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Ivaylo_Sai

PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:04 pm


SDRP Academy



Message from the Dean

Welcome to the SDRP's flagship Workshop Series - the SDRP Tutoring Academy. This is a special sort of RP where it's all about teaching players how to Role Play. Since this is the School of Dedicated Role Players we're offering an extensive catalog of quality courses in a persistent RP world where you can hone your skills and generally hang out with other guild members in an academic setting. The guild's more active, advanced members will serve as the tutors running one-on-one RPs which are really workshops designed to teach various role play related topics. Around them is a rich world in which students can interact with each other, faculty, and staff on the campus of said academy in extracurricular activities and hang out threads.

Please Note:
This course is a temporary group session until tutors can be found.
If you would like to help out by becoming a tutor please use the tutor application to join the tutoring class and prove your stuff.

In Character Intro
Two months after receiving a mysterious acceptance letter to a university you had never heard of you found yourself, for whatever reason, traveling a good distance to attend its new student orientation. When you arrived at the address on the invitation though it was not at all what you had expected. There was just a small, weathered building in the middle of nowhere, hardly large enough to keep a shop in let alone a university. But the crest on the faded sign swinging above the door matched the one on the acceptance letter and this was the right address. Besides, you had come all this way, may as well check it out.

Opening the door revealed something that could only be called magic (or a teleportation device). Inside the building was outside - and not the same outside you had just come from. This outside was picture perfect with a bright blue sky dotted in puffy clouds that looked painted on, only their movement making them real. The wall in which the door stood was a sturdy brick facade with a tall, white columned porch in colonial style. Beyond it was a grassy lawn bordered in other buildings of similar make. Cobbled pathways wound between them lined in lush landscaping heavy with fragrant flowers.

This was more like it. But you weren't given much time to appreciate the view as only moments after stepping through the door a blue haired old woman came shambling up to shoo you off the porch and into one of the neighboring buildings where she prattled on about the campus being a window to other worlds you had just begun to dream of. She didn't seem to listen to anything you may have attempted to say to her as she lead you through winding halls going on about the diverse student body.

Then the old woman opened a door to a small classroom containing a few other supposed students sitting in desks and looking as new as you were. The classroom itself was modest with simple white walls, floor, and ceiling tiles. Windows lined the back overlooking the green space from where you had just come and a large blackboard made up the right side wall. On the blackboard was written in a tight and somewhat awkward hand a simple message, "Welcome to PSY101, otherwise known as New Student Orientation. Find a seat and draft up a quick introduction of yourself to share with the class."

Note: This introduction is left vague to allow for creativity in the characters attending the university. Have fun and don't be afraid to try something different.
PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:05 pm


RULES



These are the basic codes of conduct within the Academy. There are not many and they are very simple. Breaking these will have consequences.

1. Common Sense
Don't be an idiot. Respect each other, respect the TOS, and respect guild rules. Don't mess it up for the rest of us, and try not to do anything that would upset other people. This is a GAME after all, we're here to have fun.

2. Control
Because this is a school we're going to be understanding if you don't know proper RP etiquette at first but all students will be required to take POL 101 as their first class where they shall learn, among other things, the following rules: Don't control anyone else's character(s). Don't severely affect (maim, kill, etc) them without permission (of the player or with GM override). Don't go off on an insane killing spree (without permission). Don't mess up the plot/world. Basically use some measure of self control or pay the consequences (character death/player ban).

3. Literacy
This is a school and as such we encourage you to write well. For this RP that means in third person, past tense, complete sentences. L33t speak, txt abbreviations, profuse slang, and generally bad grammar should not be used outside of dialog. We won't be grammar Nazis but do try to write above an 8th grade level. If we think you need help with your grammar you will be asked to take LIT 101 before continuing to another course but you can always request to take any of our LIT classes if you would like to improve your writing.

Also, please do not color and/or bold dialog. It puts too much emphasis on dialog which, while important, should not be put above the rest of the text. And so not to offend our eyes, do not center align long blocks of text, use small fonts, or use bright font colors. In general, please keep formatting to a minimum.

