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Posted: Thu Apr 29, 2010 5:56 pm
Quote: MINOR REVISIONCharacter Name:Howl Wickham Reason for Revision: More or less, I have been unofficially RPing Howl with this extra virtue and flaw, and I figured it was about time to make it more official. Quote: Nothing... adding 1 more virtue and 1 more flaw to Quote: Virtue:Observant - Howl is the young man who will notice when someone got a haircut or is wearing a new shirt. He's the one who would notice when a girl is not wearing a ring she is usually seen wearing. He's the one who remembers that a friend prefers his coffee with cream and a teaspoon of sugar, no more, no less. He'll remember little details, and if for some reason he suspects he won't remember, he will write down the information in his journal. If anything, his observant ways are probably what led him into watching people the first place. Flaw:Guarded - There are few that Howl will call a "friend" over the title of "acquaintance," and even fewer that he can genuinely say he trusts. Perhaps it is just his formal mannerisms getting in the way of forming any close relationships, or maybe it branched off from some of his obsession issues, but Howl is not an open book to be read by anybody. If there is a way to avoid mention of something he doesn't want a person to know, Howl will take that route by tastefully omitting key details or changing the topic altogether. APPROVED by Maru.
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Posted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 10:07 pm
Quote: Nessariah Quote: MAJOR REVISION Character Name: Audrey Collins || Captain Linarite Reason for Revision: She does not fit her original set virtues and flaws whatsoever. They had to go. Link to Old Profile: Journal~ Link to Revised Profile: Revision~ Crit left by Maru, further marking needed -- please repost after editing.Edited, homes. APPROVED by Maru.
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Posted: Sun May 02, 2010 9:35 am
Quote: MINOR REVISION Character Name: Alessa David Reason for Revision: minor character development/change over time, and reformulating of a virtue. Quote: OLD HOBBY +Babysitting. Now, now, don’t look at me like that. Taking care of the young or the weak not only provides her decent incomes whenever she needs money, but it is also one of the few things that make her feel useful and whole. She's often considered by kids to be too boring, but no parent so far has had any complaint to file. Because when she really does focus on an activity, such as this one, she loses all clumsiness. to Quote: REVISED HOBBY +Volunteering at the hospital. Alessa used to do a lot more babysitting before arriving to Destiny City. Today? She visits a lot of patients at the hospital, doing her best to entertain the hurt and sick a little. Fortunately, focusing on such an important situation like that makes her lose all clumsiness, and so far, nobody has really complained yet. Contrary to her babysitting activities, she doesn’t earn anything but that warm feeling she’s useful and whole. Most of the people she sees seem to be teenagers, and though it certainly helps conversation and distraction-wise, their number starts creeping her out. Particularly serious cases tend to leave her with nightmares, but she tries dealing with it (considering she wants to be a nurse, she can’t afford to put the psychological training aside anyway). Quote: OLD FLAW -Ready to explode. … after accumulating enough steam, she snaps. It can result in a lot of shouting, stuff being broken, or even kicking. The last offense can be a drop, and she will react violently, leaving everyone puzzled. Alessa will go to her normal state fairly quickly and apologize profusely. Because most of the time, she really doesn’t mean it. To prevent that, she clears her mind with her hobbies, but it’s not always enough. It’s best if nobody but her (and maybe the victim) witnesses her snapping. to Quote: REVISED FLAW -Obvious insecurity. …the steam accumulates over time, and she hardly knows how to get rid of it. Alessa doesn’t whine for fear of being considered annoying, she does not argue either. It is not that she wants to be loved so hard; it is just that she has an extreme fear of being hated. She will bottle the emotions she judges negative for a relationship (whether they would have an actual incidence on it or not). When you’re careful, you may notice she’s excessively cheerful or apologetic for no reason. Alessa is not honest at all about her feelings. Sometimes, she can snap unexpectedly in various ways: kicking objects, throwing insults at people, have a sobbing fit, run away… this girl tries to keep control of her emotions, but when she fails, she fails hard. These fits will greatly embarrass her if it happens publicly, and that will only lead her to being even more apologetic and dishonest. She will never be quite comfortable opening up, and that will probably annoy most people who have a minimal amount of empathy and can perceive she’s trying to hide something. Quote: OLD VIRTUE +Easygoing. Alessa is very much able to question and make fun of herself. It’s hard to actually offend her. There is no such thing as “srs bsns” to her. She can put her dignity aside temporarily for a good laugh. And because she doesn’t believe in extremism, only exceptional circumstances can possibly make her force someone to do anything. Do as you will as long as it doesn’t hurt anyone! She’s not the funniest gal in the universe, far from it, but chances you’ll enjoy her sense of humor all the same. to Quote: REVISED VIRTUE +Easygoing. Alessa is very much able to question and make fun of herself. It’s hard to actually offend her. There is no such thing as “srs bsns” to her. She can put her dignity aside temporarily for a good laugh. And because she doesn’t believe in extremism, only exceptional circumstances can possibly make her force someone to do anything. Do as you will as long as it doesn’t hurt anyone! She’s not the funniest gal in the universe, far from it, but chances you’ll enjoy her sense of humor all the same. When she has the occasion to do something remotely unusual, be sure there will be a lot of cheesiness and self-deprecation involved in that activity. Her way of dealing with not-so-ordinary things involves a lot of what she’s seeing in her favourite movies – while still being friendly and caring, of course. “Tonight, we dine in HELL! Also called the pizzeria at the corner of Generic Street, but we're going because I got coupons.”This is the only remotely original character trait most people notice, and she still is unlikely to be spontaneously hilarious without someone doing it first. Approved by Kali.
