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 Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 1:47 pm
Your beautiful face
Reminds me of the daggers in my side
And the flow of the creek behind you
Washes my pain to the shore
Your eyes red with rage
Tear my heart from it's entombment
The crashing of your words
Make my ears burst with desire
The devouring light beaming upon you
Brings the horrid darkness to the surface
Smirk positioned where it usually is
Frown upon my face
You say you're doing well
But I say we're doing horrible
Writing a million love songs for the world
But none for me
And with a heart full of hope
And eyes filled with tears
We've become the crashing polar opposites
And for one last time I held you tight
As the repelling forces launched me away
Away from you
Colliding with another world
So long and farewell
From this lovely planet
To your black hole.
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 3:10 pm
I'm terrible with poetry. But it seems kind of.. dark. It scares me. > u < What's it about? /fail
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 3:18 pm
Agreed. Sorry to say i hate it. There are perfectly much more good poetry pieces out there.
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 4:17 pm
yeah but sumtimes the poet depends on the reader XD
but im not saying that i lyk this one XD
this one is good xD
After an endless dream, in this world of nothingness
It seems as if our beloved dreams will lose
Even with these unreliable wings, covered in images that tend to stay
I'm sure we can fly, oh yeah
After an endless dream, in this miserable world
That's right, maybe not using common sense isn't so bad after all
Even with these awkward wings, dyed with images that seem to stay
I'm sure we can fly, on my love
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 5:35 pm
Guys be nice. neutral Thanks.
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 8:33 pm
I think both are very well written.
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I could really see the picture in the first one, though it was a bit 'dark' for my taste.
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Posted: Tue Jan 12, 2010 8:57 pm
I asked for opinions and that's what I got. Thanks.
Oh and I wrote that.
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 11:55 am
Tis okay, but no Robert Frost, or Emily Dickenson. I like it though, gives me a sad, rejected feeling. :3
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