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 Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 1:00 am
A brief history of Oscar's life, his parents and his thoughts on them. Oscar's parents met when they were both still in high school, and at 16 years of age, Calliope found herself pregnant with 17 year old Jackson's child just 6 months into their relationship. Convinced they were in love and it was the right thing to do, they both dropped out of school to care for their unborn child. Both their families found their decision to keep the baby and drop out of school so disgusting, they both abandoned their children. Oscar was soon born and the couple seemed happy, a year later they were married and everything seemed fine, but soon, problems started to make their way into the happy family. With their lack of education, both parents found it hard to get much work. His father grew to see him as more of a burden than anything else and so cared less and less for his son as he grew. His mother, fearful of abandonment of her one true love, tried whatever she could to please her husband, adopting the same attitude towards their child. With neither parent really caring about him, Oscar was left to bring himself up. He soon began acting out, causing small incidences with the police in the hopes his parents would take more notice of him, but his actions were fruitless, and as time wore on, he decided to not bother with his parents anymore and concentrate on himself. With some minor misdemeanors under his belt, it wasn't long before an offer to attend Hillworth Grammar arose, and Oscar, noticing it was a boarding school, was quick to pack his things and move into the Halls on an athletic scholarship, leaving behind his parents, and not wanting anything to do with them anymore. Jackson Thwaite: Older than his wife by one year, he truly believed that dropping out of school to raise his child with his partner was the right thing to do, at the time. With the abandonment of both their parents, as well as the difficulties of obtaining a job thanks to his lack of education, Jackson began to put the blame onto his son, resenting him for what his life had become. His feelings to his wife did not alter, still believing that they're truly meant to be together. The struggle with jobs lead to struggles with money, and more inner turmoil for Jackson, looking for some kind of salvation, he turned to alcohol, and even dabbled in drugs, anything to get his mind off of his derailed life. Calliope Thwaite (nee. Anders): There were big red hearts in the eyes of Calliope when she first met Jackson, and there have been ever since. Believing her husband to be a wonderful man, she's gone on with his every idea and wish, not once thinking for herself. When times got tough and Jackson began to slide, Calliope became scared that her soul mate would leave her and so, would do anything to please him, even adopting the same attitude he had towards their son. Oscar's views and relationships towards his parents are the same, that they aren't worth his time, and that he is glad that they're out of his life and (hopefully) he wont have anything to do with them again. His upbringing has made him more than capable of looking after himself, and found that leaving his home for Hillworth Grammer was the last thing tying to the rotting life of his parents.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 1:01 am
Name: Oscar Thwaite Nickname: Oz, T Age: 17 Birthday: 21st April Sign: Taurus Gemstone: Diamond Blood Type: O- Fav. Food: Pizzas with 'The Lot', anything greasy or deep fried, though he'll eat practically anything, the kid has an appetite! Hated Food: Green Vegetables. Specifically brussel sprouts, beans, peas and broccoli. School: Hillworth Grammar School Hobbies:Sport: Oscar is heavily into sport, his main favorites consisting of basketball, football and baseball. He plays all three (when they're in season) for his school, and wouldn't be adverse to trying other sports out. He's also in the know of a lot of sporting info. Think of him as a Sports!wiki, knowing win/loss records, game margins and player stats (even some heights and weights). If it's relative to sports of a player, chances are he's got the info. Oscar also likes to watch highlight reels on youtube. He has a soft spot for injury clips. Sports is just something that comes naturally to him, like some are with singing, or maths, or drawing, Oscar is like that with sports. Working Out: Oscar loves to keep in shape. He spends a fair chunk of his spare time in the gym, working out, or jogging. A guy's got to look good right? Girls: Oscar likes girls. A lot. He'll often be distracted in conversation if a pretty girl walks by, and he will almost always feel the need to hit on any piece of good looking