4. Depth
We'd like our characters to be as real as possible but this is a school so we don't expect much from entering students. Because of this all players will start play as themselves (or a believable online persona) and must take PSY 101 to create/flesh out any other character(s) they might like to play.

5. Commitment
We want dedicated players or at least to know how dedicated all our players are. You will be asked how often you expect to be able to post on your application, take that seriously and give us the time you sign up for. We will pair you with a tutor that has a similar activity level so don't waste your tutor's time by falling behind. The absolute minimum is 1 post a week for students. Tutors are expected to make at least 3 posts a week.

6. Dependability
Occasional lapses in commitment are understood but please notify the Registrar and your tutor when you expect an extended absence. Frequent, repeated lapses in commitment will result in the lowering of your listed posting frequency, failure of classes, and possible expulsion from the Academy.

Ivaylo_Sai


Ivaylo_Sai

PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:05 pm


ACTION



In a system without stats or dice, action in which failure might occur (combat and skill use) can be tricky. Here we use a system of attempt and result where the PC makes an attempt and the GM declares the result. For tutoring and class threads the GM is the tutor or teacher. For extracurricular activity threads the activity leader (staff which started the thread) is the GM. For hang out threads the person that started the thread is the GM. Academy Staff are considered Super GMs and may step into any thread with GM privileges to throw plot devices at you. Success of an attempt is based on several factors:

1) Plausibility: could the character logically succeed given stated skills on the character profile and past actions within the RP.

2) Writing: to encourage good writing, a well written attempt can push a borderline plausibility into success. Conversely, a poorly written attempt can push a borderline plausibility to fail.

3) Awesomeness: a clever, cool, humorous, or otherwise awesome attempt can push a borderline plausibility into success. A truly spectacular attempt can bend the laws of physics if well written.

4) Dice: the GM will occasionally use dice when other factors are not present to help decide the outcome.

5) Plot: some things will just happen (or not) for the sake of the plot. This should not be a common occurrence but it may happen.

When to Do It
This system should be used whenever there is a real chance of failure. Don't bother with things that should obviously succeed (archer hitting a haybale at short range) but do use it when:

1) The attempt could easily fail: archer hitting an apple off a tree at long range

2) Any combat situation: PvP or NPC

3) Other opposition: sneaking past guards, picking pockets

In all cases the GM dictates attempt results, especially PvP situations. This should lighten up as characters master skills and players become more established in the system.

How to Do It
To make an attempt the player states an action with open ended vocabulary:

Quote:
Player: The squire made a desperate lunge with her sword, aiming for the bandit's heart.
GM: In a feat of newly honed skill, or blind luck, the sword found its target and sank deep into the bandit's chest.
Player: The squire smiled, pleased with her first kill, and jerked the sword back from the bandit's rib cage to turn on another with a slash of her bloodied blade.


Note the outcome is not stated by the Player, only the action. The GM follows with the result of the attempt and the Player then reacts with a new attempt. This example was decently plausible but slightly borderline due to the specific aim and moderate skill level of the PC. The attempt is properly written but neither particularly well nor poorly and there is no awesomeness to help tip the scales. Its result was decided with a die roll (I'll usually mention luck when that happens).
PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:07 pm


HOW TO APPLY



Whether you want to become a student or teach them the SDRP Tutoring Academy is the right place to do it. Just follow these steps to get started!

STUDENT ENROLLMENT
    Basic Requirements
        Our aim is to provide roleplaying education and experience to as many prospective and continuing roleplayers as possible, so it will be rare for us to turn down a student applicant. However, to ensure smooth running of the program, we do require that a few criteria be met of our students.

