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 Posted: Fri Jul 15, 2011 8:56 am
RPC Name: Going to be Shigure Kaguya hopefully.
Bloodline/Clan Requested: Shikotsu Myaku
Why do you want this Bloodline/Clan: I suppose all I can say is I wish to have it so for one my character can be stronger, to use his power to fight for his village, but also because I understand about the bloodline..and I love the concept of growing/using bones to fight..I mean you can just regrow anything you break or lose..that's awesome.
What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: Well, I know the Shikotsu Myaku is used by the Kaguya Clan, who originate from mist country, and existed as a strong clan before they were killed off while trying to show their ferocity by attacking Kirigakure, and instead got slaughtered while doing so. Those who posses Shikotsu Myaku have different bodily structures, so not much is known about one persons body. By infusing their calcium with chakra, they could manipulate the growth and properties of their bones to their liking, so they could have hard bones, as seen by Kimimaro whilst fighting rock lee. The Shikotsu Myaku has five "dances" that are used alongside the bones, while they can also be used as "projectiles" like Teshi Sendan.
Please supply a Brief RP Sample:
A loud sigh was heard throughout the clearing one Shigure Kaguya stood proudly inside of, he was currently facing down a group of seven, consisting of two ninja's, and five "bandits" he had been hoping to get training in but...apparently he had to settle for a brief warm up. He was currently at density level two, the second of three "levels" a Kaguya's bone density was, while he was at a manipulation "level" four. Reaching behind him to his left shoulder he slowly pulled out a small sword shaped bone, channeling his chakra throughout it he smirked in satisfaction as the density increased to be as sharp as steel. Dashing forward he spun before slashing downwards at one of the shinobi whom brought out a small Tanto in a hasty attempt to block his sword. "Tsubaki no Mai" His soft, calming voice echoed throughout the clearing "quietly" as the man's eye's widened when the blade sliced through both the Tanto, and his shoulder easily. "It seems you have no knowledge of my clan...these bone's can be made as sharp as I like." Smirking as one of the bandits attempted to slash at him from his side, he was very slow so Shiro simply turned before channeling chakra throughout his ribs. "Karamatsu no Mai." He smiled wickedly as the bandit's eye's widened for the last time as the bones pierced through his chest and stomach smoothly. Quickly bending his upper body to the left he dodged a strong yet swift slash that was aimed for his head. Spinning around he aimed both hands, fingers pointed outwards at the women in front of him. "Teshi Sendan" His voice turned cold as the bones lodged painfully in the woman's throat and chest. Bowing his head in sorrow he flipped backwards before reaching behind him and grabbing the spot of the spin that slipped out for him to pull with. Smirking at the disgusted look the remaining four men gave him he swung his arm and smirked at them as the spinal "whip" wrapped around one of them. Pulling the man towards himself he formed a large drill shaped bone around his forearm before hardening and sharpening it to the density he wanted. Slamming it into the man he frowned at the blood that splattered across his face as it ripped through the man. Tessenka no Mai: Hana" His body was growing weak at the output of chakra he was giving throughout the bones, he needed to end it quickly before he passed out. Slamming his hands into the ground he smiled again as a large "forest" of bones ripped from the ground, stabbing through the remaining men, killing them rather easily as it did so. "Sawarabi no Mai..my final dance." He stated coolly before turning around to head to his home to sleep. Seems he got some practice in anyways. Before anybody says anything, I understand the chakra drain system, but this is just to show an example of how it would be used..I mean he would probably die from that many. Anyways..on to the jutsu list.
Jutsu list
Tsubaki no Mai - Dance of the Camellia
Karamatsu no Mai - Dance of the Larch
Teshi Sendan - Ten Finger Drilling Bullets
Tessenka no Mai: Hana - Dance of the Clematis: Flower
Sawarabi no Mai - Dance of the Seedling Fern
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 4:51 pm
[Lilly] [Vice Captain]
"Lilly and Jade, gearing up for the application war..."
Snow_Akechi: A good application. Though in the info section, we would prefer to see stuff mentioned in the guild's bloodline list on it, it would appear that you've incorporated it into your sample so I'll let it slide. Good use of techniques in the sample, just make sure that you explain how every technique looks, just a brief description will be good. For example, in your rp sample when you did the 'Tenshi Sendan' tech, all you mentioned were pointing out your fingers and then bones were lodged into the woman's throat. It'll be easier on the reader if they know what kind of bones were fired. Other than that, good mention of the chakra drain system within the rp and the jutsu list was also helpful. Thanks and APPROVED! Have fun rping!