a**. He finds it hard to have a girlfriend, just because there are so many options out there. He also collects certain 'sporty' magazines. Console games: Oscar is an avid videogame player. Whilst not highly skilled in any particular genre, he can pretty much adapt to any game and can give most people a run for their money. Forget Nintendo, he's a hardcore Xbox/Playstation fan. If given the choice, he would much rather play a shooter than an RPG, especially if there are others around to play. Parties: Oscar loves to party. If there's going to be a party he'll be there. Don't worry, he brings his own drinks. Virtues: Charismatic: Oscar is a charmer, and uses both his looks and word to his advantage. Whether it be winning a new friend or girlfriend over, or trying to make something go his way. Whilst he’s easy on the eyes, Oscar also uses a lot of flattery in his day to day life. ‘You look good in that dress,’ and ‘hey man, that’s a killer jacket’ are just some of the things he’ll say. Of course that doesn’t mean everyone will fall for his charms, some might think he’s a total douche, but most of the time Oscar will try to win someone over with his charisma. Flattery comes easy to him; he has no trouble working out what to say to someone that might soften them up. This also has helped him in the ladies department, many girls have fallen for the Oscar charm, and perhaps many more will. Independent: If Oscar learnt anything from his parents it was how to be independent, but not independent in a loner sort of way, more independent in a ‘does things himself’ way. Never really bothering to do anything for their son forced Oscar to learn things by himself, this led to him becoming very independent at an early age. Oscar is happy to go it alone and do things by himself, not wanting to involve others when he feels he’s perfectly capable of achieving something on his own. Trying: ‘If at first you don’t succeed, try, try again’ is one of Oscars main mottos in life. He’ll give one hundred and ten percent to anything he’s interested in, as long as Oscar is keen. He’ll give it his all, and if something doesn’t go right the first time, he’ll brush himself off and try again. Of course he won’t always succeed, but as long as Oscar feels he’s given something a good go then that’s fine with him. He’s also been known to try and help someone else, if they need a hand and Oscar feels it’s something he knows about and is interested in, he’d offer his services. If he’s in a battle, Oscar will stop at nothing to try and win. If he’s in a game of soccer, you can bet he’ll do everything he can to try and make his team come out on top. If a pretty girl is having trouble with her car, Oscar will be there, trying to help, even if he’s only interested in getting her number. Outgoing: Oscar is the complete opposite of shy and a total people person. In class he won’t hesitate when he’s singled out by a teacher, during a game he’s not afraid to tell a team mate they’re doing something wrong. He’s happy to converse with someone who might approach him on the street and doesn't have a problem with small talk. He loves to go to things where there are lots of people around, like parties, clubs and festivals, and he’s not really one to shy from the spotlight. Oscar also knows how to have fun, and has no problem getting a party started. This means he has no hesitations about talking with someone, and this can make Oscar seem very approachable. Flaws:Bitter: Oscar can also be quite bitter. If he feels like you've done something to make him look bad, or wronged him in some sort of way, then he can act very bitter towards people. Things that can make him bitter towards you being a d**k, showing him up, changing the outcome of something he feels should go a different way. Oscar tends to think things should go his way, so if they don't and he can blame you, then he's going to be cold towards you in the future. He'll try to ignore them, or give them very few words. He'll scowl at you, letting you know how he feels. He also wont let up on his grudge so easily, and it could take some time before he treats you normal again, if ever. Stubborn: Oscar is incredibly stubborn, and is reluctant to relent in most situations. If he’s taken one side in an argument, he won’t budge on his opinions. If his schoolwork is taking him a long time, or if there’s something he doesn’t understand, he probably won’t accept your offer of help. If he’s made a bad choice, he’ll stick with it, trying to prove he can do something, even if the chances are he won’t be able to. Whilst his stubbornness can be dismissed at times, there are others when simply letting go would do wonders. But his need to be independent would overpower what he feels would be the right choice, and so would continue to hold