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Leavaros
Crew

PostPosted: Sat Dec 23, 2006 8:26 pm


I was just in a little town in Illinois, Dixon. Here is a poem about my response to my first northern winter. As always, my fellows, enjoy.
*****
"Wintery Woods"
The gray mist was chill,
as it snaked between
the whitened ground and the blackened trunks,
more alive than all the creatures in the slumbering forest.

The ancient oaks,
bare of all their leaves,
stood naked in their sleeping place,
ebony against the ivory snow,
their twisted limbs uplifted to the sky,
as if beseeching the sun to burn away
their burdening loads.

And the prayers paid off,
for the Sun, late and sleepy,
rose into the sky,
dissipating the serpentine fog
and melting away the icy crystals,
by his mere presence.

But sundown was bound to come,
and here, unlike its warmer counterpart,
the sun dove into a bed of yellow and purple
early--only to rise late tomorrow.

In the absence of that gleaming figure,
the mist returned, and with a vengeance.
If all is silent,
the trees whisper their anguish to one another,
as midnight makes its move.

What's this?
The Moon rises full and round,
shedding silvery light
from her voluptuous frame,
and turning the world into a wintery paradise,
as Heaven's frozen tears fall in gentle fluff
onto the quiet, sleepy grove.

It's not so bad,
the trees yawn to one another and return to rest,
dreaming of Spiringtime,
in Winter's bosom.
*****
Hope you enjoy this! Comments?
-Valens
PostPosted: Sun Dec 24, 2006 4:13 pm


Pretty. ^^

I wish it snowed more here. emo

crystalsmuse
Captain


Leavaros
Crew

PostPosted: Sun Dec 24, 2006 5:00 pm


Thanks Crystals. I'm about ready for sunny Florida again.

Anyone else?

Vale,
-LD
PostPosted: Tue Dec 26, 2006 1:35 am


I agree. PRETTY 4laugh I really enjoyed the imagery in this one. The trees being in anguish and then whispering to another made Glory happy. I liked the contrasts of ebony trees and ivory snow, night and day, Sun and Moon. 3nodding My only complaint is that in...


The ancient oaks,
bare of all their leaves,
stood naked in their sleeping place,
ebony against the ivory snow,
their twisted limbs uplifted to the sky,
as if beseeching the sun to burn away
their burdening loads.


You're treating it like that's what it SEEMS like, but then you go on as if it was factual, that the trees weren't sleeping, but actually beseeching the sun. You know what I mean? sweatdrop

glorybaby


Leavaros
Crew

PostPosted: Tue Dec 26, 2006 4:19 pm


Hmm, yes, I see. I'll try to do something about it. Thanks, Glory.
~Valens
PostPosted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 5:11 am


I really like the way this poem is written. The imagery is beautiful. [we just got our first snowfall here and it's only a dusting, darn El Nino]

Aeric Brightleaf

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