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PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:25 pm


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PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:29 pm


Who She Is


Name: Nicholas Alix Pomonov

Nicknames: None

Age: 18

Birthday: July 28

Sign: Leo

Gemstone: Onyx

Blood Type: B

Fav. Food: Meat. She’s predominantly a carnivore.

Hated Food: Fruit

School: Sovereign Heights

Hobbies:
Target Practice: Guns, guns, guns. They’re the perfect weapon. The epitome of accuracy, control, and power. Nothing better. At least not for Nicholas. She spends as much of her free time as she can at shooting ranges, trying different guns and bullets out. You know, between homework, school, sports, and clubs… However, she doesn’t own any guns, as her parents would disapprove greatly, but the art of it keeps her busy and focused. It’s one thing to shoot guns for fun. It’s another to actually own one. She was raised alongside that principle as well as others that her parents taught her.

Busy Bee: Nicholas doesn’t like sitting around doing nothing. It’s pointless and annoying. She enjoys keeping busy and doing anything productive. She throws herself into projects, homework, community sevrice, and clubs or sports she feels the desire to join. She has an actual need to be kept busy, even if it’s for someone else's benefit in reality. It’ll still give her something to do, and she’ll do it as long as she likes you. She’s very easily submersed in her work and anything else she’s been given, but she has complete control of each task, and though she may be absorbed to the point the outside world is forgotten sometimes, the focus soothes her. It's been found that the driving idea behind this idiosyncrasy is for the sense of accomplishment it brings. That resulting feeling makes Nicholas feel good, and it is one emotion that was hard to find living under the pressure of being an only child in a family with high standards, especially one that lived by the idea of earning your own success.

Maps: Nicholas finds security and precision in maps. Maps are right. Maps are good. Maps can win. Maps don’t lose. Almost everything maps embody are what she believes in. She makes marks on them, sticks tacks on them, and even carries them around sometimes. Nicholas has grown to collect maps whenever she goes somewhere if one is offered. Not only can she use it to mark her own personal "achievements" but it also lets her preserve memories. Like a picture, maps just last longer.

Virtues:
Confident: Nicholas is naturally proud, confident, and smart. As a child, her parents were often curious as to how she knew certain things. A lot of times, they would ask her. Her reply was always, “I just know.” Nicholas is that kid in the class who is constantly asking questions that no one else had even thought of. She’s the same kid who steps up and takes charge in group projects, if not a little anally so. You know the type. She’s perfectly fine with you as long as she can lead the group and do most of the work. She has noticed that people want to be grouped with her, but it’s only because they know she’s going to commandeer the project. And that’s fine with her as long as they do their part and let her do the rest. Though Nicholas gets quite controlling, she doesn't mean harm in it, necessarily. It's simply how she stays level-headed.

Nicholas is an ace when it comes to presentations due to her poise, confidence, knowledge, and determination. She will gladly give a two hour speech on a literary analysis if need be. Though her confidence and other traits that accompany it are seemingly friendship-makers, she doesn’t put herself out there because she doesn't tend to give people credit until they'vre proven themselves, which is something they should initiate, not her.

Reliable: Nicholas doesn’t break her word once she’s given it. It goes without saying that she expects the same from you.

Loyal: If Nicholas takes a liking to you (whether it be for a common goal or opinions she agrees with), you will find that you have her complete devotion. She will do most anything you ask of her, and she would willingly defend you if the need arises.

Flaws:
Opinionated: Nicholas has opinions and will not adjust them to be what you think they should be. She voices them when she feels it’s appropriate, such as a person bringing up a topic in which she feels the complete opposite of how they do on the matter. She’s insistent in her opinion being the right one, and she’s likely to blatantly ignore you should you try to assert YOUR opinion over hers.

The Truth Hurts: “Life sucks and then we all die.” Nicholas is going to tell you what she thinks straight up, regardless of how it makes you feel. Sometimes the truth hurts. Other times the truth ends in nothing but backtalk and arguments. Either way, Nicholas is going to tell you how things are (to her).

"Control Freak": If it hasn't become clear by this point, Nicholas is a controlling person. She functions best with that sense of security and the ability to be in charge of an entire situation. However, she can't handle not being in control or losing that leadership to someone else. For her it is not so much about the competition as it is that she needs to feel safe, and letting her protection slip away does not sit well with her. She will do anything to gain that back, but she is known to beat herself up over it before becoming overly emotional with blind rage. She believes she is the one who has the right to wield that power over others, not you. It has to be done her way. That sort of superiority can be insulting, but Nicholas sees nothing wrong with it because she is right. She is willing to go pretty far in order to secure her position of control, bringing herself back into a calm state of mind.

PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION

Eyes: More angular than round, but not overly so. They are a mossy green color and framed by long lashes.

Hair: Dark brown. Her hair is straight and pulled into one ponytail in the back. Put up, the tips of the ponytail reach her mid-back. There’s not a hair out of place and her hair is naturally straight. It’s not as high as what is known as a “high ponytail” but is still higher than most people wear ponytails. A single, black band is used to tie up her hair. Each time it’s wrapped around her hair, it is done precisely so, so to ensure that there are no crease, folds, or irregularities in the band.

Face: Pale for the most part with a slight olive complexion. Her face is oval-shaped with very angular and defined features and a long, kind of pointy nose. She bares no kind of freckles or blemishes on her face. Her forehead, exposed because of her hair being in a ponytail, is broader than normal, or broader than she’d like it to be, anyway. Her ears are showing as well, but they are average size with no piercings in them. There are no piercing holes either.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:32 pm


???


