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 Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 5:51 pm
Well though I am new to the guild, I'm not new to poems and lyrics so I decided to share some of my stuff.
Here I will hold my collection of stuff. I warn you that some were made out of comedy reasons back when I thought about how I would rap if I was a rapper and then those of if I was a hip hop artist. (Apparently there's a difference. Who'd a thunk?)
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Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 5:57 pm
The Prince And The King - The tale of prince Roland and king Galahad.
"And as the stars went to battle,
The Prince fought his King.
His sword as mighty as it was.
Oh how it did sing.
Blessed by gods to strike holy.
Prey the majestic blade.
Striking with heavenly fury,
Ripping the forest into glade.
Crater the land, dividing skies,
and turning sea to pit.
Did ever so give Galahad's heart,
a good ol' even split.
Broken his heart, like his mind.
Looking so pale to say.
But when the hand of justice thrust,
his color turned to gray...
Down went the King they mean.
Just as pity would show.
But defeated he was, yet his curse
would always grow.
The soul of that poor ol' boy,
taken by his son,
he fought the good fight he did,
it was his blood that truly won."
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Posted: Tue Aug 17, 2010 6:04 pm
I'm not good at poetry... in fact, I'd go so far as to say I'm terrible. XD But I'll do my best.
The names are vaguely Arthurian, but I know even less of Arthurian legend than I know poetry, so I can't say.
The punctuation, I feel, is a bit weird--there are a lot of periods, denoting short phrasing, but it rhymes, denoting fluidity and rhythm, so sometimes it feels a bit jumpy. These lines in particular are very short:
"Oh how it did sing.
Blessed by gods to strike holy.
Prey the majestic blade."
There's some interesting wording--I don't necessarily understand some of it off the top of my head, in particular these:
"Broken his heart, like his mind.
Looking so pale to say."
I do, though, very much like the last phrase. It seems more a story, slightly less formal. That said, I'm really no good with poetry, other than noting flow. XD
Thanks for posting!
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 5:52 pm
I was aiming for kind of an epic poem when I first wrote it but then it got too complicated for a long, page full poem such as an epic. xD
It's actually based off an rp role I had a few months ago were I played an enhanced human prince from the planet Mars who had come to create a compromise but sadly it ended in a full on war that ended with the prince killing his tyrant father and becoming the new king.
That was during one of my good days. xD
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 5:59 pm
Oh, yes, it does come across as pretty epic. XD That's interesting. We don't exactly do much Rping here... I'll admit I'm not really into it, except for the one we're in right now. That's just a huge joke between us. XP
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:32 pm
As the previous commented replied, the periods kinda throw it off. I feel like if you remove the period, you might make it 'less' jumpy and more smooth. Try some commas. Then again, I'd take my advice with a hint of salt. I'm a comma-whore. ^^;;
Other than, I like it! Very epic-ish.
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 10:19 pm
Then that I shall work on.
For now, I'll add all my other stuff.
The Immortal Way
There once was a man,
Who gave one great stand.
He lead the army and brought forward their cause.
The seas were silent and the skies at pause.
The future was now, but the past was lost.
Forever he lived, no matter the cost.
Immortal he was just as the stars.
Pained with destiny that lashed him scars.
Martyred once only to live again.
Like a godly spawn, he died for sin.
But no matter the trouble, or hastily feud,
His heart shined brighter, good as newed.
The Paladins have come, again, to stay,
And finish what that man started, that one day.
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 10:30 pm
White Call
Be the martyr of the fallen people.
Treat all as your equal.
Bring balance to the chaotic world.
Go far beyond and keep curl.
The call of Zion is now with you.
Keep fighting, through and through.
The White Queen desires her king.
Will you help keep her heart at sing?
The castle lies in the quiet north.
Loud are the trumpets as it dwarf,
the fallen black, heart of fire,
lord of hell and demonic empire.
He awakens from his sleep,
to place upon us weep.
And the call goes to man,
to be the last defense to stand.
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Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2010 6:42 pm
Clouds
Living on cloud 8
Born on cloud 9
Living divine
So in your mind
I'm too simple
I dwell in the hell that is your temple
So you need sign? How bout a symbol?
A marking of truth
And a scar of lies
I ain't messing with no darkness, heavenly skies
13 eyes stare upon me
3 clouds float above thee
7 spirits are amongst ye
Who are we?
We are the gods, the kings, made from heavenly things
We need peace, war, and all in between
We need clouds to look forward to
People need to surround you
Judgment has been evaded
In the ending we are related
Adam and Eve
We were deceived
Now let's redeem ourselves
Either pick the clouds....
Or the fires of Hell.
Peace!
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Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2010 6:43 pm
Not very good but at least I tried. XD
Books
Books of learning
The pages are turning
And they're burning
Information I'm earning
Concerning, You
Just as it may do
And I hold true that everything revolves around you
But allow me to check
For a sec
The words that are listed on this paper
Saya, what was it?
You know that crap, that ish
The thing that you claimed was a lie?
Yet look between the lines of the tome
Home schooled you must of been
To have missed the opportunity
To actually, bring upon destruction of mentality
When you allow one book to survive
You allowed to thrive, the future of humanity
My sanity, is held between this sheets
Like Eli, my journey begins in the east
Or least I thought it did, blinded like my father is
I thought it was better this way...
This place...holds no sanctuary
It could never make me
Feel safe at all
Behind these walls
Hides the secret of my humanly past
But I break free at last...
I see hope!
Without a telescope
In a far off land
And I demand...
For that's the journal of the adventurer.
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