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shibrogane

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 10, 2010 6:25 pm


Hi guys!

I will trade you art of your ITNOTM or quest character for crits~ or do critbacks! This is sort of what you can expect * u*

Do your worst, I can take it! B)
PostPosted: Fri Sep 10, 2010 6:45 pm


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Name: Honor Petrichor

Nickname: Honey

Age: 18

Birthday: 20 July

Sign: Cancer

Gemstone: Ruby

Blood Type: A+

Fav. Food: Every single flavor of Mountain Dew that was ever discontinued, ever. Peanut M&Ms. Cherry Limeade Sunkist.

Hated Food: Cotton candy, fried twinkies, twinkies, kitkat bars, spicy food.

School:  DCU (computer science major)
Honor dreams of being an astronomer, but in reality is a poor college kid who gets by on work-study, odd jobs, and scholarships. She can't pay for her own tuition if her parents won't support her, and she really wants a college degree. They won't support her if she pursues astronomy as a career field, so she settles for computer science, which she's passably good at and does enjoy, just not as much as she would astronomy.

Hobbies: 
Reading Science Fiction-- Honor has an almost slavish worship of the Science Fiction Greats. L. Ron Hubbard, Asimov, Frank Herbert, Scott Card--she's read at least one of their books each, usually the most popular, and has picked a favorite from each of them. Her bookshelf at home is remarkable simply because it is so goddamn full of this genre of books. Her nightstand is entirely consumed by novels. While she has no real interest in writing science fiction, she may or may not have occasional fantasies of being the characters. She tries to live her life as she imagines Gurney Halleck or Duncan Idaho would, but often ends up more along the lines of Leto II--at least, as far as her DnD group is concerned!

She also watches Star Trek and loves it like her firstborn child, particularly The Next Generation. Picard is her God. She also likes Spock. The reboot she thinks is pretty cool. She would give her virginity to Reboot!Spock, and also aspires to be like him. Ideally she would be smart like him, know all kinds of inane facts like him, and never be caught off guard, like him. Impossible, really, since she has a reactive personality rather than one that plans ahead. Her hair is cut the way it did from a flawed attempt at a Vulcan haircut, but if anyone asks she was inspired by Emma Watson.

Astronomy-- Honor wants to go to Space. She wants to be an astronaut really, really bad. So bad, she's expressed that she would cut off her legs if it meant she could go to space.

Since that's not going to happen any time soon, she makes do by reading about astronomy, learning about astronomy, wishing she was majoring in astrobiology or astronomy or astrophysics and just learning everything she can about space in the meantime. Want to know why you can't get pregnant in space? She knows. The temperature of the sun? It's about 30,000 degrees Kelvin. Did you know that a pinhole sized fragment of the sun can incinerate the average adult male at 160km?

Honor actually does not own one single telescope, besides one a little cousin jumped on and broke before she headed off to school. She DOES go out at obscene hours to watch meteor showers--any time the ISS does a pass over Destiny City she's outside at least an hour early, all bundled up and ready to watch them. Because of dormitory rules, she just has glow-in-the-dark stars on her walls in the shape of her particular favorite constellation (Cassiopeia and environs!) and also a few posters--a log scale chart of the universe, a subway map of the Milky Way, and also some legit pictures of space dust.

Dungeons and Dragons-- The year she moved to Destiny City, Honor wanted to make friends. The easiest way to do this, she thought, would be to take something she knew she was good at and turn it into a socializing activity. So she posted up bulletins around town to collect herself a group of adventurers. Not all of them panned out, but the others play with her to this day.

She is the DM of their happy little band; her favored guide character is the Lady of the Green Kirtle, a character name not so secretly yanked from the Chronicles of Narnia. Honor is much happier being out of the action and directing it herself, though she can be as much a PC-killer as anyone. She has a disturbing fondness for siccing flatbears on the party.

