Death on a winters night. . .

• Artist: S E X U A L-R A W R
• Description: Well Er I wrote this when i was mad and in love AND sad of what happen to me...Idk If i should name it death on a winters night or Til death do us part thingy....D:
• Date: 12/15/2008
• Tags: death winters night tildeathdouspart

Death is like a winters night. . . .
Cold, Mournful, Lonely...
A soulless body hanged in the air
with a bloody rose in the victims hands...
a girl who had her heart broken into pieces...never to be found....
and the flower stands for her name and her love for her lover who hurt her, blamed and lied..
And on a dark, sad winter night...
she hanged herself with bloody tears running down her cold pale white lifeless cheek...
never to be loved again...
and when her lover walked down the stone path next morning...
he saw her body hanging in the tree with the rose he gave her and saw that he did something horrible to his true love..
so he hanged himself next to her holding her lifeless cold hand while he slowly dies and waits to be with her in the night sky on a winters night......

Comments

[S E X U A L-R A W R]

Um hello this was wayy ******** old, i have more better poems :/ this was like 2 years ago, i didnt even think of fixing it

[ProfessorKC]

Eh ... If one of my students would turn this in for English 101 ... I might give it a "C" ...
A rewrite with more imagery of how she hurts, why she hurts and how she dangles waiting on the tree for her lover, ANYTHING would be good. You just plug away at the action in the poem and pass up a great dal of opportunity to put a nice quirky modern goth piece together.

[xXThexEvilxPoptardXx]

awww.. D;