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 Posted: Sat Feb 04, 2012 9:51 am
Everyone can post their custom jutsu here. Remember to follow the rules or else you will be denied.
Rules:
1. Has to be a detailed explanation of the jutsu.
2. Be sure to check the jutsu and not simply copy them from a website.
3. If you break any of the rules your jutsu will denied.
4. We reserve the right to ask for an rp sample.
5. If your jutsu is accepted you do not automatically learn it.
6. Anyone can create custom jutsu here, but you must be at least chuunin level before you can learn jutsu unique to your character. (May change later.)
7. Only three jutsu may be submitted by a single person at any one time.
8. If there are more than ten jutsu unapproved already, please refrain from posting until the numbers have gone down.
9. Please do not apply for personal customs that you cannot currently learn. it is a waste of our time and yours until you have achieved the proper requirements for learning.
Jutsu Specific Rules
1. If you are making an upgraded version of an existing jutsu, make sure to state that in the application, and include the original as a requirement for learning it.
2. No attack may be unstoppable.
3. No defense may be impenetrable.
4. No jutsu may increase the power of other jutsu.
5. Solid clones must be at least C rank, and no clone may transfer memories below A rank.
Personal Custom Limits
Genin: 3 Jutsu
Chuunin: 7 Jutsu
Special Jounin: 9 Jutsu
Jounin: 11 Jutsu
S Rank: 13 Jutsu
Specialist professions may have an extra two jutsu per rank, restricted to their specialization.
[b]Guildwide/Personal[/b] {Remove the false tag.}
[i][b]Rank:[/b] (Rank of jutsu)
[b]Type:[/b] (Type of technique: Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Taijutsu, etc...) | (Combat Use: Offensive, Defensive, or Supplementary)
[b]Element:[/b]
[b]Units:[/b] (For Sand, Iron Sand, and Gold Dust.)
[b]Senses:[/b] (Genjutsu only, what senses are affected by the genjutsu.)
[b]Range:[/b] {Remove if inapplicable.}
[b]Catalyst:[/b] { For Genjutsu. Remove if inapplicable.}
[b]Prerequisites:[/b] {Remove if inapplicable.}
[b]Description:[/b][/i] (The description of the jutsu goes here)
Hikaro_Rin Edit: added senses field
Hinote Edit: Added Unit field.
Hikaro_Rin Edit: added Personal jutsu limit
Hinote Edit: Removed contradictory limitation rule.
Hinote Edit: Added Rule 9. Added Personal Custom Limits
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 1:59 pm
Personal
Thundering Claw
Rank:
C
Type:
Nin/Tai | Offencive
Element:
Raiton
Description:
Laxus makes his hand seem like a claw by curling his fingers, pushing his middle and pointer together, and his ring and pinky together forming a three pronged claw. Laxus then forces a vast amount of Raiton into the hand, charging the entire hand with a large amount of electrical power. The tips of his fingers gain a small blade like quality, although it is about as sharp as a dull knife, the hand takes on the appearance of a glowing talon. Grasping an opponent with it creates three small puncture wounds about 1 millimeter into the body, and confers a B rank amount of lightning damage, and makes a loud booming noise. Merely scraping an opponent with this technique convers a shallow cut, and a D rank amount of shock to the opponent. The technique lasts for a number of posts equal to the user's ability to use Raiton. Upon touch, the claw dissapates, whether it be with the target, or anything aside from the user.
Note: rank + any benefits that would raise Raiton efficency = number of posts it stays ( Chunnin with Elemental control while not around element would have it available for 4 posts if they don't touch anything with it. )
Note: Metal weapons that are not specifically stated to be insulated, if used to block, will transfer a C rank amount of shock to the wielder of the weapon.
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 5:34 pm
Guildwide/Personal Personal
Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique)
Rank: B-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive.