"...It's a never ending battle out there."
[Jade] [Vice Captain]
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:35 pm
Ah! Dang! I'm extremely sorry Lily-san..I was so focused on length and punctuation that I didn't think of that! And I thank you for the advice, it will hopefully help further my Naruto-ish roleplaying skills. And If it would be better I would not mind going back and adding more stuff, and explaining the looks, even though it's approved. If that make's the people happy I will for sure! Just let me know haha.
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Posted: Sun Jul 17, 2011 7:59 pm
RPC Name: Rai Uchiha (Profile yet to be underconstruction) Bloodline/Clan Requested: SharinganWhy do you want this Bloodline/Clan: Well this bloodline I'm most experienced with using. Just the ocular powers in general are my favorite and the benefit to my character is really just a benefit to me to be honest. Just being able to track fast moving objects and copy techniques is just my style. Especially since it's a fast way of "learning" techniques. What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: The Sharingan is one of the cannon Kekkei Genkai in which their eyes hold their power. Their are three stages for this Kekkei Genkai. The 1st stage includes tome and one eye may gain a maximum of three (This guild I see one can get six, though I have trouble picturing that, eh). Then after that that is the Mangekyou Sharingan, which is the second stage, only gained through killing your best friend. This stage has more powerful techniques but has a drawback, that every time a user would use the Mangekyou Sharingan, their eye sight would deteriorate. The final stage is the Eternal Mangekyou Sharingan, gained from killing another Uchiha who has the Mangekyou Sharingan (Preferably a sibling). This has the same strengths as their original Sharingan, plus the one they "fused" it with. There is no sight deterioration. Please supply a Brief RP Sample: (Gonna use a Jounin Rank Character) Rai moved forward with his next attack, stringing together a set of hand signs."Housenka no Jutsu (Mythical Fire Phoenix Technique)." He shouted as he expanded his lunges and unleashed a fire attack in the form of a flower. The petals were separate and they came at his opponent fast. Using his Sharingan, he was ready for the counter attack. His opponent quickly moved out of the way of the attack, jumping up in the air with his sword. The man landed in front of him, his sword striking down at him. Rai moved out of the way, jumping back and performing one hand sign. "Kage bunshin no jutsu (Shadow Clone Jutsu)!" He said as a clone appeared next to him. His opponent took a step back for a moment, recalculating his assault. Rai took advantage of the situation and sent the clone forward. The clone charged straight in, going in for a head on attack. His opponent did the same, not really thinking of where Rai was going, just as the two met up several feet away Rai formed yet another hand sign. "Bunshin Bakuha ( Shadow Clone Explosion)." He said causing the clone to explode. The explosion made a loud bang, smoke flew everywhere, making eye sight a non factor. The explosion also caused his opponent to become dazed and confused. However, Rai had the upper hand, being able to see chakra signatures with his Sharingan, Rai rushed in for the kill. Rai charged into the smoke with a Kunai knife, heading straight in and stabbing the man in the throat. Jamming the cold steel blade into his throat, the mans hands went limp, as he dropped in his sword. He began to fall to his knees but Rai held him up. "That's what you get.. For trying to rob me." Rai said in a nonchalant manner, ripping the knife out of his throat. Rai turned around and walked away as the man fell down dead. (Bad at samples, sorry if it's corny and horrible >.<)
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2011 5:38 am
Hey Azn, good to see ya...
As to your confusing regarding the 6 tomoe... that is in regards to BOTH eyes exhibiting 3 tomoe. As I'm sure you're aware, Sasuke presented several different versions of Sharingan ability... starting with two tomoe in one eye and a single one in another... and grew tomoe as he was more experienced, until finally he had 3 and 3.
That is what that is referring to.
As to your sample, it's a little weak as you said, it didn't really show any of the copy abilities of the Sharingan, nor did it display the ability to track movements more keenly, but I've seen you use Sharingan before in what little RPing of yours I've read. I'm sure you'll be fine.APPROVED!
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2011 5:53 am
Thank you man. I'm sorry about the crappy sample, I haven't been myself lately. Plus I'm just horrible at writing samples XP So I'll be working on that a lot in the future.
