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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:46 am


Death’s Sweet Song

If the call was loud
My heart would swell
And I could burst upwards
And fly to the moon




The call was, however, soft. Like the lullaby you hear as you drift off to sleep under the stars. It washes over you, while the shell of the body turns numb and the mind is set free. No, the spirit. That is how death is.

I wouldn’t begin to tell you that it was the same for everyone…it mustn’t be. Because mine, no matter how silent, and numb, was full of a consuming rage. And I was lifted upwards in hate and reborn as I am now.

Unseelie.





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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 2:01 am


(Everyone is using the same form, why not I? Copied from everyone! XD )

Name: Karrie Soldan
Username: Saiyajin-Neko
Wind: Northeast: An evil and vengeful wind of ice and hail. Easily angered and hard to control.
Court: Unseelie
Gender: Female
Description of Ash.

Eye color: Icy blue

Hair style and color: Long, and black with one white streak down the right, or since you'll be facing her, it'll be on the left!

Skin tones and figures: Awfully pale blue, veeerry pale.

Clothing: Kinda Gothic, very black and heavy looking. Big boots, gloves and a dress that has an old-aged corset style.

Poses or expressions:
Very serious expression I'd say. In a battle pose, holding her made weapon! Long iron chain and ball, spikes jutting out of said ball.

Tattoos, piercings, scars etc: Black tribal looking tattoos over her body, up the arms and legs, and on her face/neck. She also wears a Necklace that is a crescent moon, and is red! Has bumps like a crystal would.

Other:
n/a

Reference:
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Egg
color(s): Black, white grey
patterns: Tattoos over the eggs shell.
markings: One upside down Red crescent moon in the center, rusty looking screws around the wings, to look like they're hand-made.
cloud color: Grey and stormy, hopefully some snow.
Wing color: Iron

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 2:51 am


-Picture to come very soon-


Personality:
Karrie is quite a lost soul, and finds herself either forcing activity or just staring for hours on end at the sky. She tends to think a lot, about all sorts of things and can analyze herself and others very well. Her nature is serious, and when she speaks you can tell her mind is working at the same time.
You could piss her off with the briefest comment of ignorance or otherwise stupidity and meanness though she would not show it had bothered her, and she's happy to fight it out even.

Karrie takes great pride in her ability at weaponry and adapts her own style of fighting with them, or her bare hands. It appears to come from her inner ability, though the fact she took the time to learn fighting, is most likely because of how she was killed. defense is the best offense. (Or so they say)

Her sadistic nature may be one even she herself might want nothing to do with, though it is there no matter what.

Such as enjoying the first cut, or wanting to do something unseemly to someone, just because they're annoying. However, there is considerable doubt she might go through with it.

Element: Metal (Metallic) /Iron List of Iron Metallic and what they're used for

Ability: Karrie found her ability to be able to use her element in the most interesting of ways. Using her own power, an energy of Metallic force, she can bend and manipulate Iron for any reason. Creating weapons, and making anything with this substance do whatever she wants. Even rolling up into a useless ball. (Though not so useless if it flies at your head)

This power is limited to her own touch, so she cannot do anything to something that wasn't infused with her energy in the first place. It can also wear off once she loses the bond.

i.e, being knocked unconscious, more than 100 yards away or in a completely different room.

Reason behind this ability derives from Sienna being able to make metal puppets move, and dance...and was able to turn anything with iron or metal into a shape or figure.

Likes: Her weapons, Fighting, cold, the night sky :more to come:

Hates:

Past Song: Hana Kagari

Present Song: The Kill
PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 3:01 am


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Past:

If love were a bird, it could fly and escape the prejudice. The wind would flutter under wings that span centuries into the timeless universe and the world would sing on a cotton blanket of joy. That is how things, in an ideal world, could be.
But this world is not ideal, nor just. It isn’t merciful or kind. It simply spins around and passes by, season by season.

The truth of the matter is love is something that is so complicated, so incomprehensible, that it may be just too much to bear. Not always for the ones involved but for those around them. The two in love might not even see it coming until the cloud parts and the dagger is thrust.

That is only a simple definition, made for the brain to process. Because what happened to a couple so completely devoted to one another is just too horrible to talk about. Yet, it must be expressed.

They say that Humans are evil, that they do not care for this world and have become lazy despite the job that was entrusted to their accentors. It is very black and white. Fae dislike, or despise, humanity. They are more superior, better equipped you might even say. So what do you believe could make the two separate species fall so hard for one another?

Fate, maybe? Or perhaps just plain luck, there at the right time, the right moment. Or maybe it was the opposite. Depending on who tells the story, it could be either. The wrong time, the wrong moment.

If you asked Sienna she might tell you it was a bit of all these things combined. Unfortunately, she is dead. Reborn, even. But that story isn’t now; this is the tale of a beautiful Fae and an average Human male, called Haku who traded stock and vegetables to the Fae courts.