Element: N/A
Range: 0-150 ft. (46 meters)
Prerequisites: Senbon
Description: The name for this technique originates from Luo watching the fishermen of Kiri take on larger fish with the traditional harpoon. Luo was fascinated with the traditional fishing method in that he could see a parallel between the harpoon and the senbon. Although varying in size tremendously, both aimed to strike vital points effectively. So, in keeping with his recent development of weapon releases, he decided to incorporate this ideal into the weapon. By first throwing the senbon, and altering them completely with chakra, Luo can cause a great number of them to elongate and widen. The senbon become three inches thick, and eight feet long. By increasing weight, the senbon in flight become more deadly, especially if thrown from above, gaining speed as they fall to the ground. Relatively light in nature, these enlarged senbon are still fairly speedy when thrown by hand, and pack quite the serious impaling ability as well. When thrown, the trajectory of the weapons can be guided, but only to a minimal extent; just enough to be directed towards their opponent. At one time, a maximum of twenty can be formed. If used correctly, this jutsu has the capability to be used as multiple lightning rods, re-directing the lightning flow of raiton C-rank and below.
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Guildwide/Personal Personal
Bokiton: Amatsu Yari Itsutsu (Weapon Release: Five Heavenly Spears)
Rank: A-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive/Defensive
Element: N/A
Prerequisites: Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique)
Description: This is the advanced version of the senbon harpoon technique, sacrificing speed for power. This technique starts with the maximum amount of harpoon senbon (20) forming together in groups of five quickly. After this happens, they seem to meld together quickly into five rather large senbon spears, although some would call them small pillars. Six feet in length, and 2ft in diameter, these spears are meant for serious brute force. The tip of each large spear is still sharp, however it's usually the force of impact that is the cause of impalement with these, not sheer sharpness. Luo quite astute in sōjutsu, or the art of wielding the spear, notes that while these are certainly not meant for throwing, they can individually be wielded as large spears by only the most capable (in terms of strength) shinobi. In other words, wielding one of these would require the strength to effectively wield a weapon weighing two-hundred pounds.
When dropped from more than thirty feet in the air, these spears can cause radial craters of three feet to form around the impact epicenter, jarring anyone in the vicinity and knocking them off balance. Three of these pillars formed in a triangle around the user are capable of redistributing any raiton of A-rank and below, and arranging all five in a pentagon around the user causes the technique to be capable of deflecting one S-rank raiton technique, granting this jutsu its name. However, there is one drawback to deflecting a technique of such magnitude: The molecular structure of the pillars becomes highly unstable, and if a second raiton technique of any rank is performed in close proximity activating their electrical arcing abilities, the pillars will explode into five-hundred normal sized senbon, one-hundred for each pillar. This explosion is random in nature, and can even maim the person who used the technique.
Another thing to note, is that this is after all metal. Katon of B-rank or higher can also change the molecular structure of the metal, melting each pillar individually completely.
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 5:59 pm
@Tim: Why would a C rank technique do B rank damage?
How long are these claws?
Senbon Harpoon: If the technique costs charak, Approved
Fice Heavenly Spears: Same as the last one.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 6:29 pm
Luo1304 Guildwide/Personal Personal Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique) Rank: B-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive.