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Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2011 4:12 pm
-o-Havik-o- RPC Name:Miho Mitsuka
Bloodline/Clan Requested: [x]Satetsu
Why do you want this Bloodline/Clan: I will hide the metal under her cloths, then make it burst out attacking and revealing her skin, making it very distracting to any one attracted to females.
What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: Control of metals, kunai, the metal sand, ninja wire etc. etc. Any user must have Doton, and Ration elements. My sand is weak to fire, aaaaand to get large amounts of sand I will have to for my sand deep underground to grind up ore.
Please supply a Brief RP Sample:
A deep sigh left Miho as she looked at the Kazekages tower "Lame." she said annoyed as she walked toward the door, and it's two guards. As she approached her thick thighs and tight cloths made the men gawk at her becoming distracted by her looks. Getting closer to the men she wiped sweat from her forehead before bending over slightly revealing her averaged sized breast as she said in a soft, tired voice while taking deep breaths moving her chest deeply "Do either of you know were a Suki lives? I am a friend of hers and... got lost. Please help me." A swift wind struck the area just as one of the guards started to speak. As soon as they were distracted by her hair blowing and the sweat on her chest two senbon flew swiftly from the middle of her shirt the moving to quickly for the two to react accordingly and they pierced into there neck slicing through there voice box stopping any type of scream or warning call.
Quickly she weaved a set of hand seals and the two body's sunk into the sand as the last bit of life left there lips. "Stupid asses." She said walking into the building to be greeted by her next victim. The secretary at the desk barley got out her hello before the metallic pen on her desk flew from the left of her into her ear causing her now lifeless body to fall with a thud onto her desk as Miho ascended the stairs as fast as she could. Another sand ninja stepped into the hallway at the wrong time only to get stuck with a paper bomb as she ran past him, the explosion left dust and dirt on her body but she manage to escape the blunt force of the blast. Hitting another set of stairs she ran up the fast dropping small cloth bags filled with iron sand, hearing many foot steps coming towards he she fell onto the steps and started acting panicked and screamed in a high pitch "HEEEELP!"
Two more sand shinonbi meet her on the stairs and frantically asked her what happen, and what they could do. "Down Stairs, there are mist ninja with exploding paper! They tried to kill me!" The two guards instructed her to try and find a way out of the building and started to head down the stairs, as soon as there backs were turned she weaved a set of hand seals suddenly the packets of iron dust exploded in a barrage of small pelts that struck painfully into the sand ninja catching them off guard and allowing Miho to take advantage and attack her now stunned enemy from the rear. Leaping between the two with a kunai drawn two quick slices to vital area's and down went two more ninja. "These guys are just boring." She said in a unenthusiastic tone.
Hiding the kunai she made her way to a room that was supposed to be directly underneath the Kazekage's chambers, once there she reached under the back of her shirt and pulled out several storage seals and laid in a circle around her, placed one hand on the floor and created a simple seal with the other. Suddenly more Iron sand started to poor from each seal until there was a thick pile of it all around her. Standing she began to weave a set of seals, slapping the last seal tightly she said as wind kicked up through room and the Iron sand twirls around her violently "Steel dragon barrage!" The iron sand swirled coming together just above her head as the dragons maw was formed and shot through the sealing into what was the Kazekage's chambers. The dragon crashed thought the building as Miho rushed into the room with a lightning charged kunai only to find the Kazekages chambers wrecked, and empty "What the fu..." the door swung open and in a flash Miho tossed her charged kunai toward the door and it flew though yet another Sand Shinobie. Moving over to the desk she started looking thought the scattered papers to find a summon of the Kazegage to Konaha on the same day she decided to stage her attack. "This... is bullshit." The steel dragon jutsu tore apart the Kazekage's tower as she leaps out of the window to make her escape from the sand village all the while thinking of what she would do to her informant for telling her he was sure the Kazekage would be in his office today.
Landing lightly Miho took off running toward the gates of Suna, suddenly a barrage of kunai rained down on her from the buildings above. Skidding to a holt she threw out her arms stopping all the kunai in mid air, then she made them cover her body as he made a hand seal to use her Ninja Bihin Ejin Giryou (Ninja Equipment Conversion Skill). The barrage of Kunai burst into iron dust as she performed more hand seals and forced the iron sand to take the shape of two large cubes. Using the Satetsu Kesshuu (Iron Sand Joint Attacks) she swirled the blocks of iron around smashing them into her enemy. Once they were all dispatched of they burst back into Iron sand and the cloud of black dust followed behind her as she ran.