Virtues:
Reliable-- If Honor says she'll do something, she'll do it, just as promised. Ask her for a ride? She'll be there. Need snacks for the DnD game? She'll bring them. Need help with an essay? Honor's your girl. Though she will always, always, always pull through for you, it probably won't be exactly what you expected. She won't blow you off. She probably doesn't even know how to. And she will get her s**t done. It will happen, but it probably won't be impressive or amazing in any way.

Organized-- She isn't determinedly, purposefully organized, but she is still organized. It's sort of a passive trait in that she habitually puts things back where they belong, and has become used to things being where they should be. It's not a sweep-through-clean-the-house-it-must-be-where-I-put-it sort of thing, she's not exactly a vigilant neat freak who will eat your face if you move a snowglobe eight inches to the left, it's just a ho-hum-look-that's-out-of-place-let-me-put-it-away thing. Or a "well we're assigning parts of this project to get done, let's make a chart so everyone knows their part" thing.

This is because at heart she is pretty lazy, and likes having things be smooth and easy. It's easier to expend a little more effort at the beginning and not have to go through and clean up everything later--especially when she often doesn't have time to go through things twice!

Protective-- And how! Honor is not just protective of her friends, but of random people she sees on the street. Because she views the natural human state as happiness, she absolutely abhors seeing people in pain or afraid and does her best to alleviate anything she views as suffering. Honor cannot bear seeing people being disrespected, even if it's just a classroom debate. She gives five dollar bills to homeless people and helps peers with homework. When she comes across people being teased, she will get up in the bully's face and probably stomp on their feet and generally b***h at them, regardless of the consequences to herself.

This extends to physical objects, too, but only hers, and only certain of them. The list is: Laptop, books, iPod, wallet. You touch them without her permission, and she will try to eat your face. She's reasonable about it--if she dropped it and you're giving it back she won't accuse you of stealing. But she views messing with her personal possessions as immensely disrespectful, and thusly very do-not-want.

Flaws:
Unmotivated-- She just doesn't care all that much about classes. She can't achieve her dream--she's never, ever gonna go to space, because she's in the wrong career path--and she doesn't particularly care about computer science or programming, so why should she apply herself? Why should being a B/C student bother her? She's getting it done, she'll get a degree. Isn't that the important thing to everyone else?

Because she's unmotivated, everything she does is rushed. Papers are always done the night before, three-month projects bullshitted in two days before the due-date, journals meant to be written over a semester completed overnight. This makes her an expert at bringing ideas to fruition fast, but it also means she works way below her ability level. Those overnight papers, projects, and journals are B+ quality at tops, and C quality at worst; she squeaks by, when if she applied herself she could pull high As. She is actually really not bothered by those low grades. She got it done, didn't she?

Anxious-- Her last-minute attempts to get things done are motivated intensely by her own feelings of guilt and anxiety. The anxiety happens because she naturally likes to see people happy and feels like they depend on her to stay that way. She's naturally kind of lazy, though, and is pretty happy to stay on the internet until the clock starts winding down. This is why things that don't have grades, parental approval, or a paycheck riding on them happen at all. It gets to the point where she cannot think of anything but the things she is supposed to be doing, and then she will dash out and get things done.

Impulsive-- Honor doesn't really look ahead to the future. She tends to go with what sounds like the best idea right then, and go on with that. This happens with just about everything she does; something occurs, she goes with the first idea she has without stopping to think about it. The charts she makes to work out her time are mostly ignored because of this; if she gave things a little more thought, doubtless she'd be a lot better grades- and responsibility-wise. Her Dungeons and Dragons group has also had a disproportionate amount of unwinnable encounters with flatbears and the Borg because of this. It's entirely likely they cannot count the number of times they've been assimilated.

Self-righteous-- Remember how she's incredibly protective of everyone? This extends even to times when it's nowhere near appropriate. Honor will take a critique given to another student personally and disagree with it just because she thinks you're being mean. In her Dungeons and Dragons group, she will scold a player whose character is antagonistic to another's--even if it's completely IC because those two characters hate each other. She thinks because she is so reliable and nice, everyone should be just like her. And if they're not… it's entirely within her rights to b***h them out!

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: A striking sapphire blue.