Element: N/A
Range: 0-150 ft. (46 meters)
Prerequisites: Senbon
Description: The name for this technique originates from Luo watching the fishermen of Kiri take on larger fish with the traditional harpoon. Luo was fascinated with the traditional fishing method in that he could see a parallel between the harpoon and the senbon. Although varying in size tremendously, both aimed to strike vital points effectively. So, in keeping with his recent development of weapon releases, he decided to incorporate this ideal into the weapon. By first throwing the senbon, and altering them completely with chakra, Luo can cause a great number of them to elongate and widen. The senbon become three inches thick, and eight feet long. By increasing weight, the senbon in flight become more deadly, especially if thrown from above, gaining speed as they fall to the ground. Relatively light in nature, these enlarged senbon are still fairly speedy when thrown by hand, and pack quite the serious impaling ability as well. When thrown, the trajectory of the weapons can be guided, but only to a minimal extent; just enough to be directed towards their opponent. At one time, a maximum of twenty can be formed. If used correctly, this jutsu has the capability to be used as multiple lightning rods, re-directing the lightning flow of raiton C-rank and below. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Guildwide/Personal Personal Bokiton: Amatsu Yari Itsutsu (Weapon Release: Five Heavenly Spears) Rank: A-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive/Defensive
Element: N/A
Prerequisites: Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique)
Description: This is the advanced version of the senbon harpoon technique, sacrificing speed for power. This technique starts with the maximum amount of harpoon senbon (20) forming together in groups of five quickly. After this happens, they seem to meld together quickly into five rather large senbon spears, although some would call them small pillars. Six feet in length, and 2ft in diameter, these spears are meant for serious brute force. The tip of each large spear is still sharp, however it's usually the force of impact that is the cause of impalement with these, not sheer sharpness. Luo quite astute in sōjutsu, or the art of wielding the spear, notes that while these are certainly not meant for throwing, they can individually be wielded as large spears by only the most capable (in terms of strength) shinobi. In other words, wielding one of these would require the strength to effectively wield a weapon weighing two-hundred pounds. When dropped from more than thirty feet in the air, these spears can cause radial craters of three feet to form around the impact epicenter, jarring anyone in the vicinity and knocking them off balance. Three of these pillars formed in a triangle around the user are capable of redistributing any raiton of A-rank and below, and arranging all five in a pentagon around the user causes the technique to be capable of deflecting one S-rank raiton technique, granting this jutsu its name. However, there is one drawback to deflecting a technique of such magnitude: The molecular structure of the pillars becomes highly unstable, and if a second raiton technique of any rank is performed in close proximity activating their electrical arcing abilities, the pillars will explode into five-hundred normal sized senbon, one-hundred for each pillar. This explosion is random in nature, and can even maim the person who used the technique. Another thing to note, is that this is after all metal. Katon of B-rank or higher can also change the molecular structure of the metal, melting each pillar individually completely. Reading these, and noting that both have secondary abilities, (Many abilities for the second.) I get the impression you're trying to make a style out of a single jutsu. If you aren't though, I'd recommend doing it. Breaking down each ability contained in these jutsu into a single move, and adding some lower ranking moves of course, could make for a very unique style. And considering Luo is apparently known for fighting with senbon, a senbon based style could be a good idea anyways.
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Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2012 7:27 pm
Hinote Tosatsu Luo1304 Guildwide/Personal Personal Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique) Rank: B-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive.
Element: N/A
Range: 0-150 ft. (46 meters)
Prerequisites: Senbon
Description: The name for this technique originates from Luo watching the fishermen of Kiri take on larger fish with the traditional harpoon. Luo was fascinated with the traditional fishing method in that he could see a parallel between the harpoon and the senbon. Although varying in size tremendously, both aimed to strike vital points effectively. So, in keeping with his recent development of weapon releases, he decided to incorporate this ideal into the weapon. By first throwing the senbon, and altering them completely with chakra, Luo can cause a great number of them to elongate and widen. The senbon become three inches thick, and eight feet long. By increasing weight, the senbon in flight become more deadly, especially if thrown from above, gaining speed as they fall to the ground. Relatively light in nature, these enlarged senbon are still fairly speedy when thrown by hand, and pack quite the serious impaling ability as well. When thrown, the trajectory of the weapons can be guided, but only to a minimal extent; just enough to be directed towards their opponent. At one time, a maximum of twenty can be formed. If used correctly, this jutsu has the capability to be used as multiple lightning rods, re-directing the lightning flow of raiton C-rank and below. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Guildwide/Personal Personal Bokiton: Amatsu Yari Itsutsu (Weapon Release: Five Heavenly Spears) Rank: A-rank
