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The Space Cauldron

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PostPosted: Wed May 04, 2016 8:25 am


Stamping Thread: Revisions


Sometimes, acquired characters develop differently than you expected, or experiences that happened during roleplay have severely affected their personality. If you find that your character's profile no longer reflects how you are writing your character, you will need to post here!

Similarly, if you are rehomed a character and want to tweak some of the traits or hobbies to improve your ability to play them, or if your character undergoes some drastic change (such as a side swap), you will need to post here!

Revisions can be either minor or major, but each have slightly different rules for posting!

    Minor Revisions
    A minor revision is usually only a few small things; this might be changing a trait or two, or swapping out one hobby for another, or revising weapons or attacks. If you wanted to revise traits and hobbies and weapons/attacks all at once, this would be a major revision! Minor revisions can be posted directly in to this thread. If you are posting for a minor revision, you will need to use the following form:

    [quote="The Space Cauldron"][/quote]
    [size=15][b]MINOR REVISION[/b][/size]
    [b]Character Name:[/b]
    [b]Reason for Revision:[/b]
    [b]Revisions Requested:[/b]


    Major Revisions

    A major revision means that you are revising more than 1/3rd of your character's profile. This means you will need to to post a new quest thread and link to it in this thread. If you are posting for a major revision, you will need to use the following form:

    [quote="The Space Cauldron"][/quote]
    [size=15][b]MAJOR REVISION[/b][/size]
    [b]Character Name:[/b]
    [b]Reason for Revision:[/b]
    [b]Link to Old Profile:[/b]
    [b]Link to Revised Profile:[/b]


Rules for Posting a Revision:

  • Posting in this thread is reserved for stamped characters only!
  • Your character should be at least one month old to be eligible for profile revisions.
  • If you have a plot related to your character's revision and would prefer not to reveal these details early, you can PM The Space Cauldron with your revised profile instead of posting here!
  • If you are side swapping a character, you cannot play their powered side swap until your profile is stamped! You can submit a revised profile along with your side swap plot to ensure you can play your character as soon as possible!
  • These are permanent character changes! These revisions are things that should affect your character in the long run, not in the short run. If your character develops a temporary fear that you have plots to resolve in the near future, don't revise their profile to reflect this.
  • You do not need to submit a revision if something like your character's School/Occupation changes, if their favorite/least favorite food changes, or if their Powered Challenge/Attack Names change.
  • Remember, virtues and flaws affect characters on a daily basis! If something affects a character sometimes or only in certain situations such as a phobia, then it is not a suitable flaw/virtue! If you need a refresher on tips to writing a good profile, check out our Character Creation Information; the same rules apply to both new quests and revised profiles!

Retconning a Character

In the event that you need to completely re-design and rewrite an existing character that has been brought into play, you will need to take a few extra steps to revise them. Before you can completely start over with them, you need permission from every individual that has roleplayed with this character before. This will allow them to work with you (where possible) to remove your character from their character's history without creating significant plot holes. You must also PM the mule to let them know that you want to retcon the character and rewrite them before reintroducing them to the shop.

If you are unable to receive permission from each person, you won't be able to completely redesign this character and will need to maintain some of the core elements and the history of their character during their revision.

We recognize that being unable to obtain permission for a re-write can cause some challenges for a player e.g. former player disputes. If you have any concerns, please reach out to us through the mule to discuss it in more detail. Where possible, we might be able to work out some relevant plot or canon-friendly reasons for why your character has changed in a certain manner so that you can continue to play with them!


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PostPosted: Mon May 16, 2016 9:08 pm


Kolina
APPROVED

MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Harmonia
Reason for Revision: Change Eternal attack. I feel like it just doesn’t really suit her.
Revisions Requested:
Eternal Sailor Attack: Harmony's Reproof
Raising her hands upwards, palms facing the sky Harmonia shouts her attack and a golden sparkle dome temporarily appears before fading out. Anyone within the AoE dome who has malicious intent towards anyone will feel a burning pain in their chest. The stronger the intent, the worse the pain is. If a character can let go of their malicious intent the pain will disappear.
Duration -- 10 ft for 45 secs (I dunno if this is OK, too OP or not powerful enough?)
Avoided -- Out of AoE Range
Cons -- Very draining/pours a lot of energy into it and will affect -anyone- on the dome.

