|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
 Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 2:47 pm
xLieselotte Yay! We have a new kind of race! She seems really interesting and well thought out. But before I accept her, I want to clarify some things.
In Rosentale Academy, we actually do have have 2 ghosts attending school and it might be better to leave it to their RPer's discretion to decide if they are attracted to your character.
As for the people who she can influence "if their aura is weaker than hers," I'm not quite sure what you mean by that, can you be a bit more specific?
I'm afraid the flaws you put in seem to resonate around one area which is when she has a nightmare. When she has a nightmare, she becomes moody and isolates herself. It is just one valid flaw.
But does she have any flaws when she isn't in a situation when she has a nightmare?
Sorry for being picky. ^^ Well the aura thing is usually something like for weak, wayward humans who have a weak will since she's not that strong. I will put that in to clarify that. and i could add more flaws, just wasn't really thinking about that one too much >.> I'll add more and as for the ghostly people they can either choose whether or not they are attracted to her. and what i mean by attraction is that they will seek her help or something because she would be able to see them unless they already have the ability to let others see them. I put that in order to make it interesting or funny because she's surrounded by ghosts and they won't leave her alone in a rolelplay
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 2:54 pm
Well the aura thing is usually something like for weak, wayward humans who have a weak will since she's not that strong. I will put that in to clarify that. and i could add more flaws, just wasn't really thinking about that one too much >.> I'll add more and as for the ghostly people they can either choose whether or not they are attracted to her. and what i mean by attraction is that they will seek her help or something because she would be able to see them unless they already have the ability to let others see them. I put that in order to make it interesting or funny because she's surrounded by ghosts and they won't leave her alone in a rolelplay Alright thanks! That clears up a lot. XD We've been having a lot of people cheating on the flaws and so we've been trying to be stricter about it since it's unfair for the people who put real flaws for their characters opposed to the people who only have fake flaws like "obsession with the color green" or "Just can't cook at all." If you need help with flaws, you could always refer to the Mary Sues 101 Thread. It's not that I think you'll make a Mary Sue, I just think it's a good read if you need good ideas. ^^ Just quote me once you've made the changes. =D
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:08 pm
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:29 pm
Is it alright if you make one more flaw? Since we rarely have darkness in Rosentale since we rarely have the opportunity to set up evening except for every other Friday; so her fear of the dark will rarely get to be shown. And three flaws is just the bare minimum so I'm really picky about the flaws working.
Fears are all good and well for traits but usually flaws can also be a character trait such as arrogance or being short tempered.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:33 pm
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:39 pm
Yay! Thank you for being patient with me! ^^ Feel free to make your character's class schedule and have her enjoy the weekend. ^^
She'll be staying in the Emerald Dorm, but that might change since we'll be moving people around soon due to the inactive people in the dorms. ^^
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:43 pm
xLieselotte Yay! Thank you for being patient with me! ^^ Feel free to make your character's class schedule and have her enjoy the weekend. ^^
She'll be staying in the Emerald Dorm, but that might change since we'll be moving people around soon due to the inactive people in the dorms. ^^ thanks, and how many periods will we have, i noticed that everyone has five. Also, how would i choose my classes?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 4:38 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: James Stark
Species: Human
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Appearance Description:
Personality: Stark is a chill, laid-back kind of guy. He isn't very fond of his first name either, so he would rather everyone call him Stark, even the teachers. He's what you would call 'popular' and is even a bit a flirt. Despite all that, Stark is also very smart and athletic as well.
Bio: Stark grew up having a normal life. He lived in a normal house, his parents both had jobs, and life was good. But as the young man grew up, he began to feel as if he were missing something. That was when he discovered his gift for archery. The moment he picked up a bow, he was naturally talented at it. First he won the local competition, then he went onto state, nationals, and soon the international competition, where he took second place. One would think he would be very disappointed that he had worked so hard only to get second best, but... Stark didn't mind. He congratulated the winner and went on his way. It wasn't about winning for him, it was about his love for archery.
By the time he reached high school, Stark still continued with archery. But during his 1st year, he discovered that he had yet another unique talent. Just by thinking about his target, whenever Stark shot an arrow it would hit that target. That was how he was able to hit his mark everytime. Of course, this gift came with a price. One day as he was practicing like usual, one of his fellow archers challenged him to a little game. He accepted right away, and he was so intent on beating the guy, he could get his image out of his mind. That was when everything went completely wrong. Instead of the arrow hitting the target, instead it pierced the young man's chest, instantly killing him. Because of this, Stark was nearly sent to prison for life, but was saved by Rosentale Academy. In exchange, he would be enrolled there as student and he would learn to control his powers so that nothing like this would ever happen again. And so, he accepted the offer and is now attending Rosentale Academy in order to control his 'gift.' But he still haunted by the memory of this incident and because of it is deathly afraid of blood.