Type: Nin/Ken | Offensive/Defensive
Element: N/A
Prerequisites: Bokiton: Mori Senbon no Jutsu (Weapon Release: Senbon Harpoon Technique)
Description: This is the advanced version of the senbon harpoon technique, sacrificing speed for power. This technique starts with the maximum amount of harpoon senbon (20) forming together in groups of five quickly. After this happens, they seem to meld together quickly into five rather large senbon spears, although some would call them small pillars. Six feet in length, and 2ft in diameter, these spears are meant for serious brute force. The tip of each large spear is still sharp, however it's usually the force of impact that is the cause of impalement with these, not sheer sharpness. Luo quite astute in sōjutsu, or the art of wielding the spear, notes that while these are certainly not meant for throwing, they can individually be wielded as large spears by only the most capable (in terms of strength) shinobi. In other words, wielding one of these would require the strength to effectively wield a weapon weighing two-hundred pounds. When dropped from more than thirty feet in the air, these spears can cause radial craters of three feet to form around the impact epicenter, jarring anyone in the vicinity and knocking them off balance. Three of these pillars formed in a triangle around the user are capable of redistributing any raiton of A-rank and below, and arranging all five in a pentagon around the user causes the technique to be capable of deflecting one S-rank raiton technique, granting this jutsu its name. However, there is one drawback to deflecting a technique of such magnitude: The molecular structure of the pillars becomes highly unstable, and if a second raiton technique of any rank is performed in close proximity activating their electrical arcing abilities, the pillars will explode into five-hundred normal sized senbon, one-hundred for each pillar. This explosion is random in nature, and can even maim the person who used the technique. Another thing to note, is that this is after all metal. Katon of B-rank or higher can also change the molecular structure of the metal, melting each pillar individually completely. Reading these, and noting that both have secondary abilities, (Many abilities for the second.) I get the impression you're trying to make a style out of a single jutsu. If you aren't though, I'd recommend doing it. Breaking down each ability contained in these jutsu into a single move, and adding some lower ranking moves of course, could make for a very unique style. And considering Luo is apparently known for fighting with senbon, a senbon based style could be a good idea anyways. Well, I've been creating a 'style' of sorts for weapons (mainly senbon), but because each technique is chakra based I wouldn't go so far as to make it a weapon style alone, which is why it's a nin/ken. I'm just trying to build up enough Bokiton (weapon releases) to make them into their own style of jutsu unique to weapon masters. As far as the secondary abilities, I just figured I'd go the extra mile and make it very apparent that obviously metal will attract lightning. I didn't want to create the jutsu and then use them to redirect a raiton technique only to be told they can't do it for some reason haha. But doooon't worry, I'll be cranking out more Senbon based Bokiton when I get the ideas to fully create a style, and then create a standard Guildwide set. @Akura: Yeah, their rank is their chakra cost according to the chakra system as well.
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Posted: Mon Feb 13, 2012 8:27 am
iAkura-kun @Tim: Why would a C rank technique do B rank damage? How long are these claws? Senbon Harpoon: If the technique costs charak, Approved Fice Heavenly Spears: Same as the last one. Because, by grasping you transfer the entire build up of the claws, where as scraping just transfers a small amount and dissapates. And as for how long, enough to cover the entire hand, and about 2 centimeters longer than the fingers themselves.
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 10:13 am
TvIaMsOqTuHeYz Personal Thundering Claw Rank:
C
Type:
Nin/Tai | Offencive
Element:
Raiton
Description:Laxus makes his hand seem like a claw by curling his fingers, pushing his middle and pointer together, and his ring and pinky together forming a three pronged claw. Laxus then forces a vast amount of Raiton into the hand, charging the entire hand with a large amount of electrical power. The tips of his fingers gain a small blade like quality, although it is about as sharp as a dull knife, the hand takes on the appearance of a glowing talon. Grasping an opponent with it creates three small puncture wounds about 1 millimeter into the body, and confers a B rank amount of lightning damage, and makes a loud booming noise. Merely scraping an opponent with this technique convers a shallow cut, and a D rank amount of shock to the opponent. The technique lasts for a number of posts equal to the user's ability to use Raiton. Upon touch, the claw dissapates, whether it be with the target, or anything aside from the user. Note: rank + any benefits that would raise Raiton efficency = number of posts it stays ( Chunnin with Elemental control while not around element would have it available for 4 posts if they don't touch anything with it. ) Note: Metal weapons that are not specifically stated to be insulated, if used to block, will transfer a C rank amount of shock to the wielder of the weapon.