Hair: Cornsilk-colored, pretty much; a white-blonde, worn cropped very, very close to her head--think Emma Watson's pixy cut for length.

Face: Heart-shaped, thin face. Her nose is Romanesque, she has full lips.

Clothes: Heavy sweaters and jeans, very college kid couture. Almost always has a scarf. Her ears are pierced.

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shibrogane

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 10, 2010 6:48 pm


Senshi: Sailor Atreus, Senshi of Drowning

Challenge: Inhale.

Fuku/Uniform: White main, blue secondary, black tertiary.
Concept thoughts: x x x: left

Attack #1: Atreus Immersion
Description-- Atreus grabs an opponent and orders them to drown.
Effects-- This attack simulates the effects of the mammalian diving reflex. The heart rate slows, extremities become cold, and the opponent begins to panic. It's more uncomfortable than painful. This is one of the first things a body will attempt to do to prevent drowning.
Range-- Line of sight. Atreus has to be able to touch the opponent for the attack to take effect.
Target-- Any one person indicated by Atreus.
Duration-- Thirty seconds or until Atreus can no longer indicate/touch the opponent she's attacking. Twice per battle.

Attack #1b: Atreus Immersion Terror
Description-- Atreus grabs hold of an opponent and orders them to drown.
Effects-- Atreus Immersion, but now the terror is near overwhelming; in addition to a slowed heart rate and cold extremities, the opponent will now have a coughing fit (in which case they will cough up water) or find it difficult to breathe.
Range-- Line of sight. Atreus has to be able to touch the opponent for the attack to take effect.
Target-- Any one person indicated by Atreus.
Duration-- Thirty seconds or until Atreus can no longer indicate/touch the opponent she's attacking. Twice per battle.

Attack #2: Atreus Drown
Description-- Atreus claps her hands before her, indicating the area which she wishes to affect, and then spreads her palms wide. Atreus cannot move from that position during the attack or it will break.
Effects-- Simulates drowning. The targets will experience the sensation of not being able to breathe--and will probably be coughing up water once they can breathe again. The entire body feels colder and the feeling of panic is overwhelming. The usual aftereffects of drowning are not present, save for a lingering chilliness that fades about a minute after the attack.
Range-- see Target
Target-- A cone of effect extending fifteen feet before Atreus.
Duration-- One minute, once per battle

NOTES AND DETAILS
The emotional effects of panic/terror are dependent upon the opponent's willpower--someone with a strong mind/consciousness of self might barely panic, while someone with a weaker mind/consciousness of self might FLIP THEIR s**t. Aquaphobic characters, or characters with a fear of drowning, pretty much will flip their s**t, no arguments.

If your character is more than one rank above, halve the amount of time the attack will hold on them. For instance, if Sailor Atreus attacks Super Sailor Corona with Atreus Immersion, it will go for the full thirty seconds. But if she attacks Eternal Sailor Nova, the attack will only last for fifteen.

She really does constrict air flow, though. It's as easy to breathe during Atreus Immersion Terror and Atreus Drown as it would be if you were actually under water.
PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 1:02 pm


4:00:50 PM ro ma ro ma ma: What does he think she is
4:00:53 PM ro ma ro ma ma: a pretty pretty princess
4:01:06 PM Ithums: a twilight fan 8D
4:01:15 PM ro ma ro ma ma: ...B|!
4:01:24 PM ro ma ro ma ma: And the party fights flatbears for a month.
4:01:39 PM Ithums: worth it!

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 5:18 pm


I like her. This is probably crappy crit, so I hereby absolve you from any obligation to draw things for me! Unless, of course, you want to.

Some questions:

I feel like I know what having a conversation with her would be like, but I'd like to know some more physical things about her. Does she cook? Eat out? Does she exercise by an organized sport or is she naturally fit or what? Astronauts need to be in good health, don't you know.

If she wants so badly to be an astronaut, how can she be satisfied with crappy grades? That seemed a bit discordant to me.

How long has she been in Destiny City? Did she move there for university or does her family live there?