((STORY COMING SOON))

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 3:19 am


Guardian


Name: Zarita Soldan
Type: Fae
Court: From Unseelie, acting as Neutral.
Gender: Female
Height: 5'3
Skin: Tan
Eyes: Green
Hair: Dark brown, curls.

Personality:
Responsible and empathic.
A dark haired Fae, Zarita covers herself from the Human world and follows the woodlands trails or walks upon beaches. Her link with the Unseelie are what keeps her grounded though she herself is Neutral to the debate on Humans. When she was appointed guardian to her new charge, the world became a completely different place for her. Suddenly, purpose sprang forth and she put all her attention into the life she nurtures.

Past: Zarita was married to a man inside the Unseelie court, named Camron Soldan. He worked hard and was a valued member, until one unexpected act of compassion made him turn against the plan to hurt Humans and stop it dead in its tracks!! He fled the scene, leaving his wife behind to pick up the pieces. Disgusted with his act, she never tracked him down.

Likes: Nature, natural elements, sleeping outside.

Hates: Nothing. Just mild dislike for certain things.
PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 3:25 am


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That be right, foo'! I pay, hope for bribe or custom slot, or maybe to win in a flatsale/raffle/auction.

Pure Gold: 240k

Items: Angelic Pendant. - Worth 2,197,760g

My organs: Liver, Kidney, Lung. (Delivery price extra, will have to use airmail) =D

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 9:15 am


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PostPosted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 11:15 am


I don't really have any critique but it sounds good to me so far. =D

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 28, 2008 9:05 am


Critique!!!

Pre-warning
The below is a critique. Not a praise of your work, nor a full on attack on your ideas. If you can't take a little critisism, don't read it. Not everything will be positive. If you have problems with it, please PM me directly. On the other hand, if it's something you're just clearing up.
Example-
"I don't get his green hair,"
"It's because he was a tree in his past life"
Then it's all good, just no flaming.
This is an expression of my opinion, and in no manner means that it HAS TO BE done.

Sorry for the formalities, just keeping it unpersonal.


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INTRO
Nice little bit here, good to have. Makes me WANT to read more.

KARRIE SOLDAN
Nice name, not much to say here. I like it. Got any meaning to her? If so, try explaing.

EYES-
Ice blue, hints at isolation. Makes sence. Though the contrats very sharply to her black attire. Her dress is already very eye catching, why do her eyes need to be?

SKIN TONE
The first thing that came to mind here, was vampire. White to the point of looking grey. Like a statue? I don't see much relevence in this other than it clarifies her loner like status and dislike for being around others.

CLOTHING
antiquty is a good, it gives us a hint of what time era she may have been from. But once more, more definition is needed. Why does she like them? Because they are black represent her 'Inner soul'? Even if she's a bit lonly, saddness has more than one color. Especially if that saddness was caused by someone else. Maybe flaming red anger or bloodshed, or blue tears, just mis things up. She's a bit monoton and it sounds like she stepped out of a black and white film from the 19th centurey ( if they had had them back then).

MARKS
I don't have enough info on these to give opinion. Again, reason woukd be good to know.

PERSONALITY
'You could piss her off with the briefest comment though she would not show it had bothered her, and she's happy to fight it out even'
That's a very general statment and can be said about pretty much everyone. Try to be specific. What kind of circumstance would push her? People poking her for five hours straight, calling her a bad name. Try to stay away from family when asking yourself this, as it's also pretty general and goes for everyone.

Why the heck can this girl fight? I mean seriosuly. She was a little fae girl who fell in love, so in the next life she beomes facinatd in weapons? It makes very little sence and seem like something added on for the sake of it. Says the girl with the dress maker who can see ghosts xD I don't undertsand this ability at all.

Sadistic, two second ago you were saying she was contemplative and quiet. Now she's sadistic and it's 'there no matter what'. So even when she's easting she's fighting the urge to hurt somone? Odd.

LIKES
Do you mean like a flail only without the wooden stick? Anyway, her likes a pretty short, find some more out.

DISLIKES
Hot weather, again. Why?
Pink, the color of the girl like attributes it can be associated with. Pink is actually really nice when worked into a good gothic outfit, so I'm not sure what's wrong with it. If it's what it stands for then try explaining them. 'acting too girly', ' cry babies', drama queens' etc.
Love. Again, very general. You forgot about all the other types. Platonic, sibbling, parent. Romantic isn't the only love out there.

HISTROY
I know it's a pain, but I really suggest you type this up in entirity. Don't just leave it as 'they were happy'. Go into that detail, otherwise it's hard to get a feel for that relationship, hard to feel sad for her when she looses it, it keeps the reading away as opposed to bringing them closer.

ZARITA
Her lack of activity in the courts makes her a very forgetable character. Fae can;t sit back and say 'I'm not in this' they don't have a choice. If the queen of the court tells them to jump, they hit the moon and keep on going until she says so. From what i know of courts, turning your back on them can mean a heavy penalty and isnt as easy as 'i'm off to find myself'
PostPosted: Thu Aug 28, 2008 9:33 am


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KARRIE SOLDAN
Nice name, not much to say here. I like it. Got any meaning to her? If so, try explaing.


