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 Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 7:05 am
so is there nothing wrong with mine, or was it accidentally forgotten?
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 8:10 am
Allegra Kori no Tamashi so is there nothing wrong with mine, or was it accidentally forgotten?
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 9:05 am
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 9:06 am
Alright, after your edits and after a Second Examination, the following profiles are APPROVED:
- Lance / Kaizen
- Stormold / Sevvyn
- Demon / Ken
- Shayera / Sayuri
- Hinote / David
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@GTack - On second examination, I feel like the Bloodline info you entered could be expanded a bit. Please add more detail there.
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Everyone else, I'm getting to you as soon as possible. Page 4 profiles and beyond are coming soon.
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 9:35 am
{{Please make all corrections within the current profile posted to avoid an over-cluttering/confusion of profiles. I will be constantly updating THIS post with people as I get to them through the day.}}
{{When you have made your edits, please post a whispered comment letting me know the edits have been made and PM me so I know to come back and look at it.}}
Beatriz - Kiyoko's Profile
- Bloodline info could use a bit more information, such as it's Weakness to Genjutsu, and how they can change density of bones, etc...
- If you don't have a companion, you can remove that section, unless you plan to get one. Certainly however, you can remove the Aburame bug evolution section.
- I can't let you take that Shinobi profession weakness unless you are willing to drop an element. Your bloodline already forces you to only have 2 elements, and as such taking this weakness would be unfair, since you'd essentially be getting the benefit for free. You need to choose a different weakness.
- Does Eternal Style of the Broken Sword list no maneuvers or techniques gained from it?
- Please mention the location of your weapon on your person and also give some more description as to what it can do.
Duo Yiro - Gage's Profile
- If you have no bloodline, feel free to remove that section of the profile. Same goes if you do not intend to have a companion.
- You need only take ONE of the Shinobi Profession weaknesses... not both.
- I wouldn't list those Rank Benefits you have not yet achieved (it may be confusing/misleading to others)
- As a Genin, you should only have access to ONE element. (Timeskip or not, you can still only have the one element until you are Chuunin)
- Where did you learn all those jutsu? First off, you only have one element, (since you are a Genin), and then on top of that I see no links to the training for all of those other jutsu. If you can supply me with evidence that you trained all of those Universal + Katon Ninjutsu/Genjutsu... you can keep them, but this timeskip would have only allowed you to auto-learn 5 ninjutsu/genjutsu TOTAL...(one of which may be C-ranked
Akura - Akura's Profile
- No picture?
- Your rank is GENIN ...(It is not Gennin)
- You did not fill out your character's Age
- Hair Color - Fill it out (I dont care if there is a picture or not... (which there isn't by the way)
- Body Type - Same thing, fill it out and don't tell me to look at the picture
- Remove the extraneous "[/.color]" tag off the end of shinobi professions
- You did not choose a Shinobi profession, or any of the benefits/etc that go with it.
- You didn't choose any shinobi types. Please do so.
- Please link your Taijutsu/Weaponstyle and list any maneuvers/techniques learned from it.
- You cannot have Puppet scrolls unless you take the Puppeteer profession.
- If you have a Custom Weapon you need to LINK it's description in the custom thread. You also need to fill out the name/Range of the weapon and describe where it is kept on your body. You also need to provide information on it's special properites... if it has any.
- You didn't fill out either the shinobi Tools or Apparel section.
Shadowmancer - Ensu's Profile
- If you have no bloodline, feel free to remove that section of the profile. Same goes if you do not intend to have a companion.
- Are you eligible for any auto-learned jutsu/taijutsu styles? I didn't see you mention that you autolearned any, and I want to make sure you are aware of it.[Check here]
Auggish - Yoru's Profile
I see nothing wrong with your profile. APPROVED
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 10:40 am
Cobra_X
Tai - Taiji's Profile
- Background info, extraneous "" at the end.
- Sharingan Clan Abilities - Could be expounded to explain what else the eyes do. As in how they help you see whats coming, essentially allowing you to dodge more easily. Also the 'Sees Chakra Colors' would be confusing to most... what do you mean by this?
- If you don't have a companion, you can remove that section, unless you plan to get one. Certainly however, you can remove the Aburame bug evolution section.
- Please define what you Shinobi profession's BASE BENEFIT actually does for you.
- Chakra Level should look like this: Medium, +3/10
- Not sure why, but there is a lot of unnecessary spacing between lines in the chakra Information section.
- I'm not sure it's legal for you to have so many elements of control.
- Do you really carry no other weapons besides the projectiles?fix'd those; but All of those choices for controls are legal. I'm a chuunin so I have two elements; I can chose another element other than my own to be able to copy with my doujutsu; and I chose the ability from professions that let me take genjutsu of another elemental affinity. and no i really don't use any other weapons.
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 10:58 am
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 11:43 am
Edited: More bloodline info added, will add more if necessary.
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 11:47 am
Everything edited... hopefully
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 11:52 am
Edited everything that was necessary
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 11:52 am
Taiji - APPROVED!
Gtack - APPROVED!
Six Paths - APPROVED!
Akura/Jade - (Getting to you now)
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Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 12:23 pm
Jade - APPROVED!
Akura - I ended up doing a A LOT of edits for you, since you left out a lot of what I asked you for...but I didn't do it all.
- You need to link your Taijutsu style still
- You need to include any puppets you have under Weapons, along with descriptions
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