XD Hope this was at least a little helpful.
PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 5:23 pm


Hi Roma! I'm going to be Honor-like and give you crits instead of working on my paper. biggrin (and I totally fall for bribes, if you feel like it you can do a headshot of my Circe, but ONLY if you feel inspired to do so!)

I more or less just have a few questions!

-She likes sci-fi and L. Hubbard, how does she feel about scientology? Just out of curiosity. Is science fiction a replacement for religion, i.e. is she more likely to live her life by values or guide lines set in science fiction than any religious group (i.e. her moral code is based off of jedis or something?)

-You said she tries to be like Spock, but how? Does she attempt to look at things/life in a cool analytical/logical way? Or does she try to keep her emotions in check (and fails horribly?). Or is it more like she tries to be like Spock by getting Spock hair cuts and being a Vulcan every halloween?

-Astronomy wise, does she have multiple telescopes? Is she crazy enough to want to go out in -20 weather to stargaze at 3 a.m. because that's the best time to watch something? Does she have glow in the dark stars on her ceiling (hand-painted maybe?) Why is she in computer science instead of astronomy? What are her computer science-y interests? Does she like code-ing or building computers? Does she make her own model rockets and launch them in the park? Is she a night owl?

-How does her protective trait relate to friends and family and her own possessions/ how is she protective of them? Is she a worry-wart about friends? Does she always walk home with them to make sure nothing happens to them? Does she carry pepper spray? You might be able to break protective up into two traits - protective and charitable? As written it sounds like she is a very empathetic and charitable. Does her dislike of seeing people in pain/down on their luck, lead her to volunteer at a soup kitchen or something? Or does she avoid seeing people down and out because she knows it will upset her or consume all her time?

-With anxiety, is it just when it comes to 'crunch time' and deadlines, or is she anxious with other things? Like is she nervous in large/unfamiliar groups? And, how does she cope with anxiety?

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 5:35 pm


Hi Roma,

Not very good at doing crits but I'll do my best.

First up Honor seems like an interesting character and I like how she comes across. Just a few things came to mind

Student

~ Astronomy Hobby
Does Honor have a telescope? and if yes does she do a bit of star-watching? Just curious as she comes across as knowing so much of the theory etc, so was wondering if Honor also does a bit of star-watching

~ Flaws & Virtues
To me, as it's written, Honor's Procrastinator flaw kind of clashes with her Reliable and Organised virtues as it mentions that 'Everything she does is rushed' which clashes to me with someone organised. I'm not seeing how it can work with being reliable either

On Procrastinator, I'm not sure that procrastinator is the right word for the flaw as it's written. To me someone who procrastinates dithers over things, is very slow in coming to decisions etc. rather than someone who rushes things.


Senshi
The attacks read fine to me and don't come across as overpowered.


Hope the crit helps a little smile
Would love a return crit on my Athene quest if that's okay
PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 6:20 pm


Marquis of Shadows
I like her. This is probably crappy crit, so I hereby absolve you from any obligation to draw things for me! Unless, of course, you want to.


Link me to what you'd like me to draw!

Quote:
I feel like I know what having a conversation with her would be like, but I'd like to know some more physical things about her. Does she cook? Eat out? Does she exercise by an organized sport or is she naturally fit or what? Astronauts need to be in good health, don't you know.

If she wants so badly to be an astronaut, how can she be satisfied with crappy grades? That seemed a bit discordant to me.


Food: Honor is a college kid, and a poor one at that. She gets by through a complex system of workstudy and odd jobs--so she generally eats in the school cafeteria, since she gets credits from her room and board allowance to use there. She also goes home pretty often to mooch off her parents.

Exercise: Honor has a lot of nervous energy and is, again, a poor college kid; because of this, she tends to walk everywhere. This naturally translates to her being sort of fit. But she doesn't put too much into this.

Grades: Well--being an astronaut is her dream, but it's not her overwhelming ambition. The chances of a computer science major becoming an astronaut are about zip, and even if she was in the "right" career field her chances would have been like one in twenty thousand. Since she can't really achieve what she really wants to achieve, she's pretty okay with being a B/C student.