fast to his own opinions, actions and ideals. If Oscar does ever let up on his stubbornness for a time, it would be so begrudgingly, and he wouldn’t be completely comfortable in withdrawing. This stubbornness can make it difficult to work with other people, fighting the Negaverse, or with just simple, day to day things. Annoying: Oscar likes to think he’s cool and an approachable individual, but to some people, Oscar can come across as annoying and a bit of a jerk. His continual flattery can become irritating to some people, to the point where others might think he's insincere or fake. Oscar can’t see that his personality might be unbearable for some, and wouldn’t see the fault in himself if something went wrong due to his traits. He'd find it hard to imagine people wouldn’t like his qualities. Lack of Interest: Oscar can come off as being very lazy in some aspects of his life, in reality, he only really gives any attention to the things he’s really interested in, and could care less about the things he’s not. He can often be found at the back of the class, dazing off when the teaching is lecturing about The Most Boring Subject On Earth. More often than not, he wishes he could be doing something he likes, and really can’t be bothered with anything else. He’d much rather be playing games on his Xbox, working out at the gym, kicking a soccer ball around, talking with his friends or chatting up a girl than doing homework or sitting in school in front of a blackboard. This also goes for people, if Oscar isn’t doesn’t find you interesting, then chances are he wont be talking to you for long. If the conversation drifts to a discussion of history or architecture or something else he finds dull, then he’ll try to swing the direction of the talk back towards something he likes, or just leave the conversation all together.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 1:06 am
 Senshi: Sailor Janus, Senshi of Locks. Challenge: "This is a lockdown" Attacks: Sailor Scout Attack: Janus Leg lock This attack binds the legs of the opponent together. This prevents the opponent for using their legs in a normal fashion. If they wanted they could still hop around, however their movement/agility/evasiveness would be seriously hampered. Oscar uses this attack by saying "Leg-lock" whilst thrusting his palms out whilst lunging in the direction of the opponent. This cause a ghostly paddlock to shoot out in the direction of the opponent. If the paddlock collides with the opponent the above effects ensue. If the attack misses, the paddlock dissipates and Janus must wait one turn before being able to use the move again. This attack can be used 2 times per battle and lasts up to 30 seconds. Super Sailor Scout Attack: Janus Limb lock An expansion of the Leg-lock attack, Limb-lock fully binds the arms and the legs of the apponent to their body. Think Petrificus Totallis, but still maintaining full use of your head. They can still, like before, hop around, however the have lost any arm movement as well. This attack pretty much leaves the opponent vulnerable to attack. Like the Leg-lock attack, Janus says the word with palms outstretched in the direction of the opponent. A larger ghostly padlock appears and shoots in the direction of the opponent. If it hits the above effects ensue, if it misses, Janus must wait one turn before he can attack again. Because the ghostly padlock is larger than the previous attack, this attack has higher accuracy, and can be used 3 times per battle, with the effects lasting for 20 seconds. Eternal Sailor Attack: Janus Status Lock Unlike the previous attacks, Status-lock doesn't not affect the movement of the opponent. Instead it 'locks down' the powers of the opponent in their current state, keeping then in their negaverse/sailor/whatever state, but unable to use any of their abilities that come with being powered up. Like before, Janus says the word with palms outstretched in the direction of the opponent, a large, red, transparent lock would appear and shoot towards the opponent. On contact the effects of the attack would be invoked, also, to show that the opponent is under the influence of the eternal attack, they would exhibit a red glow/aura around their body. This attack can be used once per battle, and lasts for 25 seconds.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 10:05 pm
Just a little something that I think might be cool (but, if its totally lame, forgive me XD) :
This isn't necessarily a suggestion for his eternal attack- but, I couldn't resist mentioning; the first thing I thought of when I saw Locks was that he might have the power to unlock pretty much any door or window or latch. This would make him an amazing escape artist, and a very, handy ally- since it would be kinda impossible to keep him out.
