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Negaverse Alias: Lieutenant Dravite
- http://www.healing-crystals-for-you.com/dravite.html
- http://www.minerals.net/mineral/dravite.aspx

Challenge: Well...?

Uniform:Will contact artist with references
Primary: Black
Secondary: Red

Elements: Black dove feathers
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Weapon
Lieutenant - red crystal pendulum on a silver chain (4ft) with a silver metal feather charm on the other end.

Captain - The feather charm becomes a dagger while the chain links (8ft) becomes thicker. The red pendulum remains at the end of the chain as a weight.

If Dravite is able to wrap the chain around an opponents limb the red pendulum will start to glow causing the opponent to hallucinate that they're seeing/ hearing movement of a bird to a flock of birds flying at them from their peripherals (severity of the illusion is to the opponent players discretion). This lasts 15 seconds each time he entangles someone.

General - The chain is no more, the red stone pendulum is now a permanent part of the rapier hilt (will design my own).

If Dravite swings his sword and misses, instead of the typical 'whooshing' sound of blade cutting through air, the pendulum begins to glow as it did when he was a Captain causing the opponent to hallucinate that they're seeing / hearing movement of a bird to a flock of birds flying at them from their peripherals (severity of the illusion is to the opponent players discretion). This lasts for 3 seconds if in an open area up to 10 seconds if in an enclosed space where sound echos or is amplified.

Does this wording work better?

"causing the opponent to hallucinate that they're seeing movement of a bird to a flock of birds flying at them from their peripherals (severity of the illusion is to the opponent players discretion)"

Hey Shan! I have a few things that I am uncomfortable with concerning Dravite, and my first concern is the length of his chain! I have gone through some of the negaverse agents and knights who have chains and have come to the conclusion that yours is far longer than any of the others that I have found. Lt. Mesolite starts out with a paperclip chain which goes to a chain that is three feet, ending with a chain that is six feet. General Natron has his general weapon in his art, and it is no longer than he is tall, so about six feet.

My own knight, Whisler has a chain weapon, and it is only five feet long.

The lengths will need to be shortened for all three of your stages, and I would feel comfortable if the maximum length did not exceed eight feet.

Also for his general stage, since he has the magic, I would prefer that he not get a second item as the sword, and rather just had an increase in length of the chain and perhaps the dagger gets a little longer. The weapons should not separate, there is not nega that I have found that has two weapons that are so different from each other.

Please quote me when you have made changes!

Changes look fine! Have a STAMP!