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 Posted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 6:33 pm
Wow I do a lot of writing xd
My friends say I write good stories and I currently have two parts of my story I'm writing up in my journal.
Also I have a bit of poetry. I don't think I'm good but everyone likes to disagree with me and my "talents" stare
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Posted: Thu Feb 01, 2007 6:58 pm
post! lol. there is no way you are getting away with a comment like that in MY subforum without posting. lol. me and Aurelia are very eager to see what you got. we'll be the judges. a writer is always critical down to the very bones of his or her work, but a stranger can cast a more accurate and unbiased view.
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 8:51 am
Ack! I've been caught! Ok here's one poem I wrote because I was so bored I had nothing to do..it took me a couple of seconds so don't blame me if it sucks! xd
THE GIRL IN HIDING
I was and am an actor
I hide who I really am
And because of my performance
No one can see who I am
I wear a mask in front of you
I’m afraid that you may hate me
No one knows who I really am
A beauty or a beastie
Because of my act, you cannot see ME
I’m like a cowardly lion
I have the power to make a difference
But I’m afraid to be hated
So I don’t share my reference
For I treasure friends more than anything
I remove the mask I wore
I smile my true smile
I tell no lies no more
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Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 10:08 am
*clap* very very good! it's very beautiful, i like it
on top of that i didn't really see anything wrong with it.
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Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 8:42 pm
I just don't see what's so special about it...this one really got people going and I did it in two minutes when I was bored Finding Me
You cut me but I'm not bleeding
You hurt me but leave no mark
But if you try to find my heart
All you'll find is dust
Watch me break beautifully
Watch me die in shame
I lost my one true self
Caught up in your little game
Good-bye glasses, which hid my face
Hello make up applied every day
Good-bye teeth covered in metal
Hello smiles simple and mellow
I thought I saw someone else today
When I looked in the mirror
My clothes and my face
Who is that person staring at me?
Can it really truly be me?
Good-bye make up that showed you lies
Hello glasses that helped my eyes
Good-bye simple smiles so weak
Hello laughter that show my teeth
I found myself during your game
And now I smile my true smile again
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 7:33 am
I loved both of your poems, especially the latter one. That was done wonderfully. You truly are a writer when you can piece together something as outstanding as those poems, in only a matter of minutes. Bravo!
-Aurelia
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 8:06 am
excellent...not many people can do this...that makes two of us xd
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Posted: Wed Feb 07, 2007 11:42 am
Thanks I guess xd redface
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Posted: Thu Mar 01, 2007 9:32 pm
Broken Wings
Broken wings that cannot fly
They don’t be long to a butterfly
These wings once pure, soft and white
Are now a mess of feathers, bones, and blood
On the ground do you hear her cry
More beautiful then a lullaby
Oh hear her sobs that break my heart
My angel’s tears pierce me like a dart.
My dear why do you shed tears?
Why eyes so sad and full of fear?
She looked to me and sobbed in shame
My wings are broken I can never fly again
I looked to her surprised and laughed
She looked to me in shock and gasped
Why do you mock my pain? She cried
I reached over and replied
My dear I said with laughter
My dear beautiful angel don’t you see
As long as you remain by me
I will be your wings
She smiled and held me close
The angel who loved me most
I see now that is why she cried
Be my wings…and I will fly
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Posted: Tue Mar 27, 2007 1:42 pm
I'm not the greatest poet, but I like your style. Your poems are actually deep and meaningfull. Not just a bunch of garbage slopped together and called magnificant.
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Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2007 8:18 pm
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Posted: Fri Apr 13, 2007 7:53 pm
Valentine
Hello my sweet valentine
Oh how I long to make you mine
Alas my foolish heart does cry
For my non existent valentine
Or maybe you do exist
Far beyond my finger tips
So I’ll wait for you my valentine
Until its time to make you mine
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Posted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 7:55 pm
*raises hand* can i post a poem too???? okies here it goes! i wrote it a couple years ago (i hav it posted on fp.com
"Writer's Room"
A timeless age
The sun beating down
On a world shrouded in darkness
No hope to go around
A city among towns
A monotonous lane
Soft rain melts to thunder
As thunder turns to pain
In a pointless world
I have long forgotten
There is life beyond these walls
Though the world is now haunted
They peek through the window
Curious of what’s inside
Just to see the sad faces
Of memories lost in time
So the dust settles on me
As I write away my soul
Scratching down all my pain
Words my heart now stole
Lips could not speak them
Even to empty walls
Spirits hide in dark shadows
Prisoners of mournful laws
They call in weeping pleas
Trying to draw this writer in
I write down the words they cry
To my heart they doth give
And so I stole from emptiness
From voices that can’t be heard
Sorrows of a past forgotten
Lost in a haunted world.
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Posted: Sat Apr 28, 2007 1:08 pm
*claps* Bravo very lovely!
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Posted: Mon Apr 30, 2007 6:56 pm
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