Kolina

Inquisitive Agent


Xaki

PostPosted: Thu May 19, 2016 7:13 pm


Xaki
APPROVED

MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Lt. Serpierite
Reason for Revision: Change in Weapon
Revisions Requested:

Lieutenant Weapon
: Wooden Sword (stays the same)
Captain Weapon: Collapsible Metal Rod (Former) --> A non-lethal metal rod that can be broken apart/reattached by chains.
General Weapon: Katana (Former) --> Double bladed weapon that can be broken apart/reattached by chains.
PostPosted: Fri May 20, 2016 5:15 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Rikard Colby Arin Aldrik
Reason for Revision: Purification
Link to Old Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=20773553
Link to Revised Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24932413

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Skye Starrfyre

Magical Lunatic

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Shanyume

Anxious Friend

PostPosted: Tue Jun 14, 2016 4:22 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Sage Taylor // Hekate DMS of Jinxes
Reason for Revision: I've tried to keep her true to Xerva's original concept but I feel like her attacks are a bit under powered. When taking into account her clumsy flaw having such a short range on her attack, while amusing in a few situations, isn't really fun to have to constantly play out. They are non damaging, fairly easily dodge-able, extremely subjective attacks. The revision moves her from being a close range (a spear wielder or staff wielder could easily hit her at 3' away) to a mid to long range caster. I also wished to specify the speed to something more relate-able and factor in dice rolls since those are becoming more common.
Revisions Requested:here

APPROVED
PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2016 2:17 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Trinity McAllen Crystal Lauper
Reason for Revision: She done got corrupted
Link to Old Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24541307
Link to Revised Profile: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=24997717

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Eos Galvus

Shadowy Celebrant


Wylde Roses

Unleashed Healer

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2016 2:43 pm


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Erika Adalsteinn Christine Rose
Reason for Revision: Corruption ahooooooooy
Link to Old Profile: X
Link to Revised Profile: X

ACCEPTED
PostPosted: Fri Sep 02, 2016 6:25 am


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Nischal Dwivedi
Reason for Revision: Obtained Character who's been RP'ed Previously - They have been gone for two years and have gone though puberty and depression and came out of it a bit different.

Changes include
- Revisions to Hobbies
- Minor Revisions to Virtues
-Minor Revisions to Flaws

Link to Old Profile: Owned By Cooro
Link to Revised Profile: Revised by me

ACCEPTED

Kapoodles

Battle-ready Waffles


Orangeish Sherbert

Rebel Millionaire

PostPosted: Fri Sep 09, 2016 4:43 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Sailor Lenka
Reason for Revision: She hasn't been a chibi for ages and her attacks were super under powered.
Revisions Requested: Old Attacks:
Sailor Scout Attack: Boomarind!
Sailor Lenka summons a piece of watermelon rind that looks like someone ate all of the melon flesh from it. She takes it into her hand, and hurls it at her enemy. She expends some magic, and it flies back to her, landing in her hand.
Pros: Watermelon rind can hurt when it hits!

Cons: Quite often, Lenka will miss her target, or the magic won't have the rind return to her. If the enemy gets the rind, they can squish it and break it.

Usage: Assuming that she lands a hit and gets a return, she has enough power to throw the rind twice during battle. If the rind is destroyed, or doesn't come back--she's out of luck.

Super Sailor Scout Attack: Binding Boomarind!
Lenka summons a piece of rind, much like in her first attack. This time, if the rind hits a foe it will grow, connecting around the foe and pinning their arms to them for fifteen seconds. By the time the fifteen seconds have passed, the rind is soft and squishy--much like it has been pickled.
...It tastes like it too!

Pros: Keeps arms pinned at the foe's side, providing a chance at running, or at a companion attacking.

Cons: Again, the rind must be thrown, and--if the foe is strong enough, it can easily be broken...It also provides the enemy with a tasty snack...That's bad, right? No feeding the enemy.
If the rind hits a companion or an ally, it will bind them, causing them to become immobile as well.

Eternal Sailor Attack: Full Body Rind!
Lenka cries out her attack name, and once more throws her watermelon rind at a foe. This time, however, after attaching and binding the foe's arms, it grows, covering their head, and going down to their feet, encasing them in a large watermelon rind. The effects of the attack last for twenty seconds, allowing for escape, or for more attacks to be thrown!

