choise

• Artist: hell_life
• Description: Yh this is just a poem i thought up of. Anyway this is a sonnet made by me. Thank you shakespeare for inventing this type of poem ^^ . A sonnet is a poem that has a ryme to it. 14 lines and each 2nd line up to the 12th line rymes. The 13 and 14 ryme with each other too. Any who rate nicely please ^^ .
  oh yh submitting one is an acheivement because this is my first time entering any contest ^^
  and one lst thing (hopefully) i love comment and critics but i hate insulters.
• Date: 10/05/2008
• Tags: choise

The choise is yours, you have to choose,
to live and be free but to have a fellings to be hurt,
To have a life full of grief and to be abuse,
to breathe, to say, to talk, to flirt.
Or may you choose to die,
to end your sorrow like hell,
and to give up your lie
but never should you tell.
to choose a choise is hard to know,
which one should i do? i need help,
to breathe and live with the flow?
or to die and with out a scream or yelp.
to choose i must but the choise i cannot make,
for one that i choose is the one i must take.

Comments

[Slinkenhofer]

You get gold for voting? HOT DAMN. I did not know that.
Either way, your poem was delightfully cliched. Not really. It was pretty commonplace, especially for this arena. And a few of your rhymes seem... forced. 1/5

[Peeping Penelope]

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[hell_life]

i no ask poeple to rate me 5/5(but i dont mind it)but i would like to ask people not to rate all poems u see a 1 or a low star just for the gold.