Skills and Abilities:
-Master of Archery
-Quick on his feet.
-Hand to hand combat. [If absolutely necessary.]
Character Flaws:
-Deathly afraid of blood.
-Not so good with heights.
-Trusts people too easily.
-Has trouble expressing his feelings/dealing with his emotions; bottles them all up. [Especially since the incident.]
Sexual Orientation: Straight
Status: Single
Likes:
-Playing video games.
-Archery.
-Hot cocoa.
Dislikes:
-Blood
-Brocolli
-Nagging teachers.
-Waking up early.
Extra Information: The necklace he wears [See picture] was given to him by his mother as a birthday present. He wears it everyday. The jewel is very rare and expensive, and Stark couldn't believe his eyes when he received it.
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 4:52 pm
Everything was filled out perfectly except for the flaws. Those are all situational flaws as they require something to happen before they actually come to play. And those are good, but we want at least one or two other flaws that follow him around such as arrogance or indecisiveness. Even though this is a school setting, the teachers rarely give out tests in Rosentale which makes his studying for tests a nonexistent flaw for a long time. Since you pretty much just put in the bare minimum for the flaws, I'm going to be pretty picky about them. If you need help, you can refer to the Mary Sue 101 thread and there should be a section about flaws that can give you some advice. ^^
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 4:55 pm
xLieselotte Everything was filled out perfectly except for the flaws. Those are all situational flaws as they require something to happen before they actually come to play. And those are good, but we want at least one or two other flaws that follow him around such as arrogance or indecisiveness. Even though this is a school setting, the teachers rarely give out tests in Rosentale which makes his studying for tests a nonexistent flaw for a long time. Since you pretty much just put in the bare minimum for the flaws, I'm going to be pretty picky about them. If you need help, you can refer to the Mary Sue 101 thread and there should be a section about flaws that can give you some advice. ^^ Better?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 5:06 pm
xChibiChii xLieselotte Everything was filled out perfectly except for the flaws. Those are all situational flaws as they require something to happen before they actually come to play. And those are good, but we want at least one or two other flaws that follow him around such as arrogance or indecisiveness. Even though this is a school setting, the teachers rarely give out tests in Rosentale which makes his studying for tests a nonexistent flaw for a long time. Since you pretty much just put in the bare minimum for the flaws, I'm going to be pretty picky about them. If you need help, you can refer to the Mary Sue 101 thread and there should be a section about flaws that can give you some advice. ^^ Better? Thank you! ^^ He can stay in the Malachite Dorm, but we might move people around soon so it might change. ^^
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 5:06 pm
xLieselotte xChibiChii xLieselotte Everything was filled out perfectly except for the flaws. Those are all situational flaws as they require something to happen before they actually come to play. And those are good, but we want at least one or two other flaws that follow him around such as arrogance or indecisiveness. Even though this is a school setting, the teachers rarely give out tests in Rosentale which makes his studying for tests a nonexistent flaw for a long time. Since you pretty much just put in the bare minimum for the flaws, I'm going to be pretty picky about them. If you need help, you can refer to the Mary Sue 101 thread and there should be a section about flaws that can give you some advice. ^^ Better? Thank you! ^^ He can stay in the Malachite Dorm, but we might move people around soon so it might change. ^^ Alrighty. ^w^
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Mon Feb 13, 2012 6:54 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Giselle "Gigi" O'Shire
Species: Banshee
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Appearance description
Personality: Neutral, laid back, patient, and apathetic.
Bio: Born in Ireland, she came to the academy when her parents sent her away due to family issues back home. She was born into a middle class family, and likes to spend her time playing video games. She's quite the gamer and likes to dress in Victorian attire. She's really interested in steam punk and is believed to be a hopeless romantic. She just wants to find the right person and fall in love. She learned that she was a banshee when she was six and began seeing people die in her mind, she would shriek as a child when she saw these things and this continues up until now.
Skills and Abilities: The ability to sense when one is going to die. Very skilled in fencing, and gaming.
Character Flaws: Has rage tantrums when losing in a video game and in life, does things that will only benefit her (so she can do bad things if it benefits her and doesn't care how it affects others), and is quite inappropriate in conversations.
Sexual Orientation: Bi-Curious
Status: Single
Likes:
- Video Games
- Steampunk
- Victorian Era
Dislikes:
- Running
- Olives
- Losing
Extra Information
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Mon Feb 13, 2012 6:58 pm
Everything looks really good. But there's only one thing I'm a little unsure about. Could you be a bit more specific about "stupid decisions" since it's a little bit vague?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Posted: Mon Feb 13, 2012 7:12 pm
xLieselotte Everything looks really good. But there's only one thing I'm a little unsure about. Could you be a bit more specific about "stupid decisions" since it's a little bit vague? I edited and reworded it. Does that work?
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
