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Hi, my name is Jean, but I love the name Lillith, even if people say i'm spelling it wrong.

But anyways, I would like people to know I am on a phone so this wil seem like im being lazy typing this way. My comp is in the shop.

Okay, I am looking for someone is interested.in writing a novel with me. I have so much planned out, but I cant get it down on papper. So I decided, well, I have seen novels done by multiple people who wrote it. I need help getting more detailed, well extra stuff to make.it a pretty good story. Maybe a short story. I have had this idea for more then a year. I want to try and get it to be a novel, which is where you come in. I have so much planned and ideas of coruption.

If you are.interested, please pm me, and I will send you some info about it, see if it interests you.

Thank you for reading ^.^ <3333333~~~~~


Lillz

I need alot of help, maybe we can rp some of the parts to make it seem better? I don't know, I need help big time >.<

I was looking through some old files on my laptop and came across the beginning of a short series I started during highschool a few years ago and thought I'd see what everyone thought. So read and enjoy. Constructive criticism also appreciated, if I do anything else with this.

Chapter One
“The day of beginnings”

~The sun was just beginning to rise on the land of Nor Lina, the sun’s rays casting its light over the earth and its creatures. Nestled at the edge of a forest located towards the east of the Ock mountains, lies a small camp with two tents set about a doused campfire. Two hounds, giant mutated dogs that have been domesticated, sleep nearby. Kneeling in front of the extinguished campfire is a man, wearing black and red clothing and armor with a great sword strapped across his back. The man appears to be in his early thirties, boasting a goatee and long, brown hair and eyes. As he kneels in front of the fire ring, he looks at the dry wood he has collected for the fire with intense concentration.
A few moments later another man appears out of the trees dragging a deer-sized animal behind him. As he approaches the camp, he calls out to his companion in front of the fire ring with a sarcastic remark, “Good to see such a roaring fire going Dave!” He drops his catch of the morning next to his companion and reaches his hand towards the dry wood. A tiny orb of light shoots from his hand and lands on the wood, catching fire easily. The man turns back to his friend and frowns at him, “What’s wrong with you? I thought you said you were gonna get the fire going? He says questioningly to David. The other man shrugs and begins to skin the animal with a small machete like knife holstered to his side. “I tried to tell you I’m not as good as you at the whole spell casting thing remember? But you went running off before I could say anything.” He cuts the last of the fur from their kill and spits it on a long stick, letting it hang over the newly started fire. He looks up at the other as he cleans his knife of the animals blood.
The other man was clothed in the same fashion as David, black and red armor with protective material underneath. He was of a darker skin tone, being of Puerto Rican descent and was also in his early thirties, about one year younger. His face was cleaner than the others, but still showed a bit of peach fuzz about the chin. Across his back were two katanas .David remarks on the mans exhausted expression “No wonder you look so tired Julian. You did the hunting then had to start the fire for me. How long did it take to catch this thing anyway?” He asks Julian with curiousity. Julian sits beside him and watches the beast roast on the fire as he answers Davids question. “Only took about thirty minutes or so, but the damn thing almost got away it was so quick.” He sighs and looks up at the sky through the trees “Man, still can’t believe how long its been since all that chaos back then.” David sighs as well and leans against a boulder sitting behind him. He replys with a small laugh “Doesn’t seem like thirteen years does it? Still can’t get over the fact that we both joined the same mercenary guild once our families came out of hiding from the chaos.” He picks at a speck on his armor and twists the roasting beast around to get it cooked fully, its aroma beginning to waft around the camp, awakening their hounds. Julian laughs back at David and replys by kicking his foot “I’m still stuck on the fact the Mr. Ewalt, Our guidance counselor in high school, turned out to have started said guild and has developed the power of temporary foresight, literally making him The Oracle.” Julian laughs as he recounts their younger years. David smiles and tests the beast for proper temperature, then cuts off a portion for him and Julian, then throws the rest to the hounds, who dig into it gratefully. Looking at his friend again, he points to his sword. “Amazing how well he organized the guild, including training and all. I never dreamed I’d actually learn swordmanship and be fighting dangerous people and creatures.” Julian nods in agreement and takes a bite of his food, then swallows. “Well, we are now and it’s going to be this way from now on. So anyway, what was our mission out here again?” he asks aloud as he devours his food. David sneers and answers “Maybe if you pay attention for once in mission briefing, we would be able to finish faster.” Julian shrugs and finishes his meal “Well, you know how I was in school. Never listened much anyway.” He chuckles to himself. David shakes his head and smiles “Well anyway, our mission this time is to take care of a dangerous creature somewhere in this region that has been plaguing some nearby villages. As far as the reports say, some livestock have been killed and about five known deaths or missing persons reports.” Julian whistles in amazement and his eyes widen “Wow, sounds like a tough job. The Oracle sure we can do this one right?” David grins with confidence “of course we can, that’s why we’re a team. We do better together than apart remember? My strength and superior swordsmanship with your magic prowess and speed, along with both our determination will make any job an easy win for us.” Julian nods and stands, stretching his arm and legs. ‘Well then, with that kind of speech, I’m all pumped up! Let’s get to work!” David smiles and stands as well, walking towards the two hounds. One hound lowers onto its stomach, allowing David to jump up onto its back and grab the reins around its neck. Julian does the same after using a shrinking spell on the tents and packing them away. The hounds take off side by side as their riders drive them further along the edge of the forest, closer to their targets area of preference.~

Could you tell us more about the story? What kind of corrupton as in government or a more personal level as in the loss of empathy and morals? Is it sci-fi, drama, adventure, or some kind of romance against bitter social struggles? Basically what's the idea or should I just go ahead and PM you?

Okey doke, sending PM