| Is this poem accurate? |
| Yes! I love that feeling! |
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| Sometimes I feel something like that... |
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| I can't really say I've experienced that |
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| Stop romanticizing! |
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 Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2004 6:18 pm
In english, we had to write a poem using the first stanza of another poem. It also had to be about ourselves somehow. So, naturally, I chose to represent myself as a violinist. I know this technically isn't music talk, but I'd like to get a feel for how accurate my descriptions are, from other violinists.
Have you ever seen
Anything -------------- arrow (First stanza from another poem)
More beautiful
Than a violinist?
So stately
in love,
so graceful and radiant.
Matching the waves of the music,
Breathing,
Sighing,
Losing yourself in your life
and your love.
And have you ever felt
the fire building,
the golden
happiness swelling through,
until you want to leap
to your feet
and play
through your heart.
Play until your
Joy is exhausted,
your sadness assuaged.
And you smile,
and you weep,
and the applause echos
in your ears.
Then exhausted,
bt deeply joyful,
you put your heart away in its case
until tomorrow.
...Yes I know it switches from third to first person.... sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2004 10:18 pm
Hey, I like it. I know that feeling, but "The Gift" is the only piece I have that I can get it with. But I'm still practicing!
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Posted: Thu Sep 16, 2004 1:21 pm
What an amazing poem gonk heart
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 5:12 am
Nice poem! i ranked runnerup in the scary story contest a few years ago, with a poem , it was pretty scary... xp
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 1:32 pm
GothRat Nice poem! i ranked runnerup in the scary story contest a few years ago, with a poem , it was pretty scary... xp The poem or the fact that you got second place?
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 4:40 pm
TarienRose GothRat Nice poem! i ranked runnerup in the scary story contest a few years ago, with a poem , it was pretty scary... xp The poem or the fact that you got second place? both really, i thought it sucked sweatdrop xp 3nodding ...
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 5:50 pm
GothRat TarienRose GothRat Nice poem! i ranked runnerup in the scary story contest a few years ago, with a poem , it was pretty scary... xp The poem or the fact that you got second place? both really, i thought it sucked sweatdrop xp 3nodding ... Only conceited people like their own poetry. The same goes for school pictures. xp
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Posted: Fri Sep 17, 2004 7:26 pm
I like your poem a lot! Kalile Alako you put your heart away in its case Awesome line.
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Posted: Mon Sep 20, 2004 6:48 pm
Wow... thanks! I didn't think the poem itself was that great, but I'm glad that other people feel that fire-ness. sweatdrop (eloquent I aint!)
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Posted: Wed Dec 29, 2004 8:28 pm
pretty sounding, WHAT!!! I JUST SAID PRETTY >< *slaps myself*
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Posted: Sat Jan 08, 2005 8:28 am
Heh. Thanks! ...I think? xd
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Posted: Tue Feb 01, 2005 5:43 pm
I liked the poem. It brought across the emoiton well. IT WAS GOOD!!!
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Posted: Wed Feb 02, 2005 7:21 am
That poem's beautiful! I wish I could write something like that.
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Posted: Wed Feb 02, 2005 8:10 pm
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Posted: Thu Mar 17, 2005 6:55 am
wow. I loved that. The jumping perspective gave you a full view. You have an immensely strong voice.
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