Well that took quite a bit longer than expected but I have finally read and critiqued everyone. Thought you should know that the word file was between 35,000 and 40,000 words by the time I finished with critiques.
Generally, everyone seemed to make the same mistakes (just with varying degrees). Just as a reminder to everyone, here are the main things that were a problem in nearly every piece
1) Following the prompt
2) Fragmentation of sentences
3) Changing from past to present tense
4) plot leaps or unexplained gaps
5) inadequate characterisation
6) misuse of punctuation such as commas, semi-colons, dashes, and especially ellipses
I can see that most of you worked very hard, despite these errors that occured across the board. It was hard to choose, but here are the winners
1st place: Rostab
Rotsab M. Hyolf
Congratulations! You win 100k
2nd place: Uvula
Hardcore Uvula
Congratulations! You win 75k
3rd place: Yutora
Yutora
Congratulations! You win 25k
I am looking forward to your entries for the April Horror and Morbid prompt!