Coming into view of the gate Miho dashes into the shadows and watched carefully planning how she would get past all the guards in the great crevice. Creating yet another set of seals all the iron dust she had swirled creating a large man with steel blades for forearms. The man nodded to her as he ran toward the gates, she followed behind making sure to keep her small body hide behind the massive one she created. The guards attacked her clones first with a assault of kunai which she made pass by safely, but only barley so it seems like they just had bad aim. Coming into close range with the guards he clone through a hard punch which was easily dodge by the first guard, but then with great speed Miho slammed her foot into the head of the sand nin from behind her clone. The kick landed to the side of his left temple and knocked him clean out.
Miho and her clone were quickly surrounded, so she performed the last set of seals she could, her breath was heavy all this running and jutsu were starting to take there tole, so if this didn't get her outta here she was sure to be finished. The giant of a man she created burst into a large amount of iron sand which swirled around as she used Kaneton - Hagane Ame no Jutsu (Metal Release - Steel Rain Skill) The sand changed to little rain drops and shot forth fast into the nin that surrounded her, using this distraction Miho took off, moving as fast as she could barley visible by the human eye.
Passing through the last section of the gates, Miho made a single seal and vanished in a quick flash of light blue electricity. She would reappear behind a sand dune a little less than a mile away from the village, she wasn't free just yet, but she was sure she would get away.
OoA: I added on to my old sample, the info section has been updated, and I added more clan jutsu in the green.
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Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 4:46 pm
RPC Name: Cory Kiseru (Not created yet)
Bloodline/Clan Requested: Ippukuton (Smoke Release) - Kiseru Clan
Why do you want this Bloodline/Clan: Truth be told, I've been meaning to use this bloodline after I created it back in VR. I think it will fit well with my RPC because he uses his techniques to distract his opponents, and this bloodline seemed perfect for when he has to compete in 1-on-1 battles.
What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: All of the techniques used by the clan utilize smoke that is created by their bodies or their kiseru. Members are immune to their own smoke techniques, and can see through their own smoke. When the smoke generated by the Kiseru member is inhaled, smoke will fill the lungs and make breathing harder. If enough smoke is inhaled, breathing will gradually degenerate from trouble breathing to possible suffocation. Techniques that don't exclusively use smoke also utilize cinders to hide within black smoke and burn the opponent.
Please supply a Brief RP Sample:
Cory got into his battle stance, preparing to face his enemy: An enemy shinobi from Konohagakure named Kevin. He hoped that Kevin was not a genjutsu user, or at least stupid enough to the point he didn't notice when he was under an illusion. Cory performed his handsigns, and activated a genjutsu to place on Kevin, only to have the genjutsu deactivated by an abnormally powerful kai. Cory flinched from the ferocity of Kevin's chakra, and decided it wouldn't be too smart to keep trying to use genjutsu against someone who knew their way around chakra and noticing abnormalities within the illusions. Instead, Cory tapped into his chakra, and performed handsigns as he focused his gray chakra into his lungs, and spit out a glob of solid smoke at Kevin's feet, knowing that his bloodline would be the only thing that could save him in this ordeal.
"Smoke Bomb Technique!" He announced afterwards, the glob nestled in grass in front of Kevin. Cory kept his calm composure despite being terrified of Kevin, fearing that his own physical prowess would allow Kevin to gain the upper hand. But thankfully, Cory had a balanced breakfast.
He took his kiseru from his jacket, and place it in his mouth, inhaling some smoke as he got into a position to run towards Kevin.
The smokey glob detonated, and Cory began his sprint towards Kevin, using the smoke to obscure his advance as he used smoke body to emit smoke from his pores and ultimately cover the area in a haze. Cory averted his course from toward Kevin, to around him, to affectively cover the area in a thick smokescreen. Cory could see perfectly through the smoke at Kevin, who he could see was completely flustered by the fact that he couldn't see and that his lungs started to get irritated. Cory breathed in the smoke, welcoming it's sweet scent as if it were clean, outdoor air. Cory hated using ninjutsu, seeing as how it was taxing on his body as well his mind, feeling his muscles getting tired, but his chakra pools still fairly strong. With his kiseru still in his mouth, Cory let loose a few sparks from his kiseru, the cinders being seen through the smoke by Kevin.
"I can see you!" Kevin yelled, and ran towards Cory.