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Posted: Mon May 17, 2010 11:50 am
Quote: iStoleYurVamps Quote: MAJOR REVISIONCharacter Name: Elzo Xanis Reason for Revision: After Two power ups, and god knows how many RPs later, his character has developed to the point that his old profile isn't that reflective of his current character. Link to Old Profile:XLink to Revised Profile: X Crit left by Maru, further marking needed -- please repost after editing.Edited APPROVED by Maru
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 8:36 am
Quote: MINOR REVISION Character Name: MuCephi Reason for Revision: Invalid powerup? Quote: OLD VIRTUE/FLAW/HOBBY HERE 1) Bad Blood - using the blood from her own injuries, may flick the beads of blood - changing them to become sharp 'droplets' that nick and cut the opponent for little damage but small sharp pain. (Current) 2) Truth of Blood - if someone has bled recently she can attempt to track them where they fled. //Felt this 2nd attack was too unrelated despite being approved of at the time, also lacked an eternal attack. to Quote: REVISED VIRTUE/FLAW/HOBBY HERE 1) - Bad Blood - using the blood from her own injuries, may flick the beads of blood - changing them to become sharp 'droplets' that nick and cut the opponent for little damage but small sharp pain. (Current) 1a) - Bad Blood Ribbons - Using the blood from her own injuries or from a team mate she now 'casts' a thin ribbon or 'wire' of blood that does a slightly deeper injury than before and more in 'lines' than the more likely pinpoint damage of the 'needles' B) - Bad Blood Revelation! - She must pick a single bleeding injury on her target. Once cast, the blood welling from that wound, once it comes in contact with air/leaves the confines of the skin, it behaves like a shallow knife, as it runs down the skin it causes shallow cuts until such time as it falls free of that person. It cuts no one but the target, but continues to cause these shallow cuts until such time as the wound is bound or 40 seconds has passed - this attack can be cast only 3 times daily. Approved by Kali.
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Posted: Tue May 25, 2010 4:45 pm
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Posted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 3:47 am
MINOR REVISIONCharacter Name: Serandite Reason for Revision: OLD STUFF IS OLD Quote: [ ♪ Eye on the main chance: ] She goes along with things with one condition. They must have some sort of benefit for her. She doesnt care if about anyone else's part in the deal. If not, deal's off. She becomes a negaverse for the enjoyment and prestige. to Quote: Trusting: There's not much in Serah's head, aside from fun, bunnies and more fun. While she knows the definition of caution and distance, it's rare for her to exercise the meaning of the word or to look further into people's actions. There's no such thing as a "distanced relationship" when concerning her. She's open and trusting with those around her, attaching an immediate familiarity regardless of their opinion or attitude towards her. Even though some may label it childish naivete to hold such trust in everyone, even if it's slapped back in her face, she continues to hold onto her ideals fiercely with intense stubbornness. Approved by Lithia.
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 9:14 pm
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Posted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 6:33 am
MAJOR REVISIONCharacter Name: Sailor Scorpio/Angela Bryne Reason for Revision: I've been meaning to do this for a long, long while. I created her profile before actually enjoying rp in this shop and before the Zodiacs came to be. As such, I felt it was missing small things that should have been there, to reflect that. I don't know. Her profile has bothered me for a long while and I felt it needed a reworking ;;; I mostly just rephrased and fleshed out the stuff and added one hobby. Link to Old Profile: HereLink to Revised Profile: HereApproved by Lithia.