I've yet to decide whether Nicholas will be a Senshi or a Negaverser, as I'd like to see how she evolves through crit before fully choosing a side of good or evil for her.
PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:34 pm


Extra Information

Body: Nicholas is in-shape and quite tall for a girl (she stands at 5’11, but she doesn’t like measuring her height so it may have changed, though it’s still an intimidating size). Legs are longer than her torso, but not by an incredible amount. She’s fit and muscular, but not “omg buff” so obviously. There is just identifiable definition to her entire body. She has a small waist and her butt is on the smaller side, closer to average rather than puny. Her bust is larger than average, but is often pressed down with two or three sports bras for school and sports. Keep in mind that that doesn’t mean they’re hanging out all over the place. They’re not THAT huge. And for special occasions (deemed special by her) she’ll wear a normal bra.

Fashion: At school, she wears her uniform. Casually, Nicholas wears pants. Not jeans. Pants. Pants that are usually tucked into her boots, in fact. Accompanying her pants is most times a white button up shirt (generally with a couple buttons at the top unbuttoned) that is tucked into her pants and then she puts a fitted jacket over that. If she’s required to wear a skirt, she’ll usually wear a tight, short one. She’s been known to do her hair a bit differently than she often times has it, but only for certain occasions. Nicholas does enjoy being girly at times, but she’s not one to prance around looking like that unless there’s a viable reason.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:37 pm


Family


Gaor Pomonov: Nicholas’s father. A hard-working man of 46 years of age that thinks women ought to be out working just as much as the men are. Married happily to Nicholas’s mother.

Reina [Vastivcla] Pomonov: Nicholas’s mother. A strict woman who doesn’t tolerate attitude or disrespect from anyone, and is proud of her rights and success as a woman. 45 years of age and married happily to Nicholas’s father.

Siblings?: No, sir. One child was exactly what Nicholas's parents wanted and all they wished to look after. They put all their effort and views into raising their only child.

History: Nicholas lived a good life as she grew up with her parents. She treated them with respect, and they were adamant in providing her with sound morals and rules. However, some of them have had the outcome of working against her in her more adult life. Since childhood she was taught to respect her elders. She did. But when she developed strong opinions and thoughts on nearly everything, it was a constant internal struggle to decide whether to show manners or speak her mind and argue with her senior. Luckily she has taught herself to say what she feels in a polite, respectful way when speaking to those older than her.

Nicholas always loved her parents, though they weren't the most physically affectionate people. They gave her good standards, but made her realize that she had to work for praise. That is roughly when Nicholas believes she began to be a diligent person because of the time frame (children are very impressionable) and the fact that she wanted to feel a sense of pride in herself and get rewarded for her efforts the way her parents were never overly-willing to do.

After reflecting on her life as she entered adulthood, Nicholas knows her parents are incredibly wise, and that she was brought up quite well, despite not often being able to direct herself in what to do in life. That is where her need for control is believed to have stemmed from. It's how she was raised.
PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:38 pm


Entries

Just to keep track of when/how many contests she's been entered in. (earliest to oldest)

11/26/2010
08/31/2010

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:39 pm


Extra Spot


For who knows what 8D
PostPosted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 7:42 pm


Open for crit!

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 24, 2010 12:31 pm


Alright, I feel like there are some options. Your Confident Virtue somewhat contrasts with the Don't Go Weakness, but there is always a quick fix. You can say that she assumed that she would be around people, so she thrives off of it, so when people leaves, she loses that source of confidence...Basically, I say you can hint at a weakness from the virtue, and really tie them together to strengthen her character. The Don't Go is just so strong that you need to adjust a little to show why it's so strong when she is apparently confident.

Otherwise, the Confidence really supports some of her weaknesses, so I like how they all work together. Really, it's a matter of spinning them together to create one character, her character. They should thrive and build off of one another, and really show in the description.

Otherwise, I like it and it looks really good and she seems to eb a well thought out character <3



Okay, now for some possible senshi suggestions:

Senshi of Treasure
Senshi of Direction
Senshi of Trails
Senshi of Accuracy
Senshi of Control
Senshi of Aim

And the Negaverse weapons:

Compass - Alter Direction
Dart - Projectile Shooter
Magic Map - Change the Area

Hope this all helps!
PostPosted: Sat Apr 24, 2010 12:45 pm


Now that I read them over, I definitely see what you mean. I may rework the "Confident" Virtue and build off where I mention her control over things to make it understandable why she doesn't like being alone because, in a way, she DOES lose that sense of control over others which results in her loss of control over herself.

Thanks for the Senshi/Negaverse suggestions, first off. Second, should she become a senshi, I REALLY like Senshi of Control as a possibility. It's very fitting to Nicholas's character and she does have that need for control, as I explained above. Third, I also like how your Negaverse weapon suggestions also have to do with precision and control. Lastly, you don't know how useful those suggestions are to me!

Thanks for giving me some crit back! This is helping me expand on Nicholas's character more as well as seeing how she fits into different aspects of the shop! 8D

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PostPosted: Sat Apr 24, 2010 12:52 pm


I'm so glad I could help <3 Let me know when you think of how you want her to be...I think she could fit both ends...I see her really focusing on control and those tendencies if she is in the negaverse, as in something gets out of control once she loses her starseed...but that's just my opinion...


...good luck working her out <3
PostPosted: Sat Apr 24, 2010 1:28 pm


I could see that as well.

Tried to fix it. It proved harder than it sounded xD Depending, I may just create a "Control Freak" Flaw, too. Anyways, hope it works well now~

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 2:59 pm


Wow, gotta move this is up, as I'm still really wanting more crits and thoughts on Nicholas <3 Also added my otehr quest into the first post!
PostPosted: Sat May 15, 2010 4:07 pm


Still looking for crits, as I want this to be nice and polished <3

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PostPosted: Tue May 25, 2010 6:54 pm


Having to bring this up a lot.
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