        As a student, you must:
        • be on Gaia at least three times a week (you must be present to learn)
        • have the patience and enthusiasm to learn and try out new things


    Application Process & Form

      Enrolling in the SDRP Tutoring Academy is fast and easy. Just PM the Registrar (School of Dedicated RPers) with your completed application (form below) using the subject: SDRP Academy Enrollment. The Registrar (School of Dedicated RPers) will place you with a tutor appropriate for your needs and availability. You will get a PM reply to notify you of this placement and any further instructions necessary. You should hear from your tutor shortly after being assigned.

      Please note that your application is subject to being circulated among SDRP Tutors.
      [b]Username:[/b]
      [b]How often are you on Gaia?[/b]
      [b]What are you hoping to gain from the SDRP Tutoring program?[/b]
      [b]How much, and what kind of, role play experience do you currently have (include links if possible)?[/b]
      [b]What do you think you need the most help with?[/b]
      [b]What courses are you most interested in taking?[/b]

      See our Course Catalog for a list of our current and upcoming courses.

      Since you're starting a class we'll also need some information for your character. Just a general concept right now and we'll work on 'em in class. Be sure to include: name, race (human, neko, elf, lizardman, anything else you want), physical description, personality, and any other details you want. Be flexible with this cuz some tweaks might have to be made for them to fit the setting.


If you want to sign up to teach, put in your application for our Tutoring Class to prove your stuff.

Ivaylo_Sai


Ivaylo_Sai

PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:12 pm


ROSTER



    Accepted
    Once your application is accepted you will be put on this list. If you don't see your name here give it a few days then bug the Registrar. We are accepting a maximum of 15 students for this round.
    • Hiacinth
    • Kitsuneko Suzuki
    • RapscalliantJackalope
    • Tunes14

    Awaiting Applications
    These are people that have expressed interest in the program (or are currently in our Mentorship program which is going to be folded into the Academy) and we are waiting to receive their applications.

PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 5:13 pm


Students sat in their seats and some did as the blackboard instructed while others clearly did not. But that was the way of any group of people, really. One in particular did not, choosing instead to nap with a book laid over his face and feet propped on the desk in front of him. The clock on the wall over his head at the back of the room ticked the time away, well past when the invitations had said the class would start. The students were beginning to get restless, some more than others. It wasn't until one of them voiced a complaint that the sleeping student in the back woke with a start, the book dropping from his face to his lap as he blinked at the people gathered in the desks around him. He blinked a few more times then checked his watch, frowned at it and gave the glass a tap then looked at the clock on the wall behind him and jumped up with a muttered curse.

"Sorry, guys," he told the class as he straightened up, flattening his shirt on the way to the front. "Lost track of time there," he laughed a bit weakly and dropped the book on the teacher's desk then stepped past it, up to the blackboard. There he picked up a stick of chalk then found a clean space and scrawled in the same tight, awkward hand as the rest of what was on the board, "Mr. Vay." The he turned to give the students a friendly smile.

"I'm Mr. Vay," he waved a hand back at the board. "And I got saddled wi- I mean, the privilege of being the first to teach here at the Academy. This is going to be a sort of special class to get you all indoctrinated into the way we do things and the like. First though, let's get to know each other." He stepped away from the board as he talked and sat down against the edge of the teacher's desk, putting his hands into the pockets of his faded jeans. He didn't look like a teacher but he was acting like one, for the most part.

"How 'bout one of you start us off? Tell the class who you are, how you got here, why you came, all that fun stuff," he looked out over the class with a smile as he waited for one of them answer.

Roll Call:
Hiacinth

Kitsuneko Suzuki

RapscalliantJackalope

Tunes14

Ivaylo_Sai


RapscalliantJackalope

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2014 11:22 pm


Michi took a seat in the front center of the classroom. From a worn leather messenger bag, she pulled a carefully-wrapped dip pen and inkwell as well as a few sheets of paper. The ink had leaked slightly during her trip, and left a black smear across her hand, which she wiped on a blotter rag with a quiet curse. Frowning disapprovingly at the student sleeping in the back row, she obeyed the instruction on the board and began to fill her paper with straight, dense lines of text. After a few minutes, she leaned back and surveyed her work.