Just made it up. Soldan is a Spanish last name (I believe) and Karrie was just a name that came to me when I imagined her. It has no purpose.

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EYES-
Ice blue, hints at isolation. Makes sence. Though the contrats very sharply to her black attire. Her dress is already very eye catching, why do her eyes need to be?


Changed to Grey! lol! I have no clue actually what to do about her eyes, it just seemed, since her past self had dark blue, they might change in that respect. It was just an idea. o.o; I'll think about it some more.

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SKIN TONE
The first thing that came to mind here, was vampire. White to the point of looking grey. Like a statue? I don't see much relevance in this other than it clarifies her loner like status and dislike for being around others.


I was thinking that since Unseelie are prone to coming out at night, her skin would be less likely to be anything but white-ish. The Sun is what colours the skin, unless they are of African-Asian or other culture its inevitable.

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CLOTHING
antiquty is a good, it gives us a hint of what time era she may have been from. But once more, more definition is needed. Why does she like them? Because they are black represent her 'Inner soul'? Even if she's a bit lonly, saddness has more than one color. Especially if that saddness was caused by someone else. Maybe flaming red anger or bloodshed, or blue tears, just mis things up. She's a bit monoton and it sounds like she stepped out of a black and white film from the 19th centurey ( if they had had them back then).


She just prefers to remain unnoticed, though I guess the tattoos are a bit obvious. I work well with black and white shades, not sure why! XD I'd rather she didn't have any other colours, mostly because its not her style. >.>;

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MARKS
I don't have enough info on these to give opinion. Again, reason would be good to know.


Will come up with a reason, HUZZAH!!
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PERSONALITY
'You could piss her off with the briefest comment though she would not show it had bothered her, and she's happy to fight it out even'
That's a very general statement and can be said about pretty much everyone. Try to be specific. What kind of circumstance would push her? People poking her for five hours straight, calling her a bad name. Try to stay away from family when asking yourself this, as it's also pretty general and goes for everyone.

Why the heck can this girl fight? I mean seriosuly. She was a little fae girl who fell in love, so in the next life she beomes facinatd in weapons? It makes very little sence and seem like something added on for the sake of it. Says the girl with the dress maker who can see ghosts xD I don't undertsand this ability at all.

Sadistic, two second ago you were saying she was contemplative and quiet. Now she's sadistic and it's 'there no matter what'. So even when she's easting she's fighting the urge to hurt somone? Odd.


Right I’ll make that a little less confusing sometime, she’s a fighter because of how she died. Wants to be able to protect herself. Since I don’t own her yet its hard to be gospel about everything that hasn’t even happened yet to her, but its going to be clear that her fascination with weapons comes from being murdered.

Will revise her personality to be more understandable.

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LIKES
Do you mean like a flail only without the wooden stick? Anyway, her likes a pretty short, find some more out.


No, no stick. Just a chain. A long one, so she can whip it around XD Will make it longer.

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DISLIKES
Hot weather, again. Why?
Pink, the color of the girl like attributes it can be associated with. Pink is actually really nice when worked into a good gothic outfit, so I'm not sure what's wrong with it. If it's what it stands for then try explaining them. 'acting too girly', ' cry babies', drama queens' etc.
Love. Again, very general. You forgot about all the other types. Platonic, sibbling, parent. Romantic isn't the only love out there.


Yeah I did think it was a little too bleh but I don’t know her intimately yet. Will do soon, and come up with something much much better. *Laughs(*


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HISTROY
I know it's a pain, but I really suggest you type this up in entirety. Don't just leave it as 'they were happy'. Go into that detail, otherwise it's hard to get a feel for that relationship, hard to feel sad for her when she looses it, it keeps the reading away as opposed to bringing them closer.


Ok, thanks! I wondered if it was a little like that but I had to cut it short otherwise it’d be epic. So I’ll do my best but it could come out totally long and boring. LOL

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ZARITA
Her lack of activity in the courts makes her a very forgettable character. Fae can’t sit back and say 'I'm not in this' they don't have a choice. If the queen of the court tells them to jump, they hit the moon and keep on going until she says so. From what I know of courts, turning your back on them can mean a heavy penalty and isn’t as easy as 'I’m off to find myself'


I had no clue how the courts would be, and that everyone was forced to be involved in it. I thought of the medieval comment explained of them in the main shop and my instinct told me there were those who worked within, and then the people who worked AROUND it. Like farmers and sellers, who if went missing wouldn’t have an eye battered at. So if that is how it is, then that’s how I will remake.

Thanks a lot Cola really appreciate the comments and I will work on these things! Also wanted to point to the necklace she wears, which is 'red' XD I should write that down somewhere actually, completely forgot.

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