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─Basic Character Information─

Username: Sombre_Ash
Character's Full Name: Yukumi Shizuka (or Shizuka Yukumi if you want it western style)
Alias:
Nickname(s):
Age: Appears to be in her early twenties, exact age unknown
Birthday: September 4th
Zodiac: Virgo
Gender: Female
Blood Type: B
Sexual Orientation: Straight
Disabilities/Phobias: Obsession with Cleanliness. She doesn't like to be in a dirty place and tends to get obsessed with things being clean and in order. Not that she freaks out in a crying/whining sort of way, more it tends to irritate her to the point of snapping more than she otherwise might.

─Appearance─



Appearance: Yukumi Shizuka is a beautiful young woman that tends to dress herself down so she’s taken more seriously and appears more strict than gentle. She possesses brilliant crystal blue eyes that are almost clear and long dark hair always drawn back in a simple ponytail. She doesn’t use make up but has a natural beauty to her face, regal elf like features. She wears the usual uniform of the Gotai 13 Soul Reapers and tends to have a pencil tucked behind one of her ears as well as a backpack. Her Zanpaktou is the usual katana with a small blue cord around the base of the hilt.
Height: 5'3"
Weight: 115lb
Eye Color: Crystal blue, almost clear.
Hair Color: Black
Tattoos/Markings/Scars:
Unusual Features: Crystal blue eyes.


─Personal Information─

Personality: Serious would be the best word to describe her. She tends to take her work as a duty. She is diligent in her pursuit to do her best, be it paperwork or sword play. Often she is either lost in study or working on the field to improve her martial skill. On occasion she relaxes but often only around her family.

Hobbies: Violin (she plays), Study/Reading, Organizing
Favorite Color(s): Crystal blue
Favorite Activities: see hobbies
Favorite Foods and Drinks: Spicy foods, teas
Other Personal Likes: Occasionally dancing, spending time with family

Least Favorite Color(s): yellow
Least Favorite Activities: anything messy
Least Favorite Foods and Drinks: heavily sweet things (some sweetness is still good)
Other Personal Dislikes: rudeness, lack of loyalty, failing to do one's best

Personal Possession(s):
Personal Secret(s): Me to know, you to find out.

History: Yukumi was 'born’ in a nicer area of the districts that surround the court squads. Her mother had been a soul reaper that vanished in the Precipice world when she was still very young. Her father was a tailor in town she was horrible at it, destined to never take up the family business. She had a few brothers and sisters but none that were actually related to her but one younger brother that she still visits from time to time. He and her father as well as one of her other ‘sisters’ work at the shop that he runs. Given it mostly gets business from soul reapers and their constantly torn or damaged uniforms it does rather well and most locals don’t mess with a shop frequented by the soul reapers.
At fourteen she showed a talent for spiritual energy by chasing down one of the few robbers that would dare to go after the place. A bit of a rudimentary flash step and she had been seen by upperclassmen Renji Abarai and he was the one that helped to arrange her entry into the school.
She had some difficulties getting involved, she wasn’t always the most gifted girl socially. Possessing a certain awkwardness added to her own drive to always get things perfect without cheating didn’t always win her fans in her class. It was during her second year at the college that the graduation ceremony took place. Amongst the students was the famous Kuchiki Rukia and so of the few captains in attendance Kuchiki Byakuya was one.
An instant fan and one of the soul reapers that would definitely buy the books of the captains if they are ever released.
She decided then that she wanted to be in the sixth squadron and worked all the harder at school...sometimes to the point that she would be scolded because she’d be ready to pass out on the field (generally dangerous if you are practicing swordplay).
Though she did end up in the top ten of her class by the time she finally finished. She wasn’t bad at sorcery but excelled more within the field of healing and binding than damaging. She did all right martially and was fairly well practiced with a flash step. When she left the school she had several people tell her she would do well within 4th squad but her heart and mind were elsewhere. She got into the Sixth Squadron after her own graduation.
It took her years to work up through the ranks of the sixth squad to get to where she is. She remained for a time as the 3rd Seat as other alterations to the squadron on both a captain and lieutenant level took place. Her own position change is still a little recent, and sudden, so she’s hoping that she did something right. Now if she could just remember what that was and repeat...