No attack jutsu may have attack power higher than it's own rank. And as a grasping attack, merely touching your opponent should not have any effect at all. Same with the weapon note. If the raiton is charged in the fingers, you couldn't simply grab a weapon and shock someone through it. This jutsu reads as the chakra being focused to the fingers and sent into the opponent upon stabbing them with the claws.
The technique may only last long enough for one use.
Why would a stabbing/electrocuting attack create thunder? Seeing as there are jutsu specifically meant to do that, remove that from it. It really doesn't even make sense.
Less a judgement than a criticism, folding your hand into the claw shape designated by this jutsu is actually quite uncomfortable, difficult to hold, and doesn't really create the implied image. To me, it'd be more effective in so very many ways to simply tip each finger with the raiton claws than to try and do it that way.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 2:51 pm
Hinote Tosatsu TvIaMsOqTuHeYz Personal Thundering Claw Rank:
C
Type:
Nin/Tai | Offencive
Element:
Raiton
Description:Laxus makes his hand seem like a claw by curling his fingers, pushing his middle and pointer together, and his ring and pinky together forming a three pronged claw. Laxus then forces a vast amount of Raiton into the hand, charging the entire hand with a large amount of electrical power. The tips of his fingers gain a small blade like quality, although it is about as sharp as a dull knife, the hand takes on the appearance of a glowing talon. Grasping an opponent with it creates three small puncture wounds about 1 millimeter into the body, and confers a B rank amount of lightning damage, and makes a loud booming noise. Merely scraping an opponent with this technique convers a shallow cut, and a D rank amount of shock to the opponent. The technique lasts for a number of posts equal to the user's ability to use Raiton. Upon touch, the claw dissapates, whether it be with the target, or anything aside from the user. Note: rank + any benefits that would raise Raiton efficency = number of posts it stays ( Chunnin with Elemental control while not around element would have it available for 4 posts if they don't touch anything with it. ) Note: Metal weapons that are not specifically stated to be insulated, if used to block, will transfer a C rank amount of shock to the wielder of the weapon. No attack jutsu may have attack power higher than it's own rank. And as a grasping attack, merely touching your opponent should not have any effect at all. Same with the weapon note. If the raiton is charged in the fingers, you couldn't simply grab a weapon and shock someone through it. This jutsu reads as the chakra being focused to the fingers and sent into the opponent upon stabbing them with the claws. The technique may only last long enough for one use. Why would a stabbing/electrocuting attack create thunder? Seeing as there are jutsu specifically meant to do that, remove that from it. It really doesn't even make sense. Less a judgement than a criticism, folding your hand into the claw shape designated by this jutsu is actually quite uncomfortable, difficult to hold, and doesn't really create the implied image. To me, it'd be more effective in so very many ways to simply tip each finger with the raiton claws than to try and do it that way. The reason that it has the B rank damage on grasping is because 3 D rank shocks are stacked ontop of eachother, as well as the chakra coating the hand. Instead of saying 3 different D ranked zaps, I merely said a B rank amount of damage. The claws are curved at the end, like an actual claw, thusly by grasping, you sink the tips of the claws into the skin, delivering the shock. I'm not sure of any animal, living or dead that has perfectly straight claws. Metal conducts electricity, so if the weapon is metal it would conduct the electricity of the claw into the opponent. Only a C ranked amount because the shock would partially tranfer to the wooden handle of a blade. Not to mention Laxus would be severely cut by the opponent's blade. If someone touches anything electrical with metal that isn't insulated, then they're going to get shocked. It does only last long enough for one use... It lasts the number of posts equal to the user's rank, plus any rank benefits, or upon contact with something. This includes just scraping someone, or the ground. The reason I don't want it to be one post is simply becase it would be annoying for someone to just simply say they dodged the technique, and it disappears. Because Thunder is the sound of Lightning striking the earth, therefore, since the Technique is lightning based, it isn't going to be silent. If it bothers you that much, I'll edit that out, but I still don't understand why it shouldn't be there, Electricity is never silent. Meh, I have a tendon deficiency in both hands, so I can easily make a claw, so I didn't think much about it. Originally I was going to mname it something along the lines of Thundering Dragon claw, but I decided against it. I'll clarify things more clearly within the technique, and I'll put that each prong confers a D ranked voltage into the opponent if the B ranked seems too powerful. If you think it'll get the technique passed, I'll even put in that two more prongs ( Each finger individually ) are created, although that would be two more D ranked voltages. If you want, I could say C rank in difficulty, B rank in power and Learning.