When Mr. Vay took his place at the blackboard, she straightened in her seat. It was a habit cracked into the backs of every first-year at the Academy by Professor Xu’s cane. She’d see whether this teacher’s laid-back attitude was some sort of test before relaxing. At his request for introductions, she stood from her seat, glanced at the page full of writing, and pushed it aside. It was rather a relief to be asked so informally.

“I’m Michi, Michi Cho. I’m here as an exchange student from The Academy--that is, Yun Island’s Aeronaval Academy. I was looking for a chance to get off the island and see some new sights, so when the letter came, well, I think you know the rest. The afternoon after the dean approved me for this semester, I worked out an arrangement with an airship headed in the right direction and hopped aboard. They got me to the, ah… portal island in an overnight flight. And now I’m here.” She offered a slightly forced smile to the teacher before sitting down again.
PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2014 3:54 am


Shane sat stiffly in his desk, straight and tall. He had decided to come to class that day in his base form, a slightly pudgy, average height male, sans tail. He'd wanted to blend into the class until he was more comfortable with the other students. But he couldn't resist having some colorful ornamentation today, if for nothing more than some small, covert comfort; he had covered his pinky nail on his right hand with shiny blue green scales.

Shane's eyes were laser focused on the blackboard, but he was hyper aware of all the students around him, including the dude sleeping in the back. What he wouldn't give to be relaxed like that. It was another moment of resolute staring before the instructions on the board sunk in and he hurriedly grabbed for his messenger bag on the floor. Pulling out a pad of fresh paper and a new pen, he started the assignment.

Out of the corner of his eye, he saw the sleeping guy awaken and move to the front of the classroom. Oh crap, is that the...? Yep. And worse, it was time for introductions. He loathed introductions. He sat through the first girl's intro (what was her name again? shoot), mind racing with the most unhelpful thoughts. Should he go next? Or wait to go last? Which was better? At least he wasn't first. Maybe let another person slide through? What are the pros and cons of each option? None of those were useful thoughts. He decided the best thing to do was take action now, bite the bullet!

"My name is Shane," he said as soon as the girl (Michi!) sat down. "I, uh, came because I wanted to learn some new skills, improve myself, and see some interesting things while I'm at it. When the Academy founders opened a portal to my world looking for takers and offering invites, I decided it was perfect. Um, I guess that's it?"

He looked questioningly at Mr. Vay then settled back into his seat, rubbing the pinky scales unconsciously.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2014 4:21 am


Rachael cussed aloud as she was rushed into the classroom by this strange woman who wouldn't listen to a word she tried to say. This place was clearly either magic or a dream, and either way, she was not pleased.

Her face burned red when she turned to face the room and found three people already occupying it. One was sleeping, thank goodness, and the other seemed too engulfed in her writing to bother noticing Rachael or her cursing. Or, she hoped this girl was too engulfed to notice. The third, however, seemed very alert. She wasn't sure how critical he was of her, but his attentiveness made her anxious.

She stared hard at the floor, letting her tangled hair fall into her face as she hurried to a desk in the back of the room, on the opposite side from the sleeping guy. She analyzed the desk while she waited, hearing at least one other enter but not looking up to acknowledge them. Her desk had a deep scratch in the lower right corner and some scribbled writing that she couldn't read sprawled across the top. She began rubbing at the writing, hoping that if it was pencil, it would rub off.

When the guy in the back finally rose and took his place as the teacher at the front of the room, she looked up, not only at him - Mr. Vay, apparently - but also at the other students in the room.

Rachael watched as the girl jumped to be the first to answer the teacher's request for an introduction. She wasn't sure she liked her. She moved with too much enthusiasm. Rachael wasn't sure why that disturbed her so much, but it didn't really matter why. The second guy didn't look so bad after his introduction. Some mention of magic, she thought, maybe. But she wasn't in a position to make judgments at the moment. But his introduction was quick, not much to it - a perfect segue for her bare-minimum introduction. There wasn't much she was willing to say.

