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[p] Out of Esyle's Mind (a poetry collection)

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:50 am


Reflections on a Snowy Day
My feet are firm on icy roads
Lashes are bejeweled in white
Soft flakes fall from the sky
Renewing the world to clean and pure
Chill winds cut at my face, but
I feel no cold, for I am warm
For under my skin
My heart is beating, beating
A constant reminder
Of who I am
And what I love


Last Words of Renewal
Death is dead
And life is dying
Where does one go from here?
This half-life has left me broken,
Unfeeling
My heart has fled
My soul is hiding
Where is my love, my caring?
Someone
Stir my senses
Return to life
Heal these wounds
Awake
Feel
Live
Let love return to this barren field


Change the Wrong Way
A moment of thoughtlessness
A moment of fear
Forgetting what is proper,
True
Mistakes
Are made in these moments
Regrets
Are formed
Lives are changed in these moments
Unplanned
A moment formed is instant
But it shall be forgotten never
A moment of thoughtlessness
Eternally stains the soul


The Angry Breakup Poem (as named by my sister)
What made me love you?
This I cannot understand
A one-sided love is no love at all
My love was lost to the sand
Where
Was the attraction?
It disappeared as if it was never there at all.
Was it there?
A first love, lost to the world,
And now I wonder,
Wonder
If you ever cared
If what I believed had left
Long ago
For now
I see a love
Replaced by dislike
Pity,
Not on me
But on you
On your blindness
To me
To others
To the effects of your actions
Do you realize
That you have lost?
No one has won,
But you have lost,
Because you were blind.


An Explaination
Poems
Have a way of saying
The most complex of thoughts,
Ideas
Emotions
In the simplest of words,
Phrases
Language


War of Tears
Tears are not welcome here
But yet they invade
They spill
Over the barricades of my lashes
They march down cheeks
Leaving trails
Of salty destruction
In their wake

Some
Call them healers
Cleansers
But I
Call them enemies
Provoked by nothing
And everything
They take over the senses
Conquer
All other emotions

They march on
Despite cries of “Surrender!”
“No more!”
Battling their way to the surface
Uncontrollably
They come
Marching ‘till there are none left
Leaving unseen scars
Because I
Bleed tears
Instead
Of blood


Youth Revolution
The weight of the future is shifting
The burden of today
Today’s problems
Today’s debts
Issues
Needs
Wants
It is shifting to my generation
Our shoulders
We will be the ones
To fix
To clean
To repair
The messes,
Damage
That those who came before
Gave us
We are ready
Do not underestimate us
For we are strong
We are smart
Not wise as yet
But we will rise
We ARE rising
We have arrived

Asleep in Class
He sits
In silent contemplation
Or is it sheer boredom?
Eyes half closed he waits
For that ending bell
That may never come.
His mind
Drifts to the world outside
The warm room enfolds him
The cold, unfeeling walls confine
His head drifts toward the floor
As the gentle serenade
The lullaby
Of a teacher’s droning voice
Takes him to his dreams


Define Me
Who you are
Is often
As undefineable
As love
As freedom
Everyone has a different idea
Of what these things are
So every day
I have a different
Definition
Of myself


An Appearance on a Page
Mind
Pours out in verse
And rhyme
Though rhyme
Never quite makes it
Nothing is specific
It doesn’t have
To be analyzed
And poured over
Because thought
Like the world
Is never
Ever
Totally clear


Unnamed
I have a name,
But it is not me
Its meaning
Is what I want
More than anything
To be loved
Beloved
By someone
Who is not required to
By the confines
Of society
Someone
Who loves
For who I am
Rather than what I am
PostPosted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 11:09 am


Not bad, and they get better as they go on.

With that having been said, none of them feel quite complete, except possibly "War of Tears". The line breaking could use a lot of work. Some variation in your poetry might keep people's attention better, and reading all of them like this is...probably not too great in an environment like this, especially if you want your stuff edited or reviewed.

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 2:22 pm


Good Poems biggrin
You did an damazing job and they do get better as they go along.
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