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[Nightangelchi]

Hello, this would be the same as the 'Enter your Work here', but for Poems instead! ^_^
It follows all the same basics as the 'Enter yor work here' does.
but poem way ^_^
-submit your poems
-Get some Critism
-inspire others
-get some advice
-maybe tell a lil bit about the poem, when ya wrote it, is it non-fiction, etc.
-get to know better members maybe through their poems too ^_^
-and much much more ^_^

Enjoy~  

[Nightangelchi]

I'm just gonna get us started off here....
This poem I wrote maybe less than a year ago and its one of my favorites, I probably won't add many poems after this because i get afraid someone will steal my work, but this one has been copy-righted into a book. so i'm more willing to share it =P Its in the format that it had to be in for the entry. so don't critisize the format, or anything cause thats what they wanted exactly -_- But otherwise critize away on anything else ^_^ i wanna hear feed-back please


"Moving Forward"

I reach my hands out running down a lane,
But the more I run the farther away you get.
I'm determined to see you,
But at this rate you'll disappear.
I trip over a rock plams and knees, cut and bruising.
I stay there crying, I won't be able to see you now,
A shadow covers my body, I look up.
I see your concerned face as you grab one of my palms to look at,
I go to touch your face, and you turn to smoke.
Why did I try to touch you?
Now you're gone.
I get up to walk down the lane towards you,
I know every step I take you'll get smaller,
But the path behind me disappears with every step.
If I turn back, my past will suck me into it forever.
If I stay here, the present will never change.
As long as I keep moving forward,
My life will keep moving along.
Even if that means you disappearing.
I love you, I'm sorry"  

[Strawberry Rai]

I love your poem! What I look for in a poem is emotion and if it is expressed accurately and you did it! I really felt what the girl was feeling, when she found and lost him...excellent work! Can't wait to read more. ^^'

Falling;Swiftly;Tear me.~
Falling,
Faster then words can prevent,
Though I am falling I am not heaven sent,
I am falling in love,
Falling for you,
But fearing those words that will pair us in two,

Why do I fret?
Why do I fear?
Why do I hinder,
When I love you dear?

What do I need?
What do I say?
Why is this painful,
In a bitter sweet sensational way?

I love you,
With all my heart,
But these words do not chime,
They tear me apart,

Tear me,
Faster than words can prevent,
I am not perfect not heaven sent,
I am falling in love,
Falling for you,
I don't have to be perfect to admit I love you.

If I knew that earlier,
The ardence it would bring,
though you are gone my heart still sings,
Knowing you are there,
Knowing your around,
simply sweeps my feet off the ground,

Swiftly,
Faster then words can prevent,
I am in love, though not heaven sent,
Flying as a dove,
Searching for you,
Now that your gone I shout I love you!
And not feel ashamed.  

[Winters Serenade]

All I Can Say Is This: I Think You Just Touched That Soft Side To Me. Very Emotional. I Can Feel That Side To Me Cry Already. Nice Work! ^_^

I Wrote This Originally For Some Drawings On DA. Though This Is The Original Version.
Bittersweet Ending-

I Can't Help But Say This.
I'm Leaving You Behind.
The Bittersweet Lovesong You Sang Before?
Won't Be My Lullabye No More.

Because You'll Be My Downfall Without A Tear.
I'll Leave You And Them All Behind
No Stupid Farewells Or Sappy Goodbyes.

Don't Shed Any Tears Over Someone Like Me.
Cause I'm Just A Sick Lovebird With No Love Given To.

But Then Again I'm Just Lying To Myself Now.
Because You Came So Fast, With Tears In Your Eyes.
And I Finally Realized You Weren't Kidding And You Meant It.
But With No Tears And A Small Echoing Laugh I Told You.
'I'm A Fool For Not Realizing That You Loved Me So Much'

And With That I Layed There, Eyes Closed, Lips Blue.
Too Late To Be Together, Too Late To Hear That Bittersweet Lullabye.
Because It Was Just My Bittersweet Ending.  

