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Posted: Fri Aug 15, 2008 6:41 am

RAT RACE -Clicky-

OK.

Lets cut the story short, I'm sick and I drew this with a headache.

Something looks wrong but my eyes are to blurry to tell what it is properly.

I think it's the legs.

Help and Critique please.

Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 4:52 am

legs look okay to me
the arm on the right side seems wrong though, foreshortening on it doesn't seem right
maybe its the joint for it, or the hand being that big

also the breast doesn't seem right...
make that the entire torso
the way it twist suppose to say the shoulder on the left side should be close than the right side
but then the stomach sides looks too straight for the torso to be twisting

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Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 4:58 pm

Lord0din69

legs look okay to me
the arm on the right side seems wrong though, foreshortening on it doesn't seem right
maybe its the joint for it, or the hand being that big

also the breast doesn't seem right...
make that the entire torso
the way it twist suppose to say the shoulder on the left side should be close than the right side
but then the stomach sides looks too straight for the torso to be twisting

At least it wasn't the legs! (haha)

Yeah, that arm was ment to be pulled back, but It didn't turn out.

Ok! I'll try and fix the parts you mentioned.

Thankyou!

Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 9:50 pm

Her right eye isn't visible

Her hair needs to fly more behind her head

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Posted: Sun Aug 17, 2008 1:09 am

Duck_in_microwave

Her right eye isn't visible

Her hair needs to fly more behind her head

It's meant to be like that ^^

OK! Thanks!

Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 8:52 pm

ahhhh one eye is missing xp lol. well u said it was supposed to be like that so only thing i see is the chest/torso w.e. u wanna call it needs to b fixed up but other then that it looks good mrgreen