Pros: Watermelon enemy...Maybe it'll sweeten them up some. Good for picnics.

Cons: Lenka can miss with throwing the initial rind, and if the enemy has some object, they can break the rind prematurely, and end the attack if they are strong enough to break free.


New Attacks:
Rind Rain Lenka says the name of her attack and points her hand at an opponent and a small pinkish cloud appears above their heads, raining out quartered watermelons that fall around and on them. They can be dodged, but they can hurt when they strike you. The opponent has to be within a ten foot range, and the attack lasts thirty seconds. And can be used twice.

Tempest Rind Lenka says the name of her attack and points her hand at an opponent or group of opponents, up to three people total and a large pinkish cloud appears above their heads, raining out halved watermelons that fall around and on them. They can be dodged, but they can hurt quite a bit when they strike you. The opponent has to be within a ten foot range, and the attack lasts forty seconds. And can be used twice.

Full Body Rind!
Lenka cries out her attack name, and throws a watermelon rind at a foe. This time, however, after attaching and binding the foe's arms, it grows, covering their head, and going down to their feet, encasing them in a large watermelon rind, the rind begins to fill with water and is very difficult to break. The attack lasts for forty seconds and can be used once.

APPROVED
PostPosted: Sat Oct 29, 2016 8:00 pm


Noir Songbird

MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Sailor Valjean
Reason for Revision: His current Basic/Super attacks are incredibly situational; I feel these would be more broadly applicable!
Revisions Requested:
Sailor Scout Attack: A Song of Angry Men!
Sailor Valjean shouts the name of his attack and punches the air, and a circle of makeshift barricades, about five feet high, appears around him in a six-foot radius. Within the barricades, basic magical physical boosts are swapped - the strongest characters' boosts are applied to the weakest characters, and vice versa. This accounts for both rank and faction - so a Negaverse Lieutenant or a Page would rank stronger than a basic Senshi. These effects last for twenty-five seconds. Sailor Valjean can use this attack three times per battle.

Super Sailor Scout Attack: Voice of the People!
Sailor Valjean shouts the name of his attack and punches the air, and a circle of makeshift barricades, about five feet high, appears around him in a nine-foot radius. Within the barricades, basic magical physical boosts are swapped - the strongest characters' boosts are applied to the weakest characters, and vice versa. This accounts for both rank and faction - so a Negaverse Lieutenant or a Page would rank stronger than a basic Senshi. These effects last for thirty seconds. Sailor Valjean can use this attack three times per battle.

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Noir Songbird
Crew

Dramatic Senshi

18,325 Points
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nyamomask


Unstoppable Rabbit

18,350 Points
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 08, 2016 9:42 pm


Merurulince

MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Etoile, Guardian Cat
Reason for Revision: Etoi has moved in to live with Alise (Chibi Lepus); therefore, her 'bugging ilse' hobby no longer applies
Revisions Requested:

Candy Connoisseur (self-proclaimed) -- Thanks to the efforts of a twelve-year old determined to own a talking cat all of her own, Etoile is now living the high life with Alise, being bribed with candy constantly to win her loyalties so that she may continue to stay at the small senshi's house (in secret, anyway). Because Christmas only comes once a year, and mint candy and gingerbread are harder to find out of season, Etoile has come to experience a wide variety of candy from other holidays throughout the year; This led to the little cat to become something of a self-proclaimed 'expert' on holiday candy (spoilers: mint candy will always be her favorite, but she does have a newfound fondness for marshmallow peeps...). Of course, for Alise, this has its downside, with Etoi becoming increasingly picky about the kinds of candy she'll accept...

APPROVED
PostPosted: Thu Dec 15, 2016 9:50 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Alphonse Wingates-St. Grey
Reason for Revision: Character's current third hobby is too specific and has not been used yet; changing to one with broader applications (see new replacement below)
Revisions Requested: Living History - Alphonse loves history and culture. He enjoys learning about different eras in history, especially ancient civilizations. He takes a special liking to the preservation of traditional ways of doing things. Alphonse likes hands-on experiences like renaissance faires, tea ceremonies and similar activities over purely book-based study. He likes comparing cultures and beliefs across time. Alphonse is thrilled by discovering old ways.

