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love_song_from_your_heart
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Posted: Mon Jan 12, 2009 11:50 am
Reflections on a Snowy Day My feet are firm on icy roads Lashes are bejeweled in white Soft flakes fall from the sky Renewing the world to clean and pure Chill winds cut at my face, but I feel no cold, for I am warm For under my skin My heart is beating, beating A constant reminder Of who I am And what I love
Last Words of Renewal Death is dead And life is dying Where does one go from here? This half-life has left me broken, Unfeeling My heart has fled My soul is hiding Where is my love, my caring? Someone Stir my senses Return to life Heal these wounds Awake Feel Live Let love return to this barren field
Change the Wrong Way A moment of thoughtlessness A moment of fear Forgetting what is proper, True Mistakes Are made in these moments Regrets Are formed Lives are changed in these moments Unplanned A moment formed is instant But it shall be forgotten never A moment of thoughtlessness Eternally stains the soul
The Angry Breakup Poem (as named by my sister) What made me love you? This I cannot understand A one-sided love is no love at all My love was lost to the sand Where Was the attraction? It disappeared as if it was never there at all. Was it there? A first love, lost to the world, And now I wonder, Wonder If you ever cared If what I believed had left Long ago For now I see a love Replaced by dislike Pity, Not on me But on you On your blindness To me To others To the effects of your actions Do you realize That you have lost? No one has won, But you have lost, Because you were blind.
An Explaination Poems Have a way of saying The most complex of thoughts, Ideas Emotions In the simplest of words, Phrases Language
War of Tears Tears are not welcome here But yet they invade They spill Over the barricades of my lashes They march down cheeks Leaving trails Of salty destruction In their wake
Some Call them healers Cleansers But I Call them enemies Provoked by nothing And everything They take over the senses Conquer All other emotions
They march on Despite cries of “Surrender!” “No more!” Battling their way to the surface Uncontrollably They come Marching ‘till there are none left Leaving unseen scars Because I Bleed tears Instead Of blood
Youth Revolution The weight of the future is shifting The burden of today Today’s problems Today’s debts Issues Needs Wants It is shifting to my generation Our shoulders We will be the ones To fix To clean To repair The messes, Damage That those who came before Gave us We are ready Do not underestimate us For we are strong We are smart Not wise as yet But we will rise We ARE rising We have arrived
Asleep in Class He sits In silent contemplation Or is it sheer boredom? Eyes half closed he waits For that ending bell That may never come. His mind Drifts to the world outside The warm room enfolds him The cold, unfeeling walls confine His head drifts toward the floor As the gentle serenade The lullaby Of a teacher’s droning voice Takes him to his dreams
Define Me Who you are Is often As undefineable As love As freedom Everyone has a different idea Of what these things are So every day I have a different Definition Of myself
An Appearance on a Page Mind Pours out in verse And rhyme Though rhyme Never quite makes it Nothing is specific It doesn’t have To be analyzed And poured over Because thought Like the world Is never Ever Totally clear
Unnamed I have a name, But it is not me Its meaning Is what I want More than anything To be loved Beloved By someone Who is not required to By the confines Of society Someone Who loves For who I am Rather than what I am
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Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 11:09 am
Not bad, and they get better as they go on.
With that having been said, none of them feel quite complete, except possibly "War of Tears". The line breaking could use a lot of work. Some variation in your poetry might keep people's attention better, and reading all of them like this is...probably not too great in an environment like this, especially if you want your stuff edited or reviewed.
L + V, ~Valens
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Posted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 2:22 pm
Good Poems biggrin You did an damazing job and they do get better as they go along.
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