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 Posted: Tue May 11, 2010 12:15 pm
Ok well there are only a few poems because I am going through writers block! sweatdrop Which is a big bummer on my part because I have some stuff that I want to spill out and poetry is the only way i know how. Umm I am sorry if they suck and I know some of them do. But I hope everyone sees how they progress. Thanks Hope you like them.
NOTE: I have these poems on a writing web site called MIBBA! Just pm me if you want to read the original ones and I will send you the link. Umm I did use some bad language in a couple of them and I changed it to put them here on Vetus Gaianus. So Thanks for reading them smile
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Posted: Tue May 11, 2010 12:18 pm
Here is probably one of the first good ones I wrote.
The Reflection.
One day I wake and then I see I don't know the real me.
Who am i modeled after, or is that reflection really me?
Am I real or am I Fake? I hope my friends can tell me.
Do they see me for me or the mask of Whom i may be?
What can I do, What can I say?
The reflection in the mirror stayed there as i walked away.
And I hope i can figure my place out in this world someday.
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Posted: Tue May 11, 2010 12:20 pm
NO TITLE
When you do what you do people begin to hate you.
We have all begged you to quit but your just so darn
persistent. TRUST, happens to be a five letter word
and you've lost all letters from us. So, stop the act and
EARN what you SHOULD yearn.
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Posted: Tue May 11, 2010 12:23 pm
ok so this one was written with Li-mei. The reason why it would remotely be good.
OUR INSPIRATION
Songs with a majestic beginning, and a beat to defeat.
With lead vocals that were sent from heaven and, a voice
that carries us away.
Guitar riffs that make us swoon and notes that pull us
out of reality.
Drums that pound a beat into our souls and cause
us to stay.
The bass that holds us up for support, and back
vocals that cause us to melt.
If only you guys truly knew how your music
made us felt.But when the song ends life goes all wrong,
until we play the next song, starting with a solo intro
that changes our lives all over again.
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Posted: Tue May 11, 2010 12:25 pm
This is my newest one.
LOVE IS A HARD THING.
Why does everything have to be against me?
Can't you see that I am what you need?
I tried to shield my heart but that sure isn't happening.
If only I was in your arms and dreams.
Why do you have to be so appealing to me?
Looking at me people can see that "Just Friends" is killing me.
When I close my eyes you are everything i see.
But the truth is that those are Just dreams and will only be dreams.
Flipping Seriously. Why do you have this effect on me?
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Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 1:57 pm
Nice poems! The "Our Inspiration" one is particularly good. biggrin
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Posted: Fri May 21, 2010 8:22 pm
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Posted: Fri May 21, 2010 10:54 pm
I totally identify with the last one. Unrequited love is the pits! Especially when the guy is your friend. I definitely don't want to go through that again. xp crying
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 1:29 am
Mademoiselle Alvinette I totally identify with the last one. Unrequited love is the pits! Especially when the guy is your friend. I definitely don't want to go through that again. xp crying Yeah, The story as to why I wrote that one is VERY long. Oh, and thanks for reading them. smile
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 10:03 am
You're welcome! They're really good.
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 2:28 pm
That makes me happy. I think they are bad.
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 4:08 pm
I think we're all our own worst critics. That's why I don't post any of my writing. I think I'm horrid at it, and I don't want to give anybody else a chance to agree with me! gonk
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 9:34 pm
Maybe I need to post some of the stuff that I wrote. I haven't posted any of my writing since I started writing scary stories in the Halloween event. lol But, Alvinette is right. We are our own worst critics. I think one of the things that helped me most with not being ashamed of my writing was having so many people read it and give me feedback. I've gotten alot of negative feedback, but I have also gotten alot of positive feedback. The positive lets you know what you're doing writing. The negative lets you know what you're doing wrong so that you can fix it. And as you get more and more feedback, it helps you adjust aspects of your writing until you have a well formed story or poem. I know I got a bit of track, but all of that is to say that there is no need to be harsh on your writing. Be critical of it, but never think of it as being bad. 3nodding
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