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Name: Eloise-Mae Juniper

Nickname: Ellie, Ellie-Mae, EJ

Age: 17

Birthday: February 27th

Sign: Pisces

Gemstone: Aquamarine

Blood Type: AB

Fav. Food: Chocolate

Hated Food: Vegetables (peas are the only exception)

School: St Magdalena's Seminary

Hobbies:

Kickboxing -- A recent venture, it was recommended upon her transfer to St Magdalena's that she needed an outlet for all of that negative energy. Kickboxing was the only suggestion that Ellie really fancied, and a year later she's gotten quite into it. What started out as more of a therapy session has turned into a hobby, and Ellie attends training twice a week at the local club. She hasn't competed properly yet, only in training matches, but she's hoping that will change this year as she makes the transition from hitting anything that moves to a well-trained kickboxer who thinks ahead and forms a strategy.

Horror Movies -- What isn't there to love above horror movies? Sure, normal movies are okay, but it's blood, guts and gore that really get Eloise's heart pumping. She watched her first horror film at the tender age of 8, and whilst most normal children might find themselves hiding behind the sofa bawling their eyes out, Eloise watched it with wide eyes of delight. She prefers a well-made horror movie, with equal amounts of suspense, thrill and gore, and has started branching out to watch subbed Japanese films after a friend made the suggestion.

Video Games -- Xbox, Gamecube, Dreamcast, Playstation, DS, Wii...you name it, Ellie's played it and is probably pretty damn good at it. She is proud to declare that she has at some point in her life owned/played on every games console in existence (even that Sega MegaDrive no-one remembers), and in most cases has rocked at it. She's a gaming nerd, even in possession of her very own gaming chair where she spends most of the time when she should be working (it's got her buttprint imprinted into it).

Virtues:

I know exactly what we need to do -- Ellie is the type to naturally take the leader role, always having some sort of solution for whatever the problem might be and eager to reap any rewards - even if they're just getting the damn thing over with. She'll step up when no-one else will, or if she thinks (read: knows) that she is the only suitable candidate, as it'll usually guarantee her brownie points or IOUs that can be traded in at a later date. Ellie is quite capable at achieving anything she puts her mind to, especially due to her knack of absorbing a lot of information in a small amount of time. She's a jack of all trades, able to pick up most skills with ease and often creative in finding solutions, not always taking the logical route if she thinks it'll be more fun another way. However, being a jack of all trades leads to being a master of none - she's alright at most things, but has too short an attention span to care enough and focus enough to become amazing. The only thing standing in the way is Ellie herself, as she'll often throw in the towel and get bored before she's become properly engaged in a task. She likes to think of herself as Robin Hood, leading a band of merry men on a fun adventure to winner-land.

Don't need anyone but me -- Eloise is a highly independent girl, and can take care of herself just fine. She's adept at cooking, cleaning, washing, hoovering (not to say that she actually bothers with it), and her parents are often off on weekend trips away while leaving the house in her care. When she is faced with the realization that there's a task she has to complete, Ellie is logical about it - she's well aware that she doesn't have the best attention span in the world, and so will divide it into manageable chunks with plenty of down-time in between. She's comfortable being by herself, and doesn't feel the need to immerse herself in a group of friends. Ellie loves thrills and challenges, and will actively seek them out - labelling something difficult won't deter her, it'll only make her more intent on conquering it.

Go with the flow -- Diaries are for losers, and Ellie finds it far more fun taking each day as it comes. Whilst she's good at organizing her time when she has no other choice, Ellie doesn't like the idea of scheduling every single part of your day - what if something amazing comes up but you've already got something planned? Being incredibly laid back is something Eloise is good at, and this extends to situations that could otherwise be extremely stressful. She doesn't panic or worry, keeping calm and trying to calm those down around her. There's no point getting yourself all worked up about it - that'll just make the whole thing worse, as far as Ellie is concerned. It's all about the ride, and having as much fun on it as you can, whatever obstacles stand in your way.

Flaws:

Punch first, questions later -- Not the most patient of people, Eloise tends to act first and ask questions later, with her action of choice usually being some type of physical violence. She isn't afraid to use her fists to solve an arguement, and actually believes it to be the best way to do so. Should someone say or do something she isn't happy with, she sees no problem with threatening them or hitting them - it's the most effective way of getting the message across. She's a very physical person, and this can make her seem very intimidating, and has given her a reputation as a bully.