When the boy sat down, she stood, eager to make sure no one else had a chance to give a much more lengthy introduction and make hers look even skimpier than it would already be. "Rachael. I'm not sure how I got here, exactly. I guess I walked. I came because I have nowhere better to be." Then she sat down as quickly as she had stood, looking at the others in the room past the strands of hair still dangling in front of her vision.
PostPosted: Wed Apr 23, 2014 10:51 am


Crystal was stunned by all that she saw around her this place was nothing like she had seen before. She pinched her arm a few times to make sure this wasn't a dream, but nothing about her surrounding changed. She had remembered the letter she had received but hadn't put much thought to it. A strange woman who started to show Crystal to the class room seem easily annoyed by how easily she was distracted by everything. The woman grabbed her by the wrist saying "There is no time to dilly dally. Your late." She said. Crystal should of know better but she didn't know what the rules were here. She was pushed into the room brightly light from the light coming in through the window. She took in the room each an every single part.

Even though there were others in the room she first was shocked by the openness of the bookshelf she could reach out and touch any book she wanted to. She had never picked up a book as nice as these. She if she had ever come across a book it was matted dirty and torn. She had a master that had a book shelf but it was looked up so non of the servants could get to the books. Her ears shifted as she heard the sound of the other classmates at work.

She turned thinking to apologize to them and looked at the outside. 'Why couldn't class be held out there?' She questioned in her thoughts then looked at the sleeping student. "Who would sleep on such a glorious day?" She complained lightly not trying to disturb the others in the room. She took an empty seat near the window. Her ears twitched again as the one sleeping woke. She heard his apology but she didn't know why he was apologizing for tell he walked to the board and wrote Mr. Vay. She gulped lightly as she listened to the other introduce themselves. Tell it was her turn. "Hi I'm Crystal. I'm not sure how I got here, but please don't send me back for waking you up Mr Vay sir." She said as she read what was on the board finally about writing something down. She didn't really know how to write nor had she brought anything with her not like she could have no body would have sold her paper and a quill with ink.

((Hope this is good?))

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 24, 2014 6:10 pm


Finn was disappointed to leave the beautiful world that existed through the doorway and she made note to inquire about it later. The old woman yammered on in front of her, talking to herself more than making conversation, but she was a quirky and cute for an old woman, which delighted her. She followed the woman through the hallways, her hand resting thoughtlessly on the black, leather messenger back by her side as her gaze roamed with curiosity the walls and classrooms they passed on the way.

Finally she was shooed by the old woman into a moderately filled classroom, in which the teacher was present at the front of the room and another student was standing and giving an introduction of themselves. "Great," she thought, "why do they always make us do these things? They're always so awkward.." She glanced from the student to the teacher, passing over the students sitting in their desks and pressed her lips inward towards her mouth, raising her eyebrows and lifting one hand in a short, awkward wave before silently shuffling towards the back of the classroom and to an empty desk. She dropped her messenger back onto the floor with a thud at her side and plopped down unceremoniously into her seat as the student finished their introduction. She ran her fingers through her hair at the crown of her head teasing it out and to the side in a messy wave and proceeded to rest her chin in the palm of her hand to listen to the next student speaking. There were two more after him that took their turns speaking. All four seemed so very different and she was glad for the diversity that this academy seemed to offer.

Her eyes darted from side to side, examining the room, her head remaining in her hands. No one else seemed to be needing to give an introduction, so she pushed back her chair with a quiet scrape across the floor and stood up. Her lips curled up at the side in a casual smile at the classroom.

