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-Broken wings-
What is the reason for broken wings?
an answer i want above all things.
You once told me of the sky
of precious seraphs who did fly.
But, why did the seraph leave us then?
with no traces of where they've been.
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If you knew, if you could see
then you'd know all i could be.
That seraphs live on Earth to love,
and willingly choose not to thrive above.
They stay hidden, but stay in sight
wanting to stay, never returning to flight.
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Do you know? Can you see?
Then you know all about me
I stay for love, I stay for you
Because with you my dreams come true.
And with your love, and pain it brings
I'll gladly suffer a thousand broken wings...
- by Nurse Garland |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/27/2009 |
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- Title: -Broken wings-
- Artist: Nurse Garland
- Description: i wrote it because i feel .. well idk how i feel enjoy plz
- Date: 03/27/2009
- Tags: broken wings
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Comments (7 Comments)
- layccsmexciicupcake - 09/22/2009
- i love yours and i would be honored if you read mine because yours is so good ^_^
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- cooll666725 - 04/03/2009
- Very beautiful. XD It's one of the few poems I've seen with correct grammar. And, it has rhythm. ^_^ I'll give it a 5/5 Go and read my poems sometime. XD
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- Nisa the Brown Nose Clown - 04/02/2009
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One word I got for you. Talent.
I was truly shocked, in all honestly, but I found the rythm flowing with only a bump here or there. But of all the poems I've read on Gaia, this has got to be the best I've yet to see. I'd love to read more of your works in the feature. 5/5. C: - Report As Spam
- Jazzy104_music - 03/31/2009
- I have no words...it is just marvelous and beautiful and enchanting and the feeling in it is simply magnificent...a definite 5/5 smile
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- kryptic_valiance - 03/30/2009
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this is very, very good. i'm doing my BEST to TRY and find some flaws in it, but I just can't. There's only one awkward rhyme in the third stanza. This is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read.
So I'll focus on all the good stuff! Great rhyming (work on the third stanza though), it flows really well when you read it aloud, and for one of those "girly" love poem things, this is really good. 5/5 - Report As Spam
- LunarLeon - 03/27/2009
- finish ur description *cough* heheh kiddin perfect as always...grr i gotta do better
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- Ousto Logra - 03/27/2009
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It's great. <3
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