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Well I gotta girl...(needs more lyrics+feedbac)

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zoje972
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 02, 2009 4:48 pm


It’s supposed to be sung really lively and fast. It’s a guy singing about his girlfriend who’s kind of out there and likes to be different from everyone else. Im kinda into country right now so imagine sung like that.



Well I gotta girl
She’s got one strange mind
But all the same I love her
Shes mine and one of a kind
I wouldn’t trade for a million bucks
Or two-thousand Ford pickup trucks

In the winter she likes to
Walk barefoot out in the yard
She says she tries to be normal
But it’s just way too hard
And besides,
Who wants to be the same as everyone
When bein’ different is
Just so much fun
She stares at the moon
And smiles at the sun
The rain makes her happy
Bad endings make her sad
She hates those air polluting cars
And poverty makes her mad

Well I gotta girl
She’s got one strange mind
But all the same I love her
Shes mine and one of a kind
I wouldn’t trade for a million bucks
Or two-thousand Ford pickup trucks

This is where I need more. Any ideas guys?
PostPosted: Sun Oct 04, 2009 7:49 pm


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I really Like this so far. I was singing it out loud to myself (I used to sing for a "living" in highschool) and I really liked the way it flowed. There were a few lines that wouldn't roll of the tongue so well, but it may have just been the way I was singing it.

I absolutely love the theme though, and I am in no way a fan of country. But I definitely could see this song becoming something some day. Fantastic job and I hope you finish it one day.

As for suggestions: Perhaps explain something along to sorts of a date. She's not like 'normal' girls. So what does she do differently. Things along that line. and perhaps "I wouldn't trade her for a million bucks."



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