"Hey," she sung in an awkward, drawn out fashion. "I'm Finn Vogel. I am 24 years old, just your average 'joe-shmoe'. I got the letter to attend this academy a few weeks ago and wanted to take advantage of being able to go back to school. My high school experience wasn't the greatest, but I have always loved learning new things. I just picked up and traveled here to give it a shot and experience something new. And, that's about it. So, yeah," she let out a soft, awkward chuckle and shrugged one shoulder up in unison with her eyebrows before she took her seat once more. Why did she always have to sound so stupid? Public speaking was something she really needed to work on... She crossed her arms on the desk in front of her and looked ahead at the teacher, waiting for his instruction, seeing as she was the last student needing to speak up.
PostPosted: Sat Apr 26, 2014 10:08 pm


As the students stood up one by one, Mr. Vay sat down at his desk to grade a stack of papers that seemed to magically grow with each introduction. When they were all done he looked up with a surprised blink.

"Oh. Wow. That was fast, guys," Mr. Vay huffed a slight laugh as he put away the stacks of grading and stood up then gave the papers a dismissive wave, "Finals season." Then he picked up a little black book from the corner of his desk and stepped away from it to stand in front of the board and look over each student in turn with a little glance into the book, turning a page for each one.

"Good, good. Well done, guys. Nice to meet y'all. Notice no one mentioned anything about players or games so I'm guessin' ya haven't been caught up on how this all works," the teacher paused to give the students a look over before he went on with a nod. "Well, long story short. You've all got people that control you. Yes, terrifying proposition. We," he waved a hand at them all, including himself, "all have a person behind us, a player, creator, puppeteer, whatever ya call 'em. They speak to us in a lot ways: that nagging voice in the back of your head, the moving picture in your sketchbook, the mysterious texter on your phone. However they do it, they are the tellers of our story. And that's what this is all about - telling stories.

"Here at the Academy, we work through you to teach your player how to tell your story better. Neat huh?" Vay grinned then waved at the students. "Check under your desk. There should be a book like this under it," he held up the little black book he'd taken off his own desk. "This is your journal. It's a sort of magical retro-tablet. Like an iPad with pages. Lecture notes will appear in there along with resources and assignments. Transcripts of everyone's first assignment should be in there already," he turned his around to show the scribbled words. "That's your introductions," he tapped a page then snapped shut his book.

"Now, lets see what y'all got out of that. Next assignment's gonna be a little harder," Vay flashed a grin to the students as he walked around his desk with a slow stride and pulled the chocolate, corduroy blazer with tan leather elbow patches (proper professor attire) off the back of the chair behind it. "My wife didn't dress me today," the teacher winked, making light of his clothes as he pulled on the blazer then continued walking around the desk to resume his perch on its front edge.

There Mr. Vay flipped idly through his book a moment then looked back at the chalk board and laughed with a shake of his head. "I should probably tell you what the assignment is, eh?" he glanced briefly at the class before pushing himself off the desk again and walking to the board. "This one's a three parter but don't get all intimidated by it. Just an exercise," he spoke into the chalk board as he scrawled onto it:

1) List everything you learned about the student and their player from the introduction before yours.
2) Choose, in your opinion, the best introduction so far.
3) Explain why that is the best one.

After dotting the last item with a bit of a flourish Mr. Vay turned back to the class and stepped aside so they could read it. "First," he pointed at the first one, "Read over what the student directly before you posted. Michi, you get to do me since you went first. Make sure to read carefully. Which you should be doing anyway," he said the last sentence in a bit of a mumble then flashed another friendly smile. "Then just list out whatever characteristics were mentioned or implied by the post. If you want to be extra fancy you can mark what was explicit (actually said) and what was implied (hinted at)." He paused to look over the class and see if they all got it. "If I ever lose you in the instructions just shoot me a PM and I'll explain," he gave them an apologetic look before going on.

"Secondly," he pointed to number two, "Read all the students' introductions and pick which one most effectively conveys a well-developed character. This is a judgement exercise so you're going to have think (and then think even more on the last part where you have to analyze that judgement) but there is no wrong answer so don't freak out about it. Just be sure you can support your judgement in your analysis. Speaking of which, that's number three," he pointed to the last instruction.

"Here you have to tell me why you picked that intro as the best. Again, no wrong answer so long as you can support it with analysis," he paused briefly, "And don't choose your own. Even if you really think it's the best we don't need to hear it from you."

