Pikachu has Fainted
I don't care for John or amy very much, although your side characters seem pretty strong.
Personally I don't care for battered woman and weak man couples. They are very over done lifetime murdered and raped it and keeps it in a dungeon.
However, it's still early in the story and I see the story going a few ways.
1. Nate saves her, like in most movies.
2. She grows over time and through development gets stronger then him and leaves.
3. Chelsea tells Amy she is being abused as well and together they work out the problems.(girl power)
4.John turns into a killer and Amy kills him.
Those are the most commonly used routes in this kind of story and you should avoid using this.
Try too be innovative and it will be fine.
From what I noticed on my cell phone a few I's were placed as "i" and a few words were mispelled. Also some of the info in gym class part seemed unnecessary. However it isn't awful, the story is very easy to follow which is always good as a the story flows very well from one
part to the next.
This actually wasn't my first story on wattpad. This is like my third book idea. My other two(weren't completed) were up but I wanted fix them and work on them a bit and make a couple chapters ahead of time. I am thinking about putting those to up again.
The routes that you thought the story was going to go wasn't what I was thinking for the story. There is a reason for Johns actions which will be explained in later on chapters. As you can tell chapter 6 was longer then the rest because that is when I got back on wattpad and decided to make every chapter I write atleast 3 pages. Any mistakes are from when I use notebook. Now I use words and it help me correct mistakes and "i". I was going to go back and fix all of it soon. The gym scene was put in there to introduce a new character and to kind of get to know how she fits in the plot. I am glad the story flows because I believe that it a little hard to accomplish for some writer and I am glad I can accomplish that. Thanks for reviewing my story. I love the criticism.