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Posted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:09 pm
MINOR REVISIONCharacter Name: Ellie Spectre / Sailor Iris Reason for Revision: Sailor Iris never got an Eternal attack, because I am a special kind of person with fail. Quote: Hi, there is nothing here because Lizzy is a failure to Quote: Attack #2 NAME: Iris Rainbow Revenge [What it does] Using both hands, Iris forms a small-medium sized rainbow of bright colored light. Using the arch that is formed, Iris can throw this rainbow in a style similar to a boomerang. If everything is successful, it will cause moderate-heavy damage (usually in the form of a burn from the intense light) and typically stun the opponent. Iris can only use this attack one time in battle, and if for some reason the attack misses its mark, it is not renewable in any sense (the rainbow vanishes when it makes any impact, whether it is the ground or the back of Iris' own head).
However, this attack requires great skill and has much more potential to fail than to work properly.
It requires a great amount of energy and concentration to form the rainbow properly. If not created properly, when thrown, the color bands can break apart from each other and shoot in different directions, growing exponentially weaker for each time the rainbow breaks apart. If they form 2 separate bands, there is still hope for causing minor damage and stunning, but 3 separate bands or more are relatively ineffective. If it breaks down to the maximum number of 7 separate bands, it doesn't even feel like you got hit at all. (Note: There is no ricocheting effect in this attack at all, despite what the reference suggests) If anything, it does serve as a great distraction! There's the saying that "it's all in the flick of the wrist." It is extremely applicable with this attack. This attack needs to be thrown a certain way to even make any distance, and requires great aim and foresight as well. If thrown improperly, it will only go a few feet, land on the ground, and disappear. If thrown decently enough, it can make distance, but not necessarily make a return loop back. If Iris doesn't have any sense of foresight, it is possible for it to loop back and hit her (or an ally) and essentially cause damage to herself (or the ally). It's a one-shot deal! Iris cannot catch the attack in her hand when it loops back, otherwise she will take the full damage of the attack. If she misses the target, then she is SoL. (P.S. - NOTE: I know it is a very BIG WALL OF TEXT... but the main idea I am going for here is Iris' attack is meant to be hard to pull off/requires skill+control. ) Approved by Lithia.
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Posted: Fri Aug 27, 2010 1:29 pm
Quote: MAJOR REVISION Character Name: Elke Arma/Soldier Virgo Reason for Revision: Through play and plot, the character has changed. 8| The old profile seems really shallow. Link to Old Profile: xLink to Revised Profile: x APPROVED by Mouse
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Posted: Sat Sep 25, 2010 11:25 am
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Posted: Sat Sep 25, 2010 7:50 pm
Quote: MINOR REVISION Character Name: Tallulah Cowden Reason for Revision: The character has developed to the point that I don't think this flaw really applies anymore. It's never been actively played and was originally added because I was short one and scraping for ideas. Quote: Couldn't hurt a fly: Tallulah has a soft spot for animals, and she will drop whatever she is doing to protect an animal in need or to help it. As for being attacked by animals... she'll defend herself, but she'll refuse to go on the offensive, and she certainly won't like it one bit. to Quote: High hopes, average reality: Tallulah expects a lot from herself and from others, maybe a little too much. When her expectations and her reality don't quite mesh, she takes it out on herself. Between her high expectations and the obsessive fervor that Tallulah throws into projects, she is often working herself to the bone. When things aren't good enough, she mopes for a while, and then she works even harder. Mouse: This isn't reading very much like a flaw at the moment. Please try and clearly demonstrate how this negatively reflects on her / how it can cause people to look down on her. Right now in spite of the moping parts it reads off about how she has high standards + works hard to meets those standards, which is more of a good trait than a bad one.Quote: Reason for Revision: Honestly this plot ended like ages ago. She no longer has this hobby and I think the profile is better served with an actively played hobby. Quote: Investigative Cell Phone Journalism: Tallulah was briefly involved in an effort to capture the senshi on film, and the results of her efforts were posted to Youtube. She has since passed the responsibility off to Alex and is no longer personally involved in what gets shot or posted. to Quote: Police Procedural Dramas: From Law and Order to NCIS to X-Files, Tallulah has probably seen the episode and remembers who the killer is. She marathons series in her free time, gobbling up the inaccurate portrayals of the legal system and cheering when good triumphs. As an offshoot of this, she tends to fret over what might happen to her if she is caught in the middle of her senshi activities, and occasionally when confronted with a situation asks “What would Gibbs/Scully/Benson do?” Approved by Mouse
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Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 5:23 pm
Quote: MINOR REVISIONCharacter Name: Serandite Reason for Revision: To okay a past thing officially <3 Quote: UH. regular bunny weapon. Quote: REVISED: Serandite's bunny gets flashlight eyes in her captain stage? *_* Approved by Mouse
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Posted: Fri Nov 05, 2010 7:28 pm
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