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How long has she been in Destiny City? Did she move there for university or does her family live there?


Honor moved into Destiny City around her freshman year of high school, and has been here ever since! Her parents live out in the suburbs now, but she's more in DC proper as a student at DCU. =)

Thanks, Marquis! =)

zippedsiren
She likes sci-fi and L. Hubbard, how does she feel about scientology? Just out of curiosity. Is science fiction a replacement for religion, i.e. is she more likely to life her like by values or guide lines set in science fiction than any religious group (i.e. her moral code is based off of jedis or something?)


Honor doesn't do religion very well. She tried to do the Episcopalian thing and kept sleeping through church )= Mostly, she doesn't pay attention to anything other than the books; the lives of the authors aren't really of any concern to her. Like, she couldn't care less that every book after Dune was written for the money. The books are there, and they're really awesome, yeah? She does have the Bene Gesserit Litany Against Fear memorized, and she also tries to live her life as she thinks her heroes would--partially why she's so protective of people.

Quote:
You said she tries to be like Spock, but how? Does she attempt to look at things/life in a cool analytical/logical way? Or does she try to keep her emotions in check (and fails horribly?). Or is it more like she tries to be like Spock by getting Spock hair cuts and being a Vulcan every halloween?


She tries to mimic him more in that he's really ******** smart and knows all kinds of facts and is never caught off guard; she tries to never let things get under her skin, and she fails miserably, since she's primarily a reactive personality! Honor thinks she's a lot more like Spock than she actually is, sadly. ... She also might have such a short hair cut because she tried to get a Vulcan haircut, but her hair's much too fluffy for it to work without piles and piles of product.

Quote:
Astronomy wise, does she have multiple telescopes? Is she crazy enough to want to go out in -20 weather to stargaze at 3 a.m. because that's the best time to watch something? Does she have glow in the dark stars on her ceiling (hand-painted maybe)?


Honor actually does not own one single telescope, besides one a little cousin jumped on and broke before she headed off to school. She DOES go out at obscene hours to watch meteor showers--any time the ISS does a pass over Destiny City she's outside at least an hour early, all bundled up and ready to watch them. Because of dormitory rules, she just has glow-in-the-dark stars on her walls in the shape of her particular favorite constellation (Cassiopeia and environs!) and also a few posters--a log scale chart of the universe, a subway map of the Milky Way, and also some legit pictures of space dust.

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Why is she in computer science instead of astronomy? What are her computer science-y interests? Does she like code-ing or building computers? Does she make her own model rockets and launch them in the park?


The really simple answer to this is: Money. Her parents won't pay for her to attend school for astronomy, astrobiology or astrophysics--astrobiology would be her dream majors, but as it stands her parents have freaked out over the recent budget cuts at NASA and won't let her do anything with space. Computer science is the closest thing she could think of to astronomy, although she actually doesn't give a crap about it. This is part of why she doesn't really fuss over her grades, just because it doesn't really matter to her.

Her interests are not so much in rockets as much as "I REALLY WANT TO GO TO SPACE". She wants to go to space and perform experiments and maybe colonize Mars while she's at it.

Quote:
How does her protective trait relate to friends and family and her own possessions/ how is she protective of them? Is she a worry-wart about friends? Does she always walk home with them to make sure nothing happens to them? Does she carry pepper spray? You might be able to break protective up into two traits - protective and charitable? As written it sounds like she is a very empathetic and charitable. Does her dislike of seeing people in pain/down on their luck, lead her to volunteer at a soup kitchen or something? Or does she avoid seeing people down and out because she knows it will upset her or consume all her time?


Honor tends to trust her friends and family to get home safely; she will probably bite off your face if you try and hurt them in front of her. She's kind of aware of her limits, though, in that she can't protect everyone all the time--that's why she's so outspoken about it when someone's getting picked on around her. Honor does not carry pepperspray, although considering the state of Destiny City, it seems she probably should.

I don't think Honor is particularly charitable--she is protective of people because it makes her feel good to be help people. She's also kind of a lazy college kid and isn't quite sure how to go about volunteering anyway.

