The Dance

• Artist: JeanMorgan
• Description: As the title states, it's about a dance. Specificly a competition.
  Anyway, the enjambment was done on purpose....
  It's called style...
  Any comments will be loved!
• Date: 07/17/2008
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And so I began the passionate dance
The string bass created the tangible beat
With a glance I led the first turn
Spin
ning, and her heels match each step
I took, my partner's dress was an enchanted flame.

It was hot there - my world a flame
The tango was not our favorite dance
Not because of each complicated step
Not because of the unsyncopated beat
But because of every spin
Every turn after turn

We'd waited backstage 'till it was our turn
It was intolerably hot - as if being surrounded by flame
I was nervous - dizzy - my head started to spin
I was honestly scared of this dance
Though she and I know we're the couple to beat
I felt my stomach lurch every time i took a step

We grew closer with every step
I led another turn
We were on top of the beat
My nervousness was a dying flame
It was not with her, but with the music I dance
ed, another turn

Spin
ning, my life hanging on every step
All dependent on this dance
How hellish it could turn
My world consumed by flame
s, then brought back by the deafening beat

Of the bass drum, the beat beating beat
The continuous spin
Out of control, like an over-fed flame
Trying to run away with every step
I took, with the dance, my life turn
s around, and my partner rescues me with the dance.

And with the dance I learned to beat
The fear that made my stomach turn and my head spin
And now every step I take is towards a new type of flame.

Comments

[JeanMorgan]

Oh... uh... thanks, Hunter....
-blush-

[The_Huntsman_Of_Lore]

Wow... Not really your style is it?
Great job adapting to the format. Note to all who don't know: This is a sestina. Six stanzas and the closing. And each stanza has six lines, repeating six words in a specific order. Jean usually does free/blank verse.
I like the repetition, it was almost like a dance. All the circles you created with your words. It was like watching you dance. To everyone else: Watching her dance is such a treat. ^.^

[DRSkittlesMC650 ddsmd]

it was awesome!your such a good artist,i mean the song touch my body isn't my favorite,but you made the song way better!=)

[blackthorn12]

During the second and your third verse it was in a way going around the bush....But its description is unbelievable....You can be a poet

[Shortstopkate]

awesome