Finished with instructions for the day, Mr. Vay folded his arms over his chest and leaned back against the black board to watch the students with a pleasant expression.


Roll Call:
Hiacinth

Kitsuneko Suzuki

RapscalliantJackalope

Tunes14

Lady Mae Lou

Ivaylo_Sai


Tunes14

PostPosted: Sun Apr 27, 2014 1:43 am


Magic? Did he say magic? No. No, she knew this place was bad news as soon as she had walked in! Of course it was magic; she was such an idiot! This place was dangerous. And she didn't know what kind of messed up place the rest of these people came from, but the idea of someone controlling her was ridiculous... Right?

Still, she picked up the book that the teacher referenced under her desk. She paused, staring at it nervously for a moment before opening it. Well, dangerous or not, this was where she was now. And it's not like it wasn't fitting, in a demented sort of way...

She looked back up to the board to remind herself of the assignment. 'List everything you learned about the student and their player from the introduction before yours'... She took out the pen clipped to the front cover and opened the book to the next blank page.

1) The introduction before me was Shane. First thing I noticed was that he was very attentive. He seemed to be working hard to be focused, taking the class seriously, although no matter how seriously he took the class, he just doesn't seem to be the type of person who can be that strict-minded. His attempts were evident in the way he tried to reason out when the best time to speak up would be, but in the end, his more intuitive nature showed through. He seems to be very creative, looking at the 'colorful ornamentation' on his otherwise neutral clothing, and he seems compulsive about having something making him stand out, however small. His colored-scales pinky nail seems to serve the same purpose as a stuffed animal might serve for a child - likely because he is not comfortable with his actual nature due to the pressures of wherever he comes from, and therefore does not get the chance to express himself as openly as he would like without facing some kind of conflict. It is possible that it may not be the society so much as a lack of self confidence himself, but one way or another he seems uncomfortable with expressing himself, especially considering his distaste for introductions and the fact that he said he would give anything to be as relaxed as the guy sleeping in back - expressing that he is in fact NOT comfortable with carelessly relaxing.

Rachael looked over what she had written in surprise. It was like the words were just flowing out of her all on their own! She didn't know she was such a writer... She thought back to the puppeteer comment the teacher had made, but shook the idea away quickly. Way too creepy...

2) I think Michi did the best introduction. To be fair, I didn't understand most of what she said, but... I feel like hers was the best.

Again, Rachael was not sure what compelled her to give this answer. Getting intimidated by how easily these answers came and how little she actually understood about them, she decided that the best course of action would be denial - ignore the tedious details and remind herself that despite the creepiness of a place surrounded in magic, she was still the one thinking her thoughts. No one was in her head. Keep calm and just write. If the answers come easily, that's just something to be grateful for...

3) I think that although her verbal words tended to ramble on about complicated topics that might confuse the unfamiliar students the first time around, her thoughts are clearly well-organized, since the character herself is very familiar with the topics discussed, and despite the complicated nature of the material that she is dropping onto her unknowledgeable classmates, it clears up for the reader important details of her history and original culture while at the same time telling us a lot about her personal character. The rest of her introduction is the more impressive part, in my opinion, as it was very concise and every sentence said something about her or her background, yet it was not so short as to be dull to read. The important bits were implied more than once, but never in an obnoxiously obvious way, and also set the scene a bit for the reader so that they could understand what was verbally expressed, even though some of the students might not. The author gave an introduction that was interesting, informative, and didn't tell us what to think, but showed us her traits subtly and let us decipher them ourselves.