Quote:
With anxiety, is it just when it comes to 'crunch time' and deadlines, or is she anxious with other things? Like is she nervous in large/unfamiliar groups? And, how does she cope with anxiety?


It's largely just in relation to crunch time and deadlines--when asked a direct question, she does have a moment of "WAIT WHAT IS GOING ON IS SOMEONE TALKING TO ME??" if she's surprised by it. Usually she deals with her anxiety by GETTING TO WORK AND CRUNCH TIMING THAT PROJECT.

Thanks, Zipped! * u*

litian
Does Honor have a telescope? and if yes does she do a bit of star-watching? Just curious as she comes across as knowing so much of the theory etc, so was wondering if Honor also does a bit of star-watching


Answered up under zipped's

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To me, as it's written, Honor's Procrastinator flaw kind of clashes with her Reliable and Organised virtues as it mentions that 'Everything she does is rushed' which clashes to me with someone organised. I'm not seeing how it can work with being reliable either

On Procrastinator, I'm not sure that procrastinator is the right word for the flaw as it's written. To me someone who procrastinates dithers over things, is very slow in coming to decisions etc. rather than someone who rushes things.


This is something I hear a lot so I will be going back over these three traits in depth once I'm done with these. Basically, the idea is: She does organize. She always knows where things is--it's a virtue because she never really has to think about the fact that she's organized, she just naturally puts things in charts and graphs and good order. Organization doesn't always imply good time management, it just implies--in this case--she knows where her crap is and puts it all away pretty neatly. For Reliable, I know this one's a bit of a tough sell! The way I think of it is that she will get it done at the last second, but she will get it done. And while she will always follow the word of what she promised to do, it's not exactly always to the essence of it, as a good friend said.

Procrastination is something that is kind of different for everyone, I think. Honor in particular just ignores the fact that she has work to do in order to be more relaxed earlier, and when she realizes she has only two days to get it done she has to rush to finish it all.

I'll get that return crit done! * u*

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 6:59 pm


You don't need to draw me anything. You already drew me ton of stuff. XD

Personally il'd change some of her attack stuff as eternal. It seems more like an extension of the normal/super attack to me, and not a completely different attack ? Il'd definitively make how she pulls it off something different, if that makes any sense ? Maybe her eternal attack could be a area of effect rather than pointing one opponent ? Eternal attacks can be pretty badass (hell, have you seen Themis' ? IT'S RIDICULOUSLY BADASS.)

Dunno if im making sense, though.
PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2010 9:49 pm


JUST AS A NOTE for people who think the procrastinator flaw doesn't mesh with organized/reliable - I seriously do the same thing myself. All the time. I make charts and lists (oh god I love lists) and am pretty good at starting a project that looks REALLY AWESOME but then I kind of falter after that and it just goes into mediocre territory. So uh, idk. It's absolutely something that can happen?

ALSO ROMA you already got my crit on Honor over AIM so * u* no draw stuff for me, you draw me plenty <3333 Love the elaboration on stuff tho! Do want her in play so bad, fffff

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PostPosted: Sun Dec 05, 2010 11:34 am


hi there <3
just some crits ; u ;

i agree with marquis about needing to know physical things. while you've pointed out her love for science and dnd, etc, i have to say that starting a conversation with "so what's your initiative roll?" probably wouldn't come up a ton xD
maybe give her some habits that most people can relate to? or give her a favorite place to go/be so that people find it easier to interact with her?
i do love her science-y love though- its adorable > u<

i think the organized/procrastination thing works well; i rearrange the pencils and what not on my desk a thousand times, and do my work the day before as well xD i understand the basis of your organization in that mean. maybe make her more organized based on her phsyical life rather than her schoolwork? for example, instead of having her make charts and what not, instead have her just be a neat-freak? what i mean, is that there is a difference between organization in a room/physical objects than organization on paper/mental work. i hope that makes sense. i feel like it doesn't xD

also; if she has such bad grades, why is she helping others with homework? that just doesn't make sense to me.

