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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 9:20 am

I'm sick of all the lies
Just leave me be
I'm dying
Can't you see
I don't want the lies
The false lullabies
I want permanent dreams
Muffle my screams

In my world
It rains blood
Tears from my eyes
Constantly flood
Give me wings
So I can fly
Away from this
False lullaby

Scar the sun
Blot the moon
As I sing
My twisted tune
Rip my hair
Bind my wrists
Tears of blood
Scar my face
Take me from
This darkened place

My sleep
My dreams
My nighttime screams
A reflection
Of reality

I can't stop the bleeding
Tears I dam up
They overflow
Soak up the blood
The tears
All my fears

My twisted dreams

Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 12:58 pm

Alas, I have finally found a poem that is worthy of the title "Truly Awesome." The stanzas are really organized to the point where this could even be an awesome song. And the words alone make up the best part. The poem gives me a sense of reality and makes me actually visualize in a sense the emotion you were trying to portray through words. The whole idea really suites the title as well, so great job. heart

Acerbus nox noctis

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Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 3:59 pm

*gasp!* Thank you!! It's the only one I've ever been proud of.

Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 4:08 pm

you have some practice at this dont you? i can tell on yeah my favorite part is

Quote:

I dont want these lies
The false lullabies

because in my eyes lullabies are only lies
and i hate them with all my heart
because of how i was ripped apart
so alone on the telephone
and i am absent of a bone in my body that
has ever stolen a poem i simply love your work

grotesquekreeple

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Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 10:37 pm

I love it!!!!! blaugh

Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 2:53 pm

grotesquecreeple

you have some practice at this dont you? i can tell on yeah my favorite part is

Quote:

I dont want these lies
The false lullabies

because in my eyes lullabies are only lies
and i hate them with all my heart
because of how i was ripped apart
so alone on the telephone
and i am absent of a bone in my body that
has ever stolen a poem i simply love your work

mrgreen actually, i haven't been writing for very long. switched from flute to music appreciation to writing lyrics, to poetry. xd