At the same time, maybe he could lock pretty much anything. So he could keep enemies at bay. Or something. XD
idk. just an idea.
I do think the leglock/bodylock attacks are cool, though! They remind me of Harry Potter.
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Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 10:13 pm
I was thinking of something along those lines, but they wouldn't always be useful, like if the fight was in an open space, he couldn't do anything except attack with his bare hands? IDK, it would be cool if that would be an aspect of being Locks, like a little side ability? But I don't think that's allowed. neutral
Also, I'd be lying if I said it wasn't my main inspiration. XD;
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Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 12:10 am
I feel that your personality for Oz is very flat right now. However, your descriptions for his virtues and flaws are very concise and easy to understand. I'm not complaining, I just wish you'd elaborate. That's probably just me though. I'm sure the markers want something simple. XD
Overall, his personality is fine. Albeit generic for my tastes.
May I suggest that you add a trait that really makes him stand out from others?
The challenge is amusing. Hhahaa.
I can't really think of anything to suggest as a challenge since it's 2 AM.
You have a typo in Eternal Salior Attack by the way.
Since all of your attacks focused on the body you should try one orientated towards the mind.
Maybe something like Thought Lock.
Which causes for the opponent to go into a vegetable state for 15 seconds? That's actually a pretty long time in a battle when you think about it.
I dunno. XD
A senshi of lock should be able to lock and unlock. So perhaps your ESA can focus on unlocking. A person's body is like a lock of sorts storing their power. If you had an unlocking ability, Janus could unlock that limiter and book a Senshi's power exponentially for a short time. BUt... that's a supporting attack. XD
;__;
I tried. I'm not very good at critiques. I just sort of tossed ideas at you. orz
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Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 4:02 am
Here's my attempt at critting.
First up Student.
From Oscar's hobbies, I get the sense of someone who is 'one of the lads'. Not sure if that's the direction you want to go in but that was the sort of superficial impression I picked up.
I'm curious about whether Oscar is interested in going professional in any of his three main favourite sports (basketball, football and baseball). Is he on a team somewhere for any of them? (Sorry if you said he is and I missed it).
For flaws and virtues, they seem to be just the basics right now which makes him come off a little flat.
Some things which came to mind however:
Virtues
1. Charming/charismatic
'He's a sweet talker and can talk his way in, or out of a situation with relative ease' - How does he react when he comes across a situation that he can't talk his way in or out of?
'Oscar uses all of his looks to his advantage and is a pretty smooth talker' - Is Oscar a bit of a main chancer?
2. Social
Does Oscar's socialising stretch beyond turning up at parties? Does he have a need to be surrounded by people? The type to have a lot of friends (not necessary good friends who you'd tell your secrets too, but people to hang out with).
Flaws
1. Is there a reason why reputation is so important to Oscar, did something in his past happen to influence him towards this?
On the whole I think expanding on the flaws and virtues more would help build a better picture of him as a character
On to the Senshi
A couple of things came to mind
- how many times can Sailor Janus use his Senshi and Super Senshi attacks
- How long do the attacks last for?
Hope some of this helps
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Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 4:56 am
Added more stuff about the two current attacks. Working on the other stuff~!
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Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 12:04 pm
Quick crit:
don't hesitate to elaborate a bit more on Oscar's personality! You might also want to be careful with his flaws, if you plan on getting rid of one of them over time. Leaving him with only two flaws is really not much at all, and I feel like you could easily add more depth to his personality.
As for the attacks, I have suggestions (for offensive and not-so offensive attacks):
-locking a target in their current state. For a Nega, that'd mean they can't power down into a civilian as long as it is active, and if they have their weapon out, they can't put it back in their hammerspace (inversely, if they hadn't summoned it yet when the attack is active, whoops! No weapon for them!). If they're supposed to know how to teleport, well, too bad for them, they can't. Same goes for Cavaliers. For a senshi, that'd basically mean no powering down either, and no attack. Combining it with another senshi's attack could be incredibly useful, as the lock would prolong their current status effect (poison, slowness, stun, etc). It's really up to you to see how long exactly it would last, and what kind of things it could lock.
