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 Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 7:02 pm
 Chaud HommeAge21Height6'03"Weight227 lbsEye ColorBrownHair ColorSilver and BlackVillageGetsugakureClanNoneVillage RankGeninOther TitlesNoneAppearance DescriptionA tall, lean man with medium length black and silver hair. He has brown eyes. He usually walks around topless showing off his muscular abdomen. He has a crescent moon tattooed on his left hip to show he is from Getsugakure.PersonalityChaud is usually outgoing and content. He has a tendancy to act weirdly around new people. Sometimes he'll just get bored and lick them, or he will attempt to start a fight, its always different. While on missions he is more serious then usual. Don't expect to meet the same person twice! HistoryHis parents began his ninja training even before he could attend the academy, which gave him an edge when he first started. As a child he spent 95% of his awake time training, the rest was chores and eating. Since he was a toddler his body has been adjusted to a constantly high level of sugar in his blood stream, due to this phenomenon he constantly consumes sugary products. He now bases most of his techniques off of this. The crescent on his waist got him his nickname. _________________________________ Primary Element
Earth
Secondary Element
We will learn as time passes.
_________________________________ Jutsu and Skills
Stats
Ninjutsu: 3/7
Genjutsu: 1/7
Taijutsu: 1/7
Total Jutsu Learned/Learnable
Genin Justu-2/4:: Chuunin Jutsu-0/1:: Jounin Jutsu-0/0:: Kage Justsu-0/0::
Ninjutsu
Satou Yoroi
Level: Genin
Type: Ninjutsu
Chaud can bring the sugar particles from his blood stream to his skin to form a very thin, flexible layer of sugar as armor. Its not too useful against ninjutsu but is very effective against taijutsu. It gets more powerful if there is more sugar in the body and with better chakra control.
Satou Ken
Level: Genin
Type: Ninjutsu
Chaud can shoot a single ball or needle of sugar from his mouth at the opponent, however, it gets smaller the further distance it must travel. Better for close range fights.
Taijutsu
Genjutsu
Chakra Control
Basic, slightly above that of an average genin.
Kekkei Genkai (Clan Specialty)
None _________________________________ Equipment, Items, Other
Weapons
None
Armor
Flame Resistant Pants
Accessories
None
Miscellaneous
Candy, lots of it.
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 7:36 pm
This is, surprisingly, one of the most original and pretty well thought out characters I've ever seen.
Though I don't know if it will be accepted based on the jutsu's (Most likely will), I really do like it.
The only correction here is the Clone Technique. It's actually a ninjutsu, not a genjutsu. Other than that, I see no problems.
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Posted: Fri Nov 06, 2009 7:48 pm
I will fix the Clone Jutsu thing now. Thanks for informing me.
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:06 am
No the clone is a Genjutus, Shadow Clones and most affiliated (water, earth,grapefruit) are Ninjutsu.
You also don't need to state that you have the three acadamy required techniques, thats more of a given.
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:18 pm
Why sugar?
It's original as all get out but a sweets theme was kinda taken by a character, however since they haven't shown up for a while you do get first grabs.
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:21 pm
I chose sugar cause..
1) The pic theres a lollipop.
2) Im diabetic and i thought it would just be interesting to make a character like this.
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:23 pm
Oddly just on the basis of logic I'd be more willing to accept your Satou Yoroi being more effective against Ninjutsu and not Taijutsu, since it's a thin layer of a material that's not exactly known for taking punishment all that well. And well, Taijutsus being generally more forced based should just crack a brittle material open eh? And Ninjutsu having more immaterial forces might be defeated by the chakra infused armor that would result.
*shrug* Just saying.
Might want to think about putting a standard mission kit, something that is part of his own personal armory in? *shrug* Dunno if you ever use base kit so maybe you considered that and threw it out anyway in return for flame retardant pants and candy alone.
Other thing that seemed odd was that your character supposedly has a career as an assassin. But we can infer from the stats he's as weak as a 10 year old, comparably due to the one in Taijutsu and he doesn't seem to have much in the way of techniques to kill with. Not a HUGE thing. But it's nice to see some way in which History and his career is reflected in his arts and equipment.
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 1:44 pm
I have to go with Arc on the armor and such.
It might be because i don't know the properties of Sugar that i can't wrap my head around the theme.
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The Third Tsukikage Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Nov 07, 2009 9:21 pm
I honestly have no idea who you are...
but thank you for joining my village with a brilliant and original character.
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Posted: Sun Nov 08, 2009 2:47 pm
So... What is it im fixing? Lol.
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Posted: Sun Nov 08, 2009 9:45 pm
The history didn't make sense. THat seems to be the only thing.
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Posted: Sun Nov 08, 2009 10:04 pm
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Posted: Sun Nov 08, 2009 10:29 pm
Arcturus Highwind Oddly just on the basis of logic I'd be more willing to accept your Satou Yoroi being more effective against Ninjutsu and not Taijutsu, since it's a thin layer of a material that's not exactly known for taking punishment all that well. And well, Taijutsus being generally more forced based should just crack a brittle material open eh? And Ninjutsu having more immaterial forces might be defeated by the chakra infused armor that would result. *shrug* Just saying. Might want to think about putting a standard mission kit, something that is part of his own personal armory in? *shrug* Dunno if you ever use base kit so maybe you considered that and threw it out anyway in return for flame retardant pants and candy alone. Other thing that seemed odd was that your character supposedly has a career as an assassin. But we can infer from the stats he's as weak as a 10 year old, comparably due to the one in Taijutsu and he doesn't seem to have much in the way of techniques to kill with. Not a HUGE thing. But it's nice to see some way in which History and his career is reflected in his arts and equipment.
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Posted: Mon Nov 09, 2009 11:08 pm
Ill just get rid of the assassin part then.
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The Third Tsukikage Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Nov 10, 2009 4:46 pm
Well I personally approve of the changes. Should prove to be an interesting character. I'm going to move it to approved for now, if anyone has any problems, please PM me and move it back. Quick Note: Your history still says you have a nick name, but in your other titles you removed "crescent assassin." So...do what you will with that, and feel free to start posting in Getsugakure
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