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 5:37 pm
TvIaMsOqTuHeYz The reason that it has the B rank damage on grasping is because 3 D rank shocks are stacked ontop of eachother, as well as the chakra coating the hand. Instead of saying 3 different D ranked zaps, I merely said a B rank amount of damage. The claws are curved at the end, like an actual claw, thusly by grasping, you sink the tips of the claws into the skin, delivering the shock. I'm not sure of any animal, living or dead that has perfectly straight claws. Metal conducts electricity, so if the weapon is metal it would conduct the electricity of the claw into the opponent. Only a C ranked amount because the shock would partially tranfer to the wooden handle of a blade. Not to mention Laxus would be severely cut by the opponent's blade. If someone touches anything electrical with metal that isn't insulated, then they're going to get shocked. It does only last long enough for one use... It lasts the number of posts equal to the user's rank, plus any rank benefits, or upon contact with something. This includes just scraping someone, or the ground. The reason I don't want it to be one post is simply becase it would be annoying for someone to just simply say they dodged the technique, and it disappears. Because Thunder is the sound of Lightning striking the earth, therefore, since the Technique is lightning based, it isn't going to be silent. If it bothers you that much, I'll edit that out, but I still don't understand why it shouldn't be there, Electricity is never silent. Meh, I have a tendon deficiency in both hands, so I can easily make a claw, so I didn't think much about it. Originally I was going to mname it something along the lines of Thundering Dragon claw, but I decided against it. I'll clarify things more clearly within the technique, and I'll put that each prong confers a D ranked voltage into the opponent if the B ranked seems too powerful. If you think it'll get the technique passed, I'll even put in that two more prongs ( Each finger individually ) are created, although that would be two more D ranked voltages. If you want, I could say C rank in difficulty, B rank in power and Learning. Again, the power of an attack may not exceed it's rank. Your delivery method is why I say scraping attacks would not work, nor grabbing a weapon. Those parts should be removed entirely. An attack like this can be held until it's used, meaning you don't need to specify how long it lasts, so long as it dispels after one use. Thunder is the sound created when air enters the vacuum created by lightning traveling through the air. It moves so quickly that it creates an empty space, which air then enters rapidly, creating the sound we know as thunder. It has nothing to do with the ground, and does not relate in any way to this attack. If the attack delivers a D ranked shock for every prong/finger/hit, specify in the technique that it costs D ranked chakra per finger. This would actually make it more costly and less powerful however, than simply having the C ranked damage.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:05 pm
Hinote Tosatsu TvIaMsOqTuHeYz The reason that it has the B rank damage on grasping is because 3 D rank shocks are stacked ontop of eachother, as well as the chakra coating the hand. Instead of saying 3 different D ranked zaps, I merely said a B rank amount of damage. The claws are curved at the end, like an actual claw, thusly by grasping, you sink the tips of the claws into the skin, delivering the shock. I'm not sure of any animal, living or dead that has perfectly straight claws. Metal conducts electricity, so if the weapon is metal it would conduct the electricity of the claw into the opponent. Only a C ranked amount because the shock would partially tranfer to the wooden handle of a blade. Not to mention Laxus would be severely cut by the opponent's blade. If someone touches anything electrical with metal that isn't insulated, then they're going to get shocked. It does only last long enough for one use... It lasts the number of posts equal to the user's rank, plus any rank benefits, or upon contact with something. This includes just scraping someone, or the ground. The reason I don't want it to be one post is simply becase it would be annoying for someone to just simply say they dodged the technique, and it disappears. Because Thunder is the sound of Lightning striking the earth, therefore, since the Technique is lightning based, it isn't going to be silent. If it bothers you that much, I'll edit that out, but I still don't understand why it shouldn't be there, Electricity is never silent. Meh, I have a tendon deficiency in both hands, so I can easily make a claw, so I didn't think much about it. Originally I was going to mname it