whomever stands before you-
you swallow all and yet see none.
your milky fingers squirm and twinge, like quivering spiders
wishing to weave one last time.
Wretched, they call you:
the haplessly deceased.
"Such a pity," they wail
"No breath shall escape his lungs!"
Here you sit, gathering dust and
crumbling away, into nihility...
Alas, Mr. Bones, I envy you for all these things.

Comments

[~Shadey Sam~]

I really like it. I love the despcriptions it's like i can see him. 5/5 keep it up.

[Intrepid Indigo]

I've been browsing through the arenas for awhile and I can honestly say that so far this is the best thing I have read. It is a really vivid image. Welcome to the arenas.

[Mskitty511]

OMJashin I love it! 5/5 n_n