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Ephemeral Ozymandias

Omg incredible! Approved! emotion_kirakira

Prince_yureil

A wonderful thing about Tigers Add a 6 posts maximum duration then approved, no need to resubmit.

Tiger Claw Lower the duration from 5 posts to 4 posts then approved.

Kyotoryuu: Heavenly Tiger Impact Approved

Graviton Pawing Pending. I suggest you resubmit this as a standard technique and then make the genjutsu effects as a sister genjutsu technique. Then use the paw in this technique as a visual trigger for the genjutsu counterpart.

Tailspin Approved

KibitzRajas

Inferno Breathing, First Form, Spiral and Drill Pending. Remove the ranked cost reduction. Also, since this technique is X-ranked, revise this line "The target may suffer tier 1 burns and trauma" into "The target may suffer tiered burns and trauma based on the rank of this technique."

Inferno Breathing, Ninth Form, Mugetsu Approved.

Hurrak

Approved

▰ Character: Yagabayal
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▰ Exploding Jack Trick | Rank X (Cost two for access to S+ ranked) | Ninjutsu [ Fire ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
Yagabayal creates a giant ball of fire in the shape of a jack o lantern carved pumpkin. The size of the pumpkin can be determined by the rank of the technique, but the jutsu does not need to expand in size if it is not optimal. Once created the pumpkin inflicts tiered burns equal to the rank of the pumpkin to anyone within a ranged proximity of the pumpkin equal to the rank of the technique; expanding ten feet per rank applied. Finally, these pumpkins can serve as the catalyst for any of the user's genjutsu techniques with a trigger of sight.

▰ Character: Yagabayal
▰ Witche's Brew | Rank X (Cost two points to go to S+ ranked | Ninjutsu [ Water ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
This technique can either be applied to a source of water either already in existence, already conjured through the use of water ninjutsu, or simply create a new source within the technique itself. Allows the user to conjure a cauldron made of water. The size can be determined by the rank of the technique, although the maximum size is not required to be used at the highest form of the technique. From the cauldron a sequence of tendrils can be conjured. The length of the tendrils can extend to is determined by the rank of the technique when used. In addition to striking with these tendrils, they also can be used to capture a target, and provide the grappled condition as they then attempt to bring the target into the cauldron to apply the drenched and suffocation conditions. Scale of the statuses are determined by the user's ninjutsu specialist tiers. This technique last two turns per rank applied.

▰ Character: Yagabayal
▰ Stone Creation Technique | Rank X (Cost two for S+ rank scaling) | Ninjutsu [ Doton ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
Allows the user to create anything they desire out of stone, dirt, and other earthly materials. These techniques cannot be animated and thus are not designed to be used offensively, (i.e, this technique cannot be used to create a barrage of earth spears to fire at a target). However, this technique can be used defensively in order to conjure a giant house to defend against an oncoming strike. The size of what can be constructed is determined by the rank of the technique.

▰ Character: Yagabayal
▰ Chain Lightning | Rank X (Cost two to scale to S+ ranked) | Ninjutsu [ Lightning ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
The user fires a stream of lightning toward their target. If the strike connects, then addition to dealing damage appropriate to the strike, the lightning bolt then bounces off of its original target and onto another individual. This target must not be another rpc or npc controlled by another individual, but instead a force connected to the initial target which houses an activation. To that end this technique can target a summon of the target, a clone or other activation-based construct of the target, a target's pet, a target's puppets, or npcs allotted to the target such as the squadron system. Alternatively, if this technique fails to strike a target, it can pivot directions to try and attempt any other target within the given parameters. For every target it successfully hits and then bounces off of the jutsu loses one level of potency. Collision with this technique with an opposing technique neutralizes chain lightning and does not permit the bouncing effect.

▰ Character: Yagabayal
▰ Wind Claw | Rank X (Cost two to allow S+ ranked scaling) | Ninjutsu [ Wind ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
Allows the user to create a claw of wind to capture and throw objects. The claw can grow to the size equal to the rank of the technique, but alternatively can retain a smaller size and still carry its ranked potency. When used to capture a target the target is succumbed to vertigo and suffocation of equal ranked to the technique used as per ninjutsu specialist. When used to pick up and throw something the object thrown is enhanced by the wind jutsu, and thus is thrown with a velocity and power equal to the rank of this technique.

▰ Character: Yagabayal
▰ Arcane Preparations | Rank S (Keystone) | Fuuinjutsu [ Summoning ]| Cost [ Spiritual ]
This technique allows Yagabayal to conjure one or more of her custom summons in one go. The user must pay the cost of each summon she manifest through this way.

▰▰▰ Krawler
Rank D | Chakra: 900 | Stamina: 300
Str: 0 | Spd: 0 | Agi: 2 | End: 0
Krawler is a small, black spider. He's about the size of Yagabayal's palm, and he can walk along walls and other vertical surfaces.

Ability: Infiltrate
Krawler can permit Yagabayal to perceive through his senses. This allows for her to see and hear anything the spider does. Yagabayal can choose when she perceives through the spider's senses.

▰ Web Trap | Rank C | Cost: Chakra
Krawler fires forth a web from either its mouth or from its ring form. Anything caught in the webbing suffers the restrained condition. A target bound by this webbing cannot use the body flicker technique. This technique last for four post.

▰ Ring of Evasion | Rank D | Cost: Chakra
Krawler turns himself into a ring the same color as its body. While in this state it utilizes ninjutsu through glowing gold. While in this state the wielder of the ring gains two additional usages of body flicker per fight.

▰ Spider String | Rank D | Cost: Chakra
Krawler fires off a string of web to either pull itself toward a target, or to pull an object closer to the spider. This technique can be used instead of the body flicker in order to dodge a technique, although a cost of body flicker is still applied.


▰▰▰ Skratches
Rank C | Chakra: 1,350 | Stamina: 200
Str: 2 | Spd: 2 | Agi: 0 | End: 0
Skratches is a domestic, short haired, black cat. She has glowing green eyes and can perch herself on top of Yagabayal's head.

Ability: Cat's Eyes
Skratches is able to better detect the presence of genjutsu. When within five feet proximity to Yagabayal the two can korabo the kai technique to counter opposing genjutsu.

▰ Crown of Clarity | Rank D | Cost: Chakra
