- by Jessie Bangs Hard |
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- | Submitted on 08/14/2011 |
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- Title: Flame of Enchantment
- Artist: Jessie Bangs Hard
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Description:
It's basically a passionate, steamy kind of poem with out being to explicit. It tells of a side of humans that all want something dangerous to thrill them... Results of being bored, enjoy!
~Jessie - Date: 08/14/2011
- Tags: flame enchantment lust power sexy
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Comments (1 Comments)
- Zailem - 08/15/2011
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Eh.. it's okay, but when making a poem that rhyms, try making the "tempo" fit. For instance, when you typed,
" We all have a dark side,
We have to abide,"
, it's obvious that "side" and "abide" rhym but in my opinion to make it work try adding a little more to the second verse. Beside that, everything else seems fine smile 3/5 - Report As Spam
