OVER IT

• Artist: Xx_I R4p3-L30
• Description: this poem is about me getting over a bad break up, a stupid break up..with a dum boy =D
• Date: 04/25/2009
• Tags: over

i thought i was in love
but all it was, was just lust
i thought u were the one
but really all you are was a pass time

i thought i was broken hearted
but all i was going thro was a fazze

i thought i would never find another
and u kno wat i wont

cuz throu it all im still alive
and trou it it
i still survived

now i get up,
since i triped over u

found u werent my bring and shinny armor
just som dude in tip foil

let me say one thing and one thing only
im over it...

over the charm
and the spell

im over it
and i proud....

Comments

[Princess Yakumi]

nice
spelling on the "eh" side but i totally understand
the whole tin foil thing very nice

[Xx_I R4p3-L30]

thats the point...
i wrote this wen i was furious not thinking of speling

[KitanaWolfblood]

Lots of grammer errors, some poor word choices, spell out your words, the flow wasn't bad but could be better. Could of been a little deeper on the emotional level. You did have some great lines in there that just need some more thought put into them.

Example:

found u werent my bring and shinny armor
just som dude in tip foil

The illusion faded and I saw
not a knight in bright, shinny armor
but a boy dressed in tip foil.

I hope this helps, sorry if you felt it was a bit hars