-having locks rain on the target. Yeah, I know, that's kinda lame. No, really, if you want offensiveness, you can be more straightforward, I guess.
-summoning a chain with a lock at one end, then trying to whip the target with it or something. If the lock connects with the target, bam, it stays attached to them for some while. It could be fun dragging the enemy around with it! Additionally, so that it is more useful, you could combine it with a locking effect (either the kind used in Leglock/Bodylock, either my suggestion).
-in general though, I'd be careful about attacks that would unlock things, as that should be reserved to the sphere of keys. AFAIK it's not being quested yet, but since this is a valid sphere and the only things keys can do are locking and unlocking stuff, one of which being already taken by your sphere...
Last note that is not a crit: from what I can see, looks like Ashton (my Nega Hillworth custom) and Oscar have the potential to either be good buddies or mortal rivals. I would love rping once I get my art and your character is approved. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 8:38 pm
Please give more info on all his traits, his profile is looking really bare! D: Think about the how and the why of everything he does, what motivates him and how this affects his behavior -- also think about how all this makes your character appealing to RP with. <3
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Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 9:59 pm
I agree with Mouse: Oscar's profile could use more personalization. Right now it's pretty vague in the sense that you're stating what personality traits Oscar has and what they are, but not how Oscar has them. How does Oscar make himself a social person in other people's eyes? Is he a pro-team player? Always willing to teach others how to play sports or try a new video game? If it helps, virtues are what makes other characters look UP to your character for doing. Flaws are what makes other characters look DOWN on your character for doing. Both flaws and virtues are things that affect a character on a daily 24/7 basis. Basically, you need to add a how to your virtues and flaws. How is Oscar inattentive? Is he fiddling with his pencil? Restless? Staring out the window? Imagining things? Passing notes? Writing a short story? Poetry? What is “interesting” to him and what isn't? How would this affect him as a senshi? If he's on a team and one of his teammates lectures about the proper strategy, would he doze off? Ignore them? Otherwise, it is possible to have your character change over time. smile When you want him to be mindful of his reputation, take a gander at this thread. It will tell you how to go through the revision process. His attacks look good to me so far, however “Bodylock” strikes me as being too far of a jump from just being able to bind legs to being able to paralyze an opponent 100%. I suggest to only be able to bind an opponent's legs and arms, leaving them free to speak/breathe/look/hurl insults. For an eternal attack, having an offensive ability for locks is a bit difficult. ^^; A lock is all about securing something, or in some cases stopping a mechanism. If you wanted, for his eternal he could place a “lock” on his opponent that forbids them from attacking? Negaverse weapons could either be temporarily banished or become intangible from the world around them, Senshi can't finish shouting their attack, cavalier swords disappear/become intangible, etcetc. You have a good start, you just need to beef it up with some personalization!
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Posted: Thu May 27, 2010 12:11 am
If your guy is one to make horrible jokes/puns, I could see his challenge being " (I'm) Locked and loaded." If not, maybe " I'm locked onto you" or "Your fate is locked to me" ? I dunno. *bricked* xD
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Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 12:04 pm
Maybe for the third attack, you can do something along the lines of ''if the opponent moves, he will get a small shock somewhere'' ? And for challenge : ''your fate is now sealed''
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 4:43 pm
updated lots of stuff! Hopefully this all works?
MUCH heart TO ZEDRE FOR LISTENING TO MY RAMBLINGS/PROVIDING ME WITH AMAZOME IDEAS!
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Posted: Sun Jan 09, 2011 9:45 am
Do you have AIM and/or Gchat? I just wanna ask a few questions, and doing it over IM is always easier~ If not I can make do with posting here.
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