─Zanpakuto Information {Sealed}─

Zanpakuto Name: Facet
Zanpakuto Appearance: Normally a mostly plain katana with the only change being a blue cord.
Zanpakuto Spirit: Facet appears to her in a variety of forms but whatever set form it's always in a crystalline cast. From a dog to a bird, to a reflection of herself or others, whatever form her sword's spirits shows her is always made of crystal.
Inner World: A pine forest.
Basic Zanpakuto Attacks/Powers:


─Zanpakuto Information {Shikai}─

Shikai Incantation: Reflect Facet
Shikai Appearance: The katana turns into crystal that is as hard as any steel, cool or warm to the touch depending on the time of day. Night-cool, Day- warm.
Shikai Abilities: The katana turns into crystal that is as hard as any steel, cool or warm to the touch depending on the time of day. Night-cool, Day- warm.
Shikai Techniques: Facet can make several (1-6) ‘reflections’ of Yukumi that she can physically jump between like a perfected flash step. The limit to this is that they all must be within line of sight to each other. She occasionally uses this ability to do something akin to Byakuya's Senka, maneuvering herself into a copy that is behind her target. Making copies beyond 6 in an hour will damage her zanpakuto. As such she can turn her copies on and off to use for speed as opposed to offensive so they are less likely to be damaged and explode. When these copies are damaged they explode in a cloud of finely crushed crystal. Clinging to anyone within them and burning into the flesh like acid for a few minutes before they fade away. She can turn them on and off, heightening her ability to move and to keep them around for longer periods.
1: A secondary ability to this is to reflect a moment out of step to where she really is. Giving her a further edge on avoiding incoming attacks or having a further reach than the enemy may anticipate.
2: Minor Illusions/Temporary Blindness - Her blade can reflect anything within view and make an illusionary copy of it, be it an enemy or item. Using the same ability it is able to focus even a small amount of light onto the face of an enemy and blind them temporarily.
3: Allowing her blade to shorten, which weakens the other attacks she has with it but when it does so it breaks down into tiny glass particle's in the air. She can do this to inject the pieces into a wound when she attacks making it effectively impossible to heal with the glass remains or more commonly into the air around her to leave for the targets to breath in. Which would be quite painful and disorienting. Calling the blade back together makes small slices in anyone that breathed in the fine pieces as it cuts through their flesh to return to it's normal place.


─Zanpakuto Information {Bankai}─

Bankai Name: Diamond Shift
Bankai Incantation: Same as name?
(Some like their Zanpakuto's with this, others do not. Its completely optional.)
Zanpakuto Spirit Appearance {While Bankai is Active}: As above.
Bankai Appearance: Where in it's Shikai form the blade only turns to crystal, in it's Bankai that extends to transform Shizuka as well. Where the blade has always been more defensive than offensive, in this form that grows exponentially. Shizuka's flesh is more difficult to cut, requiring heavier blows to pierce at all. In this form she retains all the abilities of her Shikai form, though when she creates copies of herself she can create six per minute as opposed to per hour.
Bankai Attacks/Abilities: Having only recently developed her Bankai she's worked hard to be able to combat with it but it remains touchy for her. It's difficult to use reliably for more than a five minutes at this time.
1. Copies: As already mentioned above - but more frequent. If copies from the prior minute haven't exploded she can continue to build on to her total each minute she's in Bankai. 2 mins - 12, 3 mins - 18, 4 mins - 24, and so on.
2. Invisibility: When Shizuka drops her offensive capabilities she can turn herself and any within her line of sight effectively invisible. It is more than sight being reflected however, all senses as well as those involving spiritual senses are turned back.
3. Diamond Dust - By breaking her own ability to use her Diamond Body for 6 minutes the skin flakes off and then falls on her enemies from the sky. Anyone she chooses touched by the dust is temporarily converted to a weak version of her form, as opposed to diamond, it actually is more a weak glass or crystal, and the blows they take while so cursed (1 min) deal much greater damage to them. If she deactivates her Bankai in this way she cannot use it again for at least half an hour.


