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 Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:45 am
I've been seeing reoccuring issues amongst questers, and a lot of rather silly ideas unfortunatly burrying the good idea underneith. Let's cut through the superfluous crap and get down to the golden center, shall we?
Bilious's Quester Critiques!
Critiquing you in hopes of a better tomorrow!
Slots: 1.--- 2.--- 3.--- To request a critique, fill out this form: [b]Character name:[/b]
[b]Quest thread link:[/b]
[b]Anything in particular you want looked at:[/b]
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:45 am
and a two-HOO!
((reserved just in case))
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:45 am
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:54 am
Character name: Tristan Derskald Quest thread link: HereAnything in particular you want looked at: Well, mostly the personality and background, keeping inmind that I'm trying to revamp it and flesh it out. Otherwise, anything you think would be helpful or interesting to know. Also, feel free to bump this request back a bit if more people show up, as I should be able to make some additions to those two sections this weekend. *edit* Thanks! *edit #2* I think my concept may be too simular to that of Lucas, who is already on the island, so any suggestions on how I might fix that without eliminating the elements that make him interesting would be greatly appreaciated.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:58 am
Character name: Janice Gracilens Quest thread link: Here! Anything in particular you want looked at: Everything, but particularly how do-able the concept would be on the basis of her career. There's stuff I won't be too willing to change, but suggestions (even for alternative animals) are always welcome! Thank you for your time. :3
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:59 am
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 9:01 am
No longer needed, but leaving luffles anyway.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 12:10 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 6:22 pm
Kimari Character name: Tristan Derskald Quest thread link: HereAnything in particular you want looked at: Well, mostly the personality and background, keeping inmind that I'm trying to revamp it and flesh it out. Otherwise, anything you think would be helpful or interesting to know. Also, feel free to bump this request back a bit if more people show up, as I should be able to make some additions to those two sections this weekend. *edit* Thanks!
I actually really like your concept as is! :O Yes there are lots of "dorky" ish characters on teh island, but concidering Moreau's ties with the scientific community, I dont' see why that would be any sort of problem at all- and as a fan of horrible mutilations, I adore your theorized reason for him to be on the island :3 he seems like a nice, simple guy and an interesting "straight man" to play amongst the psychopaths and loud characters. Awesome! Good luck and I really hope to see him on the island soon! (and hopefully I'd be his artist, mwahahah >:3 )
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 6:41 pm
Mouse Pachinkorelli Character name: Janice Gracilens Quest thread link: Here! Anything in particular you want looked at: Everything, but particularly how do-able the concept would be on the basis of her career. There's stuff I won't be too willing to change, but suggestions (even for alternative animals) are always welcome! Thank you for your time. :3
Hrmm. I feel like your quest is fairly well rounded. I think the advice you'd like from me would probably best be answered by staff, though :O since it would be their call. 3nodding No suggestions, really, either- (i suck!) but that's a good thing! It means there isn't anything obvious that stands out as needing to be tweaked. You picked one interesting trait, be it a good trait or a bad trait, and ran with it, but didn't go overboard. Good luck to you!
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 6:53 pm
Bilious Kimari Character name: Tristan Derskald Quest thread link: HereAnything in particular you want looked at: Well, mostly the personality and background, keeping inmind that I'm trying to revamp it and flesh it out. Otherwise, anything you think would be helpful or interesting to know. Also, feel free to bump this request back a bit if more people show up, as I should be able to make some additions to those two sections this weekend. *edit* Thanks!
I actually really like your concept as is! :O Yes there are lots of "dorky" ish characters on teh island, but concidering Moreau's ties with the scientific community, I dont' see why that would be any sort of problem at all- and as a fan of horrible mutilations, I adore your theorized reason for him to be on the island :3 he seems like a nice, simple guy and an interesting "straight man" to play amongst the psychopaths and loud characters. Awesome! Good luck and I really hope to see him on the island soon! (and hopefully I'd be his artist, mwahahah >:3 )Heh, well as I mentioned in the second edit of my request post, I am somewhat worried that he may be a bit too simular to Lucas. Though, yeah, realitive to the psychopaths and loud characters his eccentricity would probably seem very moderate. In part I sort've envision him as one of those guys who is generally a benevolant and honest, but highly eccentric (to the point of being highly disturbing at times) individual. A bit like some university profs out there razz Heh, as for you being his artist, I'd love that, It'd be very interesting to try and roleplay the reaction to the changes for someone who is already so odd, yet normal at the same time.
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 7:10 pm
Kimari Heh, well as I mentioned in the second edit of my request post, I am somewhat worried that he may be a bit too simular to Lucas. Though, yeah, realitive to the psychopaths and loud characters his eccentricity would probably seem very moderate. In part I sort've envision him as one of those guys who is generally a benevolant and honest, but highly eccentric (to the point of being highly disturbing at times) individual. A bit like some university profs out there razz Heh, as for you being his artist, I'd love that, It'd be very interesting to try and roleplay the reaction to the changes for someone who is already so odd, yet normal at the same time.
Hrmm! I admit I'm not that familiar with Lucas's backstory, so I'd need to go check that out befor letting you know on that point! o:
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Posted: Thu Aug 31, 2006 8:10 pm
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Posted: Sat Sep 02, 2006 10:37 am
Character name: Carmen Villaradio Quest thread link: http://www.gaiaonline.com/guilds/viewtopic.php?t=2689551Anything in particular you want looked at: Character mainly, even though a global critique would be loved. Given that English is not my first language, it's best to PM me if anything looks confusing or unclear. Well, that's all, take your time 3nodding
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