shadow of the wolves

• Artist: sakura haruno is hot
• Description: this is a book i was working on by myself and its part one of many chapters lol
• Date: 05/31/2009
• Tags: shadow wolves

One day the chief of a village and his 20 year old son went hunting in the woods.While they were hunting they saw something rustle in the bushes,they went to see what it was,and it turned out to be a boy that was badly injured.They took him back to there village.When he woke up he didn't remember anything all he remembered was his name which was shadow.

Comments

[skipperthekid]

didnt say A chapter they said part 1 of many chapters...who says this isnt just part of a chapter...anyway so far it's good...get the story done first before worrying about periods and commas

[Commando Axton]

This is a chapter? More like a paragraph. You need spaces by the periods and commas. But, selfish question of my own, does he have, per chance, silver hair and red eyes?

[Meow tcup Valo]

i feel it needs a more relaxed flow
its like your just giving me one line information.
if that makes sense..o.O