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 Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:33 pm
No, this isn't necessarily Anti-Twilight.
I have recently come upon the realization that my novel is poorly written. I'm about halfway through. I'm wondering if I should complete it or start it over. So here are the factors:
- I have gotten advice that one should continue writing their book, even if it stinks. That's what rewriting is for, they say.
- I want to change it around. I want to change it from 1st person to 3rd person. And I want to make it MUCH MORE anti-Twilight and have MANY MORE counter-Twilight messages.
- I want to actually get it finished.
- I want to get it finished less than a decade from now.
So, what should I do? (Also, there's another option. I can abort that project for now and start on my Anti-Twilight book, which I've wanted to make for a long time now.)
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:37 pm
Huh..Do ya have any drafts to show us?
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:39 pm
I took this quote at random. Totally random. Quote: I gagged. Thankfully, I didn’t throw up. “Oh my God,” said Victoria in disbelief, “did you just drink blood?” Alfonso laughed, and I knew he was either really, incredibly, indescribably insane, or he was just joking. He opened the thermos again and held it up to me. I smelled it. I rolled my eyes. Turning to Victoria, I said, “Coffee.” “That was mean!” she laughed with the embarrassment that she was so easily convinced. “All right,” he admitted, “it was mean. Although,” he turned to look at me, “I know about a thousand and one ways to scare, anger, and disgust you. And I’ll warn you now, Dustin.” His red eyes seemed to glow. I widened my eyes involuntarily, and took in a breath. He flashed his sharp fangs. “You’d better be wary.”
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:39 pm
koolkitty752 Do ya have any drafts to show us?
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:42 pm
But the way I write it sounds totally, 100% like Twilight.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 1:55 pm
Jerba I took this quote at random. Totally random. Quote: I gagged. Thankfully, I didn’t throw up. “Oh my God,” said Victoria in disbelief, “did you just drink blood?” Alfonso laughed, and I knew he was either really, incredibly, indescribably insane, or he was just joking. He opened the thermos again and held it up to me. I smelled it. I rolled my eyes. Turning to Victoria, I said, “Coffee.” “That was mean!” she laughed with the embarrassment that she was so easily convinced. “All right,” he admitted, “it was mean. Although,” he turned to look at me, “I know about a thousand and one ways to scare, anger, and disgust you. And I’ll warn you now, Dustin.” His red eyes seemed to glow. I widened my eyes involuntarily, and took in a breath. He flashed his sharp fangs. “You’d better be wary.” Hm, well with this one quote you could try to cut down on the adjectives. That stood out at me when I was reading it. When you say "or he was just joking" it might sound better if you took out the just. It makes the sentence seem a little forced. When You say "I smelled it. I rolled my eyes" Try turning that in to one sentence. It has potential and you should definatley keep writing!
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 2:16 pm
TerriblyWorriedWoodchuck Jerba I took this quote at random. Totally random. Quote: I gagged. Thankfully, I didn’t throw up. “Oh my God,” said Victoria in disbelief, “did you just drink blood?” Alfonso laughed, and I knew he was either really, incredibly, indescribably insane, or he was just joking. He opened the thermos again and held it up to me. I smelled it. I rolled my eyes. Turning to Victoria, I said, “Coffee.” “That was mean!” she laughed with the embarrassment that she was so easily convinced. “All right,” he admitted, “it was mean. Although,” he turned to look at me, “I know about a thousand and one ways to scare, anger, and disgust you. And I’ll warn you now, Dustin.” His red eyes seemed to glow. I widened my eyes involuntarily, and took in a breath. He flashed his sharp fangs. “You’d better be wary.” Hm, well with this one quote you could try to cut down on the adjectives. That stood out at me when I was reading it. When you say "or he was just joking" it might sound better if you took out the just. It makes the sentence seem a little forced. When You say "I smelled it. I rolled my eyes" Try turning that in to one sentence. It has potential and you should definatley keep writing! See, that's the way I wrote the whole thing. That's why I wanted to rewrite it.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 3:54 pm
Are you completely finished with it? if not keep writing. Just be conscious of your writing and how you are writing. editing's a b***h with a good story., even worse with a bad one. Yours is good. keep going! you can do it!
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 4:07 pm
Jerba I took this quote at random. Totally random. Quote: I gagged. Thankfully, I didn’t throw up. “Oh my God,” said Victoria in disbelief, “did you just drink blood?” Alfonso laughed, and I knew he was either really, incredibly, indescribably insane, or he was just joking. He opened the thermos again and held it up to me. I smelled it. I rolled my eyes. Turning to Victoria, I said, “Coffee.” “That was mean!” she laughed with the embarrassment that she was so easily convinced. “All right,” he admitted, “it was mean. Although,” he turned to look at me, “I know about a thousand and one ways to scare, anger, and disgust you. And I’ll warn you now, Dustin.” His red eyes seemed to glow. I widened my eyes involuntarily, and took in a breath. He flashed his sharp fangs. “You’d better be wary.” Try to avoid making three word sentences, unless you're making a point from them. Instead try something a little more....visual...well...or smellable (lol, my word inventing). Like: the smell of the liquids wafted up to my nose. I rolled my eyes as I turned to Victoria....
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 4:09 pm
Epic quote. But yeah, cut down on the Thesaurus humping.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 4:43 pm
KingJack! Epic quote. But yeah, cut down on the Thesaurus humping. ._. Actually I think I only used the Thesaurus once or twice... And I'm not asking for writing tips! I'm asking whether I should continue and rewrite or just rewrite! What epic quote?
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 4:49 pm
Jerb, I say that you don't need so many quotes, it doesn't flow well to me. Character development is best when shown indirectly rather than "So and so thinks THIS and says THIS". Situational actions and subtle nuances are what bring out character, at least to me. It's about the way they react as relative to their fellow characters, if that made sense at all. And use details when you feel they need to be there, otherwise leave it to the reader to infer things and interpret them as they will.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:13 pm
koolkitty752 Jerb, I say that you don't need so many quotes, it doesn't flow well to me. Character development is best when shown indirectly rather than "So and so thinks THIS and says THIS". Situational actions and subtle nuances are what bring out character, at least to me. It's about the way they react as relative to their fellow characters, if that made sense at all. And use details when you feel they need to be there, otherwise leave it to the reader to infer things and interpret them as they will. I'm not asking for writing tips! gonk I have learned all there is to know about plot and character development and clear writing and I just need to know whether I should continue or bail!
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:16 pm
Jerba koolkitty752 Jerb, I say that you don't need so many quotes, it doesn't flow well to me. Character development is best when shown indirectly rather than "So and so thinks THIS and says THIS". Situational actions and subtle nuances are what bring out character, at least to me. It's about the way they react as relative to their fellow characters, if that made sense at all. And use details when you feel they need to be there, otherwise leave it to the reader to infer things and interpret them as they will. I'm not asking for writing tips! gonk I have learned all there is to know about plot and character development and clear writing and I just need to know whether I should continue or bail! Oh lol. In that case, bail.
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Posted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 5:47 pm
Jerba koolkitty752 Jerb, I say that you don't need so many quotes, it doesn't flow well to me. Character development is best when shown indirectly rather than "So and so thinks THIS and says THIS". Situational actions and subtle nuances are what bring out character, at least to me. It's about the way they react as relative to their fellow characters, if that made sense at all. And use details when you feel they need to be there, otherwise leave it to the reader to infer things and interpret them as they will. I'm not asking for writing tips! gonk I have learned all there is to know about plot and character development and clear writing and I just need to know whether I should continue or bail! 
I'm fairly certain if you knew everything about clear writing, I think you could answer yourself?
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