Side-stepping to the left as he let the cinders flicker out, Cory decided that we should end the battle as quickly as possible. As Kevin whizzed by, Cory tripped him as he took a kunai from his holster on his thigh. Kevin laid on the ground face down, still skidding across the ground by the time Cory looked back. He saw him get up on his knees, and start to cough hysterically as the smoke filled his lungs.
"Please!" Kevin coughed, "Stop!"
Cory outstretched his arms, and slowly moved them to his sides as if he were tearing something open, and the smokescreen parted away from Kevin and faded. He walked up to Kevin.
"You are free to go if you are able, but if I come back here in 15 minutes, I'll finish the job." Cory threatened, doing an about-face and walking away from Kevin.
"Wh-who are you?" Kevin coughed, holding his sore throat as if he were choking.
"My name is of no importance... So please... Leave."
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2011 6:20 pm
@Aqua Fall 12: Please do not double post your application as we will get to it in due time. Seeing how yours was just posted today to rush us within the same day is a bit rude. So we would really appreciate it if you could please wait patiently while we go over the applications.
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Posted: Fri Jul 22, 2011 11:33 am
RPC Name:No clue yet. In sample it's Kaito Hatake though. Bloodline/Clan Requested: Hatake ClanWhy do you want this Bloodline/Clan: It gives them the speed of a "speed ninja" and the ability to enhance the length and cutting power of any weapon. I'm going to go Weapon Master class and that would help me a lot. What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: The Hatake Clan has one ability, white chakra enhancement. It increases the length and cutting power of any weapon. They have their White Chakra which is mainly used for show. They also have the abilities of a "speed ninja". Please supply a Brief RP Sample: Kaito was running towards the sound of battle. He had just walked away for two seconds to relieve himself. Once he reached the little 'campsite' that he and his squad was stationed at he realized the attacking shinobi were waiting for him to leave. His squad members were all dead. The attacking shinobi were standing there, in the midst of the bodies, waiting for him to come back. "So the Hatake came back." They looked at him with devilish grins before they made their attack. One of them launched a Katon Goukakyuu no Jutsu at Kaito. Using his speed, he had unsheathed his katana and channeled the fireball from the jutsu into his blade. He then slashed back at them. A red energy slice shot from his katana towards them both. Still going he enchanted his katana with his white chakra and ran after the energy slice. Right before he got near them, he dashed to the left. The two shinobi dodged the energy slice, by jumping to the side. The one on Kaito's left jumped right onto his blade, like he thought he would. Kaito left the katana in the shinobi's body as he hurled himself towards the other shinobi. As he was flying through the air, he grabbed two kunai knives from his pouch and enchanted them with his white chakra. When Kaito landed the other shinobi took off. Kaito quickly ran after him. He caught up to him soon after. The other shinobi tried to use shuriken to get away, but failed miserably. Kaito had used his superior speed to dodge the shuriken and get behind the man. He swiftly impaled him in both kunai in his spine, crippling him. Kaito left the man and returned to the camp to send word to his village about the attack.
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 12:25 am
RPC Name: idk Bloodline/Clan Requested: Ato Sakura No Ki No (Art of the Cherry Tree)Why do you want this Bloodline/Clan: Because I've never actually 'dabbled' into the clan side of Naruto Rping, I just stayed original. Also this clan actually fits the character I am planning to make. What do you know about the Bloodline/Clan: This clan was created/based off of Bleach. It is/will be watched strictly. The art of this clan is strictly weapon based and must have some sort of royal blood. Please supply a Brief RP Sample:It was quiet inside the large home of Omire, unusually quiet, but the entire family was gathered here to see a rare sight. Omire's grandson Omri has finally inherited the families Hidden Jutsu, the one he'd been asking for since he was young. It was the Art of the Cherry Tree, a beautiful way to die, as Omri's grandfather put it. But, now Omri's entire family sat before him waiting. There was a rustle of feet towards the back of the room, then the door shifted open and his grandfather proceeded to the front of the room. He gave a short speech about how Omri had come to this point, but Omri wasn't paying attention, he was focused, ready to finally prove his worth in this family and prove it he shall... "Draw, my son..." Was all he heard and before he knew it his 'syne' was before him. He held it straight before his face in his left hand, seemingly splitting his body in half. For a moment nothing happened, the silence getting eerie as Ormi finally lifted his right hand to his sword and formed the Kai hand sign. "Senbonzakura..." He whispered softly. His eyes where closed now, the beads of sweat became ice cold as a familiar sound reached his ears. 