What's in it for me? -- There's only one important person in Eloise's life, and that's herself. She won't do anything unless there's a positive outcome for herself and she doesn't have to go too far out of her way. Whilst she will stand up and take the leadership role, this is usually a last resort if no-one else offers, or if she knows that by doing so it'll make her life a lot easier further on down the line. Or, y'know, it might just be to piss off that other girl who wanted the role so bad. She's a very greedy person, and is quite focused on material possessions - Ellie would far rather have a motorbike than a close group of friends. She likes to think that she wouldn't amount to theft, and would violently deny such an accusation, but she has in fact shoplifted before on several occasions.

Hold on, I wasn't listening, say that again? -- Most of the time when talking to Ellie, you'll have to repeat something twice. She has a short attention span, and in all honesty that butterfly over there is probably a lot more interesting than you are anyway. She's cynical, and will often decide beforehand whether you're worth listening to or not. She's perfected the art of acting and seeming interested, whilst actually daydreaming or concentrating on something else.


PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: A pinky-red, raspberry sort of colour. Wide and round.

Hair: Short, straight and choppy. Pale blue with lots of chunky layers (it's very thick) a couple of which are pink. Shaved down one side, usually worn in a messy gel-ed up style. THIS.

Face: Round with large eyes and a small nose. Pink lips and naturally rosy cheeks.

Clothes: School uniform. Two thin gold bangles on her right wrist. She also has a gold ring in her nose, and two piercings in each ear lobe (civilian art please number six here and then one small gold hoop). And her belly button. (Plus her left n****e, but no-one needs to see that). She prefers gold jewellery to silver. She also has this tattoo in colour on her back, and the words carpe diem tattooed on the back of her neck.

Finished, and open for crit! <3

Ahhhh, thank you so much! <3

I've editted her traits as you've suggested, and tried to make certain things clearer and elaborate here and there as per your suggestions! :> I hope I've explained the jack of all trades thing a little better, that was bad wording on my part!

I also (I know you know this anyway xD) changed her hairstyle a little, as per your suggestion, thank you for the ref! <33

Changed her fuku with bucketloads of help from the amazing ende, and tweaked her attacks :>

How's she looking now? I hope I make more sense xD

Ahhh thank you I love you <3 <3 <3

Added the master of none clause (I knew I was missing part of that phrase!), and altered attacks in the ways suggested! I added durations and removed confusing statements about springs and ground debris so I hope it all looks better now! <3

Ahhh, thank you! This is like, insanely helpful, I'm really grateful <3

I have shuffled around that virtue as you suggested - I think I must have been a bit sleepy or out-of-it when I did the last rewrite, what with all these mistakes/things I missed! I have already got the statement 'The only thing standing in the way is Ellie herself, as she'll often throw in the towel and get bored before she's become properly engaged in a task.', but if you think I should expand/add a little more on it then I will certainly do my best!

Attacks have been rewritten again (properly this time ;; ). I hope the duration/size balance in Lilaea Burst is acceptable! With regards to how far the enemy is sent flying, I found it quite difficult to state outright since it will obviously depend on their weight, if they're standing directly on the spring or at an angle, etc, but I hope the bullet I added covers what you think I was missing :>

ilubby <333

Alrighty, so... Her civ side is fine, and most of her attacks are, as well, but let's hash out that Eternal attack, because as it stands, it's a tad OP.

First, she'll only be able to use an attack like that, once, what with the 4-6 springs appearing and blasting people off into the sky. Since this is magic, the weight of the opponent is irrelevant. To add a fun twist, I would make that dependent on the power level of the victim instead of weight! That is to say, a nega lieutenant might be sent FLYING off their feet, whereas a General King would be irritated that their footing was unstable, possibly making them slip in the water, and aw man, their uniform is all wet!

Once again, as Ephebe mentioned, falls from that high up can be lethal, and we try to stay away from that in attacks.

Feel free to quote me, when you address these issues!

I can't really crit her powered side, but I love her. ;w;