something along the lines of Thundering Dragon claw, but I decided against it. I'll clarify things more clearly within the technique, and I'll put that each prong confers a D ranked voltage into the opponent if the B ranked seems too powerful. If you think it'll get the technique passed, I'll even put in that two more prongs ( Each finger individually ) are created, although that would be two more D ranked voltages. If you want, I could say C rank in difficulty, B rank in power and Learning. Again, the power of an attack may not exceed it's rank. Your delivery method is why I say scraping attacks would not work, nor grabbing a weapon. Those parts should be removed entirely. An attack like this can be held until it's used, meaning you don't need to specify how long it lasts, so long as it dispels after one use. Thunder is the sound created when air enters the vacuum created by lightning traveling through the air. It moves so quickly that it creates an empty space, which air then enters rapidly, creating the sound we know as thunder. It has nothing to do with the ground, and does not relate in any way to this attack. If the attack delivers a D ranked shock for every prong/finger/hit, specify in the technique that it costs D ranked chakra per finger. This would actually make it more costly and less powerful however, than simply having the C ranked damage. How would scraping not confer the shock? It is literal electricity, if you touch it, it will shock you. If you get grasped by something electrical it will shock you. Thusly why these are a part of the technique. But the user has only expends enough power to keep the technique active for so long, otherwise I could just activate it at a time of peace, and hold it out until I needed it, reguardless of the time until I need it. I honestly dislike that we have techniques that have no specified length of time, and are simply put as indefinate until they serve their purpose. Ok, I thought that thunder was the sound of lightning colliding with an object, and the sound of that object's destruction/conduction. Ok, I'm thoughroughly confused, 5 D rank shocks at once are not equivalent to a C rank shock? I am completely and utterly confused. I would expect that draining 5 9 volt Batteries instantly would be much more painful than simply touching an electric fence. I've done both, and I'd have to say the 9 volts were more damaging, I couldn't feel my tounge for a few hours, where as the electric fence ( Which was merely powerful enough to keep a dog away from some bunnies. Yay bunnies. ) was a pleasant experience. ( I'm basing Laxus's reaction to electricity upon my own. )
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Posted: Mon Feb 27, 2012 7:06 pm
Alright. I'm only going to say this once.
Stop arguing with me. I have said what is required to get this technique approved, that is the end of it. You may argue a point if I ask a question on said point. If I simply say to change it, you change it. You may ask why, but you may not argue as you are attempting to do.
When you have made the required changes, re-post the technique, and quote me.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 29, 2012 4:26 pm
Wasn't attempting to argue with you, just wanting to know why those parts were needed to be taken out. Just forget about it, since the technique is useless unless he can cut you, which is only possible with a grasp.
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Posted: Wed Feb 29, 2012 6:07 pm
TvIaMsOqTuHeYz Wasn't attempting to argue with you, just wanting to know why those parts were needed to be taken out. Just forget about it, since the technique is useless unless he can cut you, which is only possible with a grasp. Any technique is useless unless it is used properly. I don't see the issue. But alright, it's your choice.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Mar 14, 2012 4:26 pm
Personal
Chained Lightning
Rank:
A
Type:
Nin/Tai
Offencive
Element:
Raiton
Description:
The user balls up both hands into fist, then pulsing lightning forcfully back and forth across their forarms makes their fists travel two ranks higher in speed for a single post making them capable of hitting an opponent of the same rank ten times, or someone of one rank higher speed five times, and someone of two ranks higher atleast once. Each successful hit transfers an E rank shock, which at the speed of the attacks, it feels like a single D rank shock. The speed is so fast, that it feels like one singular hit, except from an object much larger than Laxus's fists as Laxus has almost no time to actually aim it. This technique is nearly impossible to be fatal, and if not aimed at the torso, would probably miss more than it would hit.
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