Seasons

• Artist: SolsticeXII
• Description: Uh yeah, I tried a different sort of thing now, so like the last line flows into the next in every other stanza except the last. So basically, I want suggestions like if it's hard to understand or if it's just plain annoying.
  
• Date: 05/20/2009
• Tags: seasons autumn winter fall summer

Spring flowers sleep under the blanket of lost dreams
In the dim light of dawn
I join them in a forgotten world

Forever will I remember the day
The day I might leave you
Eventually, I will lay with

The summer moon that falls alone
With no hope of protection,
Where are you supposed to go?

Without pain or despair,
Where is our place on this Earth?
I can’t feel the

Autumn winds
Flow through the sky,
Pushing cries of lost agony to the surface

How do I find love when I need it most?
I’ll search for you until I’ve found a life clouded with emotion
I’ll watch as

Winter lights reflect off your dead eyes
Dancing among the city
Illuminating my life, dimming your existence

If our worlds clash,
Where should I sleep?
Come and show me

Fall with me
Into the sky, fall with me
Dancing with the stars,
Where should I stay tonight?

Comments

[wildflower2828]

I loved it. It was easy to read and to understand.

[foreverblue200]

basically it's in my opinion easy to read and understandle i think u chose the perfect moments to start new stanzas. nice poem.