i think you should flesh out this love of astronomy. you said she just REALLY WANTS TO GO TO SPACE (i laughed haha), but if it's her goal, don't you think she'd work harder for it ? anyone ive ever known that had a set goal like that certainly worked for it xD i love the colonizing mars thing. you're very witty in that way > u>

also with the protective-ness; i have to wonder what she's like with material belongings? does she have an ipod that she eats your head off if you mess with it or something? a chess set from her grandma that is super important to her? it seems like if you're protective with people, you're also protective with your items. is the same true for honor?

also; her ears are pierced? what sort of piercings? does she like hoop earrings? studs? these are nit-picky details, but more detail can't hurt? o 3o

and is there any reason her nickname is honey? this is just my own curiosity xD /loser

senshi;
i think the attacks are well done, and am totally digging the outfit concept pictures xD <3

am just wondering though, for her attacks are the enemies actually encased in water? or is it more like an ocean comes in an floods everything except atreus (like in the second concept image)? or perhaps it's simply the emotions received and nothing physical appears? i hope that makes sense ... xD

agreed with zero; i think as an eternal attack it should be REDICULOUS <3
since there's lots of work that goes into an eternal senshi RP-wise, you should make her attack pretty show-y. unless that's not what you're going for, then i understand.

sorry, i know i'm new to ITNOTM but i figured id add my two cents orz
i think overall she'd be really fun! i love her little quirky details <3
PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 10:51 am


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You don't need to draw me anything. You already drew me ton of stuff. XD

Personally il'd change some of her attack stuff as eternal. It seems more like an extension of the normal/super attack to me, and not a completely different attack ? Il'd definitively make how she pulls it off something different, if that makes any sense ? Maybe her eternal attack could be a area of effect rather than pointing one opponent ? Eternal attacks can be pretty badass (hell, have you seen Themis' ? IT'S RIDICULOUSLY BADASS.)

Dunno if im making sense, though.


Updated it! What do you think?

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PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 11:12 am


chimarii
i agree with marquis about needing to know physical things. while you've pointed out her love for science and dnd, etc, i have to say that starting a conversation with "so what's your initiative roll?" probably wouldn't come up a ton xD
maybe give her some habits that most people can relate to? or give her a favorite place to go/be so that people find it easier to interact with her?
i do love her science-y love though- its adorable > u<


I don't agree that she needs more physical hobbies--a lot of people live a mostly sedentary lifestyle and still socialize! Her love of science fiction will take her to the library and bookstore, her star trek fascination will take her to scifi conventions and Blockbuster and the movie theater. Astronomy will take her to the library, to science museums, to the park. Dungeons and Dragons already is a hobby she participates in with her friends. So I don't really think she needs to be more physical.

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i think the organized/procrastination thing works well; i rearrange the pencils and what not on my desk a thousand times, and do my work the day before as well xD i understand the basis of your organization in that mean. maybe make her more organized based on her phsyical life rather than her schoolwork? for example, instead of having her make charts and what not, instead have her just be a neat-freak? what i mean, is that there is a difference between organization in a room/physical objects than organization on paper/mental work. i hope that makes sense. i feel like it doesn't xD


I... think I get it? But part of the point is that she is organized, she's just not heavily militant about it. She's organized in most, if not all, all parts of her life (except time management! or, well--she is that, she just ignores it) she just doesn't actually make very good use of the organization.

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also; if she has such bad grades, why is she helping others with homework? that just doesn't make sense to me.


Because while she doesn't apply herself to her own work, she is pretty smart. =) It's not that she doesn't understand the material, it's that she rushes her big projects and ignores her homework, so she literally can't pull off As very often.