Rachael didn't bother reading over whatever it was she had written, just tore out the page and brought it up to the front of the room. She dropped it on the desk and rushed back to her own, unable to get away from the intimidating thing fast enough.
PostPosted: Sun Apr 27, 2014 2:08 am


Michi frowned as she pulled the black book from beneath her desk and flipped through it, careful to not fold any pages. With all his talk of higher powers and whatever the heck a “phone” was, Mr. Vay was beginning to remind her of one of the lecturers back at the Academy—he was a Drifter, a nomad, and only showed up to class every two months or so, always full of new philosophy. One class he’d have them reading poetry about the Vermese beaches, and the next he’d be railing against the false enlightenment sold on the streets of some metropolitan dot on the map where he’d stopped to buy a pair of socks. She seemed to recall him wandering into class one day rambling about fates being intertwined and a higher plan.

The idea hadn’t appealed to her at the time, nor did it now. As far as she was concerned, if she had a “puppeteer,” as Mr. Vay had called it, that being was pretty boring. It had stuck her on Yun Island, for crying out loud, the world’s most stagnant superpower. And when it gave her a ticket off, it was to a lecture about how she had no free will. She smiled to herself. No, she didn’t have to believe that. It didn’t matter what her teacher’s religion was, or how roundabout his teaching style. She was here to learn. She opened the book to the correct page, picked up her pen again, and tapped it on the inkwell, thinking. The assignment was straight out of secondary-school language arts, and she fell to the rhythm of writing easily.

1. Mr. Vay is unpunctual and relatively laid-back. He presents a casual, friendly demeanor and speaks colloquially. His introduction explicitly mentions him leaning against the teacher’s desk with his hands in the pockets of his jeans, and that he “didn’t look like a teacher.” With these characteristics and the informality of his dialogue, his player creates the image of a teacher who isn’t trying to intimidate his students. The explicit details of his oversleeping, cut-off phrase “saddled with,” and messy handwriting suggest he’s perpetually behind schedule.

2, 3. Hiacinth’s introduction of Shane is good. It gives explicit descriptions of his appearance: a “slightly pudgy, average height male,” and mannerisms, such as sitting stiffly and staring at the board. His internal monologue adds a realistic level of uncertainty and self-doubt for a student on the first day at a new school. His choices to stand up and speak immediately, and previously to attend the academy, suggest spontaneity. He is also a bit self-conscious, choosing to blend in with other students and looking for confirmation at the end of his verbal introduction. Overall, the introduction isn’t too long but portrays a relatable character with enough depth to make his reactions unpredictable but justified.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 29, 2014 8:18 am


Shane was listening with rapt attention at this point. Now that his intro was over, he was free to sit back and just absorb information. The stuff about being controlled scared him at first, but the more he rolled the thought around in his mind the more he liked it. It meant he didn't have to accept all the blame for his mistakes and that was fine with him. He decided to call her-for some reason, he was certain it was a her- The Puppet Master. He hesitantly sent up a little mental "Hello" to PM then got down to work.

Shane pulled out his black tablet, confused as to why Mr. Vay would think no one would know what the hell a paper notebook was. Some of these girls looked like they were from places that were still using candles instead of electricity. Even his people had electricity on the islands, and they were merpeople for Pete's sake! He fumbled and dropped the notebook on his desk when the thought hit him that he was the only dude besides his prof in the room, but he quickly regained composure and started his assignment.

1) List everything you learned about the student and their player from the introduction before yours.
2) Choose, in your opinion, the best introduction so far.
3) Explain why that is the best one.


1) That was Michi. She's old fashioned and very disciplined. Sharp and straight edged. Her Puppet Master immediately gets down to business and is very concise. Everything is described in spare detail, no more than necessary to paint the picture, but not lacking.

2) Rachel's intro was the best, I think.

3) She started with details that were mentioned in the prompt before moving on to the classroom set up by Mr. Vay. She put in many good details that brought both the classroom and her character to life. No or few typos, good grammar. Easily readable.


There, done. Shane looked around and saw that a few people were still busy. He had time to waste, so he flipped to the back of his little notebook to doodle. Finding a blank page at the end, he sketched out wonderful creatures to practice his shapeshifting skills on later. When he finished he sat back and gazed over it. At the bottom, which he could've sworn he had left empty, was a single word in delicate cursive: "Hello!"
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