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Slightfoxing

PostPosted: Tue Feb 14, 2006 6:48 pm


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PostPosted: Tue Feb 14, 2006 6:53 pm


Odd, yes, but lovely. I liked it. 3nodding Kind of reminds me of that book I read a couple years ago - Stargirl.

Clavissima


Jaime P

PostPosted: Wed Feb 15, 2006 3:15 pm


Kill the blue hair and I'll like this even more.

I love the whole 'Runaway Bus' thing xd
PostPosted: Fri Feb 17, 2006 10:14 am


Heh, I really liked this story, espically the last part about her riding the bus like a rodeo cowgirl. whee There are some sentences that seem to contradict eachother or get redundent, but aside from that it was really quite good.

Sergeant Sargent
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Sui the foot doktor
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 18, 2006 11:37 am


Discord: Sui's History Teacher.

I liked it, although I think it might have been better if it had been a middle school or something. Discord seems to knowledgable about the things she attacks to be a young kid.
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