[Strawberry Rai]

Why thank you, ^^ and might I say your poem was finominal as well. You really had something you wanted to get out, really had that emotion you wanted to inflict upon the reader, and not only that you made it enchanting, the way the characters veiws changed within the poem, it was hypnotically entrancing! ^^  

[Nightangelchi]

WOW! i love both of your guys poems! And i can feel it all! i don't think i've ever read beautiful poetry like this before, why can't there be more people like this at my school/in my life! wow!
Also thank-you Strawberry Rai, for what you said about mine ^_^
Heres a REALLY short poem i wrote that i love. i think there should be more added to it, but i don't wanna ever add to it XD hahaha so here it is:

"A simple bump,
A little bruise,
A way to make life not so smooth.
A tear to shed,
A small kiss makes it alright again."
 

[Strawberry Rai]

I like it. It is short and sweet and the purpose is so very true. Good job!  

[Nightangelchi]

Thank-you thank-you ^_^  

[Nightangelchi]

This is exactly as i'm feeling now. i'm not even writing it down on paper. i'm just letting my fingers flow through the keyboard and type away my feelings....


"I'm listening to Kelly Clarkson
Someone asks 'whats wrong, hun?'
I don't respond,
I'm mute.
they call my cell and call, i don't answear
They IM me, i don't respond.
They're begging for me to talk, just say something.
I won't.
I went from a total rage of bitchiness
to doing nothing but wanting to cry.
The guy i like ain't talking to me,
cause we got into an arguement.
His brother is trying to coax me to talk,
i won't.
All i wanna do is Shout
I wanna scream
I wanna cry
and I wanna die.
But most of all, i want you to come here right now,
and tell me that you actually do have feelings for me
more than best friends....
now you IM me. after almost a whole hour of no IMs
you IM, and apologize for what you did,
you think that i'm not talking cause its your fault,
you think that i'm mad because of you,
you feel aweful for me going mute,
now the tears roll down my face,
"behind these hazel eyes" brings me close to tears,
but i started crying before this song.
I feel aweful, cause now i've made you feel bad.
and i couldn't tell you, its not your fault,
because you signed off for the night.
Now more tears roll down my cheeks....
I didn't want to make you feel aweful.
Now i won't talk to you for a few days.
Tomorrow in-between your jobs, i'll call.
I'll call you and tell you it wasn't your fault.
I'm sorry, you got caught in my idioticness, and bitchiness.
Maybe you don't deserve me as your friend.
But i still love you and always will....
Always."

...i think i'm going type poems more often..wow.  

[Strawberry Rai]

I want to remain anonymous on this poem for it is what you are really feeling, but what I wanted to say was: this poem is much more meaningful for it is your feelings and yourself. I won't say if it's good or bad, for no one can determine if what some one is feeling is right or wrong. Good work.  

[Nightangelchi]

Thats fine. It was weird last night though. i wanted to type a poem out, and thats what came and normally i'd rather not say my feelings online like that. but wow it felt really good. hahaha. Buts fine that you don't wanna critisize it, it doesn't bother me if you did or didn't  

[Strawberry Rai]

critisize is such a mean word xD but yeah, the poem as a poem was a good poem? I confuse myself xD yeah when a poem is more about you, you feel so much better to get it out rather than get a build up of emotion.  

[Nightangelchi]

yeah i know its awesome. and i know i hate the word critism too, even though it can be in both a positive or a negative way, when i hear critism, i think it in a negative way. ya'know? hahaha.  

[Winters Serenade]

I have no clue what your talking about..I just came up with something out of my ignorance.

Class is starting, mornings ringing.
The day is starting, the lectures warning.
but I don't hear those things until the bell...
Because truthfully, I was just resting.

Ignorance can be so bliss. And I also wish I had more people like this in my school/life also.  

[Strawberry Rai]

Yeah I know exactly what you mean xD Winter, I love your poem, It really expresses your outlook on the subject. Good work.