Pumpkin-Tali
[[ Dashing: She literally lived in a white-wash world. Her prison guards only let her know tidbits. She'd been banished for a long time. So she's old but looks young. ]]
(That doesn't explain anything. Banished from where? The
years? I honestly don't care, I'm just trying to help ya out here with your own history. Also most people don't enjoy hearing how pompous other characters are. Starting off by saying 'Well I'm as old as this, and I'm as old as that.' is just silly
rigum morandu. See that there, I just made up two words. Anyways, the point is your character doesn't feel real at all. It's like she's just a floating voice and there's no real body to her. Why would anyone who's been in prison for FOREVER start off by talking like that, being so open? No one, that's who. You'd be reserved, probably not want to speak to others so quickly, become abrasive easily due to lack of human contact.
Take the steps to truly flesh out your character before just slabbing down something that looks silly when it's read out loud.)