'I'm doing it...' He thought as he opened his eyes and saw syne's transformation. The tip of his blade turned into a hot shade of pink before floating up into the air and hovering idly. This continued all the way down the blade to the hilt, till there was no metal, but the 'cherry leaves' floating in the air before Omri. He heard a noise behind his back and turned to meat his father and uncle placing two large bags of feathers on the ground. He nodded his thanks before completely turning around to meet his 'foe'... Omri's right hand opened and his left fell to his side. "Go..." He whispered and he flicked his right hand into the direction of the two bags. The cherry leaves went by like a blur, gasping and awing could be heard between the rips and tears of the bags. Only three seconds after he flung his hand, he reached it in, recalling his leaves to the front of his face, but as he did this, his grandfather had his on test ready for Omri... While Omri was busy with the bags, his grandfather had drawn his sword and already converted it into leaves. He saw his opportunity and sent the leaves hurling at his grandson at a medium speed, hopefully allowing him sometime to dodge or something, hopefully... Or was he trying to kill him? Omri heard the screams and spun around to see leaves flying at him, he had hardly enough time to cover his face with his right hand before they struck. Omri closed his eyes and waited, waited... 'What the hell...' He thought as he opened his eyes. Before him floated his cherry leaves, formed into a scale like shield, protecting him from the blow. His sweat almost dried onto his face as he sunk to his knees. "Return..." He whispered as he held up his blade. The scale shield separated and reconnected into their original form of his syne. Slowly they started from the hilt up, glowing a vibrant pink as it made it's way to the tip. When if finally got they it returned to it's normal color with a shinning whoosh. Before Omri knew it, he felt his grandpa's hand on his head. "You see, my son. We learn new things everyday..." Then the whole room erupted with laughter and Omri actually smiled... ((I am so sleep deprived. It took me forever to choose one... >.>))
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 6:55 am
[Lilly] [Vice Captain]
"Lilly and Jade, gearing up for the application war..."
Havik: Good job Havik. Thanks for editing in the requested stuff. It's obvious you seems to understand the bloodline but it'll be cool if you sometimes metion how your rpc connects with the metal in other objects other then she stopped them. That's more technical that anything so no worries. APPROVED! Enjoy.
Aqua Fall: Interesting deduction on the stanima part. I'll be sure to bring it up with the other mods to see what they think. Thanks for the suggestion but since nothing offical is about it, just stick to your base stanima amount unless you choose endurance for an attibute k? Moving on, info section I feel could use a bit more knowledge. There are some interesting stuff in the first section like the strengths and weaknesses along with the rules. Great first try on the rp sample. The use of techniques was alright but it would be better if you could somehow slip in the strengths, weaknesses, and rules within the roleplay. Like how when he did the smoke body attack, he was still able to see through the smoke while his oppenent was sent into a frenzy of confusion. You could maybe even add in the coughing at the end to show how the smoke was constantly effecting his lungs but he waited till after the battle to show it. Simple stuff like that just to incorporate more of the bloodline into your rping. But a good first try. Good luck. Oh, and a quick question. Were you the original creator of this clan? I can't seem to recall but I thought your name was on the original document/version of this bloodline.
Duo: Hey! Welcome to TUP! Glad to see another familiar face from our old Iwa crew. Anyhow, onto your application. I feel like your info section could be filled out a bit more as there are others stuff within the bloodline that can be mentioned like how a mind attribute is needed or how there's a post limit for scatter techs. As for your rp sample, I'm assuming your writing this from the initial awaking of the bloodline, mainly your rpc attaining stage one. It's pretty good but I would perfer that you had incorporated techniques into it but then it would go against the set up a bit...I think I'm gonna have to leave Cobra with the final call on this as he was the one who revamped the bloodline. He'll have a better judgement call on this. Sry.
"...It's a never ending battle out there."
[Jade] [Vice Captain]
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:38 am
Thank you, Lily, I'll look over my application using your advice. 3nodding
I was the original creator of the Kiseru Clan, as well as Supeketoru Annaiyaku and I think one more. But I never got around to using any of them so this'll be the first time I'm actually going to use Kiseru. Anyways, thanks for the advice, I'll get working on improving the application right away. biggrin
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Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:48 am
@Aqua: No problem and good luck. When you're done feel free to repost it or just contact me or Jade to relook over it.
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White Water Lilly Vice Captain
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