─Kidō Information─


Bakudō Level:
#81 - Danku - Severing Void - She can cast Bakudo with fair skill though is by no means exceptional.
Hadō Level:
#73 - Soren Sokatsui - Twin-wake Blue Firefall - Same as Bakudo.
Yusō Chūdō Level:
(The ability your character can perform in Yusō Chūdō, up to what number and with what skill.)
Chiyu Chūdō Level:
Her healing ability is skilled, beyond your average none 4th squad member easily.
Shien Hōhō Level:
Fair.
Hybrid Techniques:
None atm.
Forbidden Kidō:
None


─Physical Information─


Hohō Level:
Shizuka is well trained in flash step, likely beyond your average lieutenant. Her quickness only made faster thanks to the ability of her blade. With her shikai active she can easily keep up with a captain's level of flash step.
Hakuda Level:
Shizuka is not good at hand to hand. She could manage against someone with basic training like her own but would not do well without a weapon against someone trained better than she was.
Zanjutsu Level:
Shizuka has trained with her blade often, and sometimes to nearly the point of unconsciousness, taking her personal ability seriously as her skill reflects on her squad as well as the squads as a whole. As a result she is excellent in melee combat.


─Relatives─

Mother: Yukumi Shizuka (she was named after her mother who died shortly after her birth)
Father: Yukumi Jyaki
Siblings: Borin, Ayame, and Tashikin
Aunts:
Uncles:
Grandparents:

─Relationships─

Love Interest: None
Friends:
Enemies:
Other Relations:


─Professional Status─

Affiliation: Lieutenant of Squad Six
Previous Affiliation: 3rd Seat of Squad Six
Occupation:
Previous Occupation:
Team: Squad Six
Partner:


─Skills Information─

Intelligence: 3 out of 5 - Good, she's intelligent but not a genius. She learns quickly enough but not at a breakneck speed.
Athletic Skill: Detailed below
Strength: 2 out of 5 - Average. She's strong enough from her consistent work outs but nothing exceptional.
Speed: 5 out of 5 - Exceptional. Shizuka is exceptionally fast, she's always been quick and held a certain natural affinity toward flash steps - it was how she was first discovered after all.
Agility: 4 out of 5 - Great. Shizuka can use her speed with great reactions as well, able to alter her movements as needed to the situation at hand.
Stamina: 3 out of 5 - Good. Lots of training has left her able to stand for longer periods than your average person.
Durability: 3 out of 5 - Good. Outside of Diamond Body she possesses a better than average capability with standing up to hits. Within Diamond Body it would be 5/5 or better if that was possible.
Endurance: Same as Stamina.
Flexibility: 3 out of 5 - Good. See Agility.

Any Special Skills:
(Unusual skills your character may have that make them unique from others, well more unique)


─Other Information─

Character Theme:
Other:
(Anything that wasn't covered in the Skeleton that you'd like to include.)

Because my squad is awesome! cool xD

I think She's Ready for the Full Review. She told me Earlier that She was finished xD

This took way too long to get done with. Sorry for that. Welp, here's what I found that needs explanation or revision. Just quote me back with your answers to questions, and responses to requests for revisions. You may reply back with a direct quote of the revision you have in mind, if you're unsure of my reaction to it, but once I'm certain all appropriate changes have been made, in the body of the profile, I'll approve it.

Okay so what this and your character's age implies is that it is several hundreds of years old. After all, most everyone else from that timeline is dead. This implies that your character is a survivor of sorts, but also only slightly talented, as most wielders of bankai tend to earn it within a century or two. You might want to review this and decide whether you're okay with having a character like this, or whether you want to make it younger to fit a more attractive span of growth. As far as I can tell, however, this shouldn't be against the rules, as the canon characters mentioned are little more than acquaintances.

This sounds more like an explanation of abilities, than appearance. And would ya look at that:
I would strongly suggest separating these two descriptions properly. It's sloppy to reiterate a point in such a blatant and immediate way, and I know you're not sloppy. What's more, I know very little about the actual blade. It could very well have morphed into a broadsword after this transformation.

I've underlined what I've found confusing or potentially hazardous. There's a set limit to these "reflections." This implies there's only so much Shizuka can actually do with this ability which is reasonable and very reassuring for someone in my position. But then there's a tack-on that says she can basically flip them on and off at will. That directly challenges the limit, by allowing Shizuka well in excess of 6 reflections withing a given period of 60 minutes. So now I want to know-was that number-6-a limitation of a total number of reflections allowed to appear in a given instant, simultaneously? Or a limit of the total allowed to appear within a 60-minute period?