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i think you should flesh out this love of astronomy. you said she just REALLY WANTS TO GO TO SPACE (i laughed haha), but if it's her goal, don't you think she'd work harder for it ? anyone ive ever known that had a set goal like that certainly worked for it xD i love the colonizing mars thing. you're very witty in that way > u>


Well... I think of it like this. Honor, as I've said, is a poor college kid who gets by on work-study, odd jobs, and scholarships. She can't pay for her own tuition if her parents won't support her, and she really wants a college degree. They won't support her if she pursues astronomy as a career field, so she settles for computer science, which she's passably good at and does enjoy, just not as much as she would astronomy. Beyond that, her parents weren't exactly supportive of her Martian dreams before; even Honor largely regards getting to go to space as impossible, which demoralizes her.

The combination of not being in the right career path, having no chance to get in the right career path, and procrastination pretty much means Honor spends more time thinking about how much she wants to go to space than she does actually working to get there.

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also with the protective-ness; i have to wonder what she's like with material belongings? does she have an ipod that she eats your head off if you mess with it or something? a chess set from her grandma that is super important to her? it seems like if you're protective with people, you're also protective with your items. is the same true for honor?


whoops, skipped this one first time around! Yes. Do not mess with the iPod, don't mess with the laptop! She views people touching her valuable objects as incredibly disrespectful to her, and it is a one-way ticket to Honey's personal s**t list if you don't respect her stuff.

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also; her ears are pierced? what sort of piercings? does she like hoop earrings? studs? these are nit-picky details, but more detail can't hurt? o 3o


They're pierced. A stud in each ear, her mother had them pierced when she was three. She hates earrings overall, but hates the look of the empty holes more.

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and is there any reason her nickname is honey? this is just my own curiosity xD /loser


It grew out of the childhood nickname "Hon", which is actually pronounced "On" but got bastardized into "Hon" (pronounced hun) and then "Honey". Honor thinks it's a name that makes a bit more sense than Honor, so she introduces herself as Honey when she remembers to.

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i think the attacks are well done, and am totally digging the outfit concept pictures xD <3

am just wondering though, for her attacks are the enemies actually encased in water? or is it more like an ocean comes in an floods everything except atreus (like in the second concept image)? or perhaps it's simply the emotions received and nothing physical appears? i hope that makes sense ... xD

agreed with zero; i think as an eternal attack it should be REDICULOUS <3
since there's lots of work that goes into an eternal senshi RP-wise, you should make her attack pretty show-y. unless that's not what you're going for, then i understand.


I actually think of most of her attacks as pretty subtle. Nothing visible appears for the first two attacks, and in the second she just coughs up water. =) Updated the Eternal, tell me what you think?

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sorry, i know i'm new to ITNOTM but i figured id add my two cents orz
i think overall she'd be really fun! i love her little quirky details <3


Thanks!
PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 1:12 pm


shibrogane
Zero Dream
You don't need to draw me anything. You already drew me ton of stuff. XD

Personally il'd change some of her attack stuff as eternal. It seems more like an extension of the normal/super attack to me, and not a completely different attack ? Il'd definitively make how she pulls it off something different, if that makes any sense ? Maybe her eternal attack could be a area of effect rather than pointing one opponent ? Eternal attacks can be pretty badass (hell, have you seen Themis' ? IT'S RIDICULOUSLY BADASS.)

Dunno if im making sense, though.


Updated it! What do you think?


Looks good to me, bby. <3

A Wandering Esper

Beloved Stargazer


chiickadee

Princess Hoarder

PostPosted: Wed Dec 08, 2010 4:23 pm


ahhh. well i didnt think of the science love thing that way. the fact that she would need to go to the library and what not makes a lot more sense now. its just when i see "reading" i picture someone in their home all cozied up. murkiness clarified xD

and i get the organization thing now c:

ahhh. see i wasnt sure if she didnt do her work because of procrastination or if she simply didnt get it

haha. i know it was asked before, but i didnt think youd answered it, so i thought id ask it. on that note, what kind of possessions is she closest with? my friend has a set of dnd dice that he wont let ANYONE touch but him. such a dork xD again, this is my own curiosity kicking in xD

as for the eternal attack, i like it, but i still think it could use something visual? if you look at all of the canon senshi, a lot of their attacks have very visual things (jupiter thunder dragon anyone?). though i do like the update you made, and i think it could suffice without a physical entity if you really wanted it that way.
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