Meighei
APPROVED


Meighei


Bishoujo-senshi Mahou-shoujo



Strickenized


Garbage Cat

PostPosted: Tue Dec 20, 2016 4:52 pm


MINOR REVISION
Character Name: Ochre / Slate Blackwell
Reason for Revision: Character changed enough over the course of his play that parts of his virtues and flaws no longer reflect his actual personality.
Revisions Requested:

The Old:

Virtues:

Daring — Slate is commonly bold and confident in his expression of himself, capable of being comfortable in his own skin. This reflects not only in personality but in behavior as well, considering that he enjoys taking risks with great stakes and great returns. Slate earns a measure of respect for his willingness to commit to tasks that most may not, be it the simplicity of approaching a particularly attractive person or trying a physical stunt with the high chance of injury (but awesome points in the advent of success). Even in the face of failure, he takes his losses in stride. Overall, his measure of confidence in himself coupled with his inclination toward the fearsome lend him a very daring, and very respectable, personality facet.

Flaws:

Abrasive — Emotional stability does not necessarily lead to understanding of one’s diction as overtly harsh. Slate will not understand that stating that someone is lying hurts feelings, or that calling someone a strung out coke fiend might incite physical violence. He does not see his phrasing as abrasive, or his mannerisms as distant, even though anyone with eyes would think otherwise. He often slights people - friends or coworkers or strangers, it matters little - mostly out of habit or kneejerk reaction and won’t apologize for his behavior. To be frank, Slate is very good at unfriending people at an alarming pace.

Easily Disinterested — If Slate picks up on presented information quickly, he loses interest just as easily. He prefers dangerous and demanding activities, or difficult and cerebral concepts to wrap his mind around, so when confronted with somewhat benign subject matter he will often turn his nose up at it. He will explain his reasoning for abandoning certain activities or assignments, which leads to presumptions that Slate is also conceited. Ergo, he can’t be arsed to play most sports, won’t touch a board game unless it’s chess, and is allergic to the young adult section in the library (William Faulkner never bothered him anyway). In a phrase, Slate comes off as a stuck-up jackass.


The New:

Virtues:

Empathetic — Slate tries to take care of those he likes. He genuinely tries to make connections, to understand where someone came from, to comprehend and respect their choices. Most people come from experiences entirely different from his, which molds them into fascinating figures that he can look up to and learn from to an extraordinary capacity. People are great, and usually, Slate likes them. He enjoys making them smile. He enjoys connecting with them in a manner that's deeper than simple talk of the weather or menial facets of life. Friendships are the greatest assets to life, and Slate wants to explore these friendships as deeply as he can.

Flaws:

Timid — Slate's word choice intimates great timidity. With constant filler words like "uh", "just", and "kinda", Slate neuters any sense of confidence that comes from his body posture. Apart from his affect, he struggles at times with approaching people for requests or simple questions, and will occasionally refrain from even asking. His uncertainty may lead to more dominating personalities dictating the course of the conversation, or even manipulating his actions to serve their purposes - and Slate seldom finds the confidence to stand up to them. Due to this trait, he finds much more comfort in following someone than trying to lead - and it absolves him of a lot of personal responsibility.

Selectively Moralistic — Slate most certainly has morals, but they do not always apply to him - or apply to everyone in the same manner. His moral compass is a self-serving one that often exuses himself or those he loves from wrongdoing while chastizing others beyond his friend circle for those same transgressions. If he stole a loaf of bread from market because he was starving, this act is excused by virtue of its necessity, but if someone he doesn't know commits the same act, they were wrong for doing it and should have sought help from a soup kitchen or other more legal source. Surprisingly, he's not actually conscious of this flaw; when it surfaces, he hasn't yet put two and two together in regards to the duplicity of the situation.


Strickenized
APPROVED
PostPosted: Mon Dec 26, 2016 8:53 am


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Midgard of Chronos
Reason for Revision: Aluminite has purified into Midgard
Link to Old Profile: Here
Link to Revised Profile: Here

APPROVED

Nuxaz



eldritch stardust


Kawaii Prophet

PostPosted: Thu Dec 29, 2016 11:48 am


MAJOR REVISION
Character Name: Maera
Reason for Revision: Cruithne was youmafied
Link to Old Profile:xxx
Link to Revised Profile: xxx

APPROVED
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