I think my brain just kicked me. Explain please, because nothing in that sentence rounded out to a complete thought.

You will have to explain this in an ecstasy of detail, because this is remarkably vague which will not do. Illusions are a major ability and one which is frequently improperly handled or garners strong, unpleasant reactions. I'd like to know the nature and range of these illusions, how they are activated, and which senses they extend to.

The problem with this ability is that you have been so very un-forthcoming(it's too late to worry about the prevalence of this word) with the measurements of the weapon, and the general shape. It could very well be a buster sword to rival Cloud's from Final Fantasy. Makes a hefty difference as compared to a kitchen knife or a cutlass, wouldn't you agree? I need to know the range of this ability, and how long it can last, if there is a limit.

This isn't a description of how it looks, and so far there are none whatsoever to go by. The words "as above" are entirely too vague to derive an appearance from. As it stands, this entry is a list of abilities and should be relocated to the section below.

I need a post limit. Please and thank you.

All well and good, but you're making a leap from six reflections to 360 reflections. That's far too much and really seems like overkill. As a reminder, most bankais have a starting rate of 5x the power of their shikai. So maybe something like 30-60 clones an hour would be more rational, given a bankai can reach 10x the shikai. Now, while you're at it, explain these reflections' threshold for resistance to destruction.

I'm willing to let this one go if it's watered down, substantially. I would suggest limiting the extent of this ability's influence(as well as the rest of the zanpakutou) to exclusively visual capabilities. It seems illogical for a mirror to talk, and this isn't Snow White. What's more, by reflecting attempts to locate that which is hidden, you effectively make it impossible to locate until the "battery runs dry," so to speak. This opens you up for auto-dodges and auto-flees which are in violation of guild rules. And it's just crude to pull something like this in a fight.

This, again, sounds like far too much to try to expect from other combatants. You will be routinely and soundly shut down every time you try to use this technique in a fight. No one will willingly agree to having their character reduced to a lightweight contender in this manner(which doesn't even make sense in light of the abilities of the diamond form) and this is an ability that is too difficult to avoid as most battlefields have little in the way of overhead protection. It's what we call a lukewarm auto-hit for it is subtly worded to avoid indicating its nature. It's a misery trap. Unless it is more roundly characterized and limited, there's little chance it will be put through. I need ranges, post limits, damage quotients; the whole she-bang.

It sounds to me like this character isn't what you call a sterling example of technical fortitude, so I would urge you to reconsider giving it quite so much skill in this area. I'll go into detail further in my next point.

So, if we're making a list of skills, that's movement techs as her master skill, even though she has a replacement skill for them (and my reasoning there is that, with something to replace shunpo, she shouldn't have focused so much effort into it, right?). She's probably pretty good with a blade. She can hold her own, which makes sense given her zan always has a bladed form, we assume. She's got basic training in hand-to-hand, which, combined with her physique, probably makes her little more than a punching bag with anyone who has a higher skill level than her, or some sort of inherent advantage, such as great strength or height. And then she is unexpectedly good at kidou, though there really isn't anything prior to the kidou section to indicate she would be, or has a focus on it.
Most well-balanced Captains will have one master skill that they can own most or even all contenders in. They'll have worked that area of their prowess to the highest it will go because they've always been good with it, and they rely on it a lot, maybe just to make their zanpakutou's attacks work. Then they'll have a second skill they are either really good in or have mastered. But that's it. After that, they'll have something they're okay in, and something they aren't too great in. Sometimes RPers will also include reiryoku levels into this skill quartet(which includes hand-to-hand, bladework, footwork, and "magic"). Third seats, however, go for a different sort of skill map. They rarely have a mastery in one given area and when they do, the other areas suffer. They usually have two areas they're good in, one they're great in, and one they're bad in. You currently have what would be qualified as a "baby mastery." This character is mainly about movement techs, so naturally other areas should suffer some. I would considering lowering either kidou or zanjutsu to cope with this.

Affiliation generally refers to the group you're attached to. In this case, "Soul Society" "Seireitei" "shinigami" "Gotei 13" and "Squad Six" would be appropriate. Not your character's rank(which needs updating, by the way). In the occupation section, you'd be advised to say something to the extent of "shinigami" or "soldier," with prior occupation detailing the position she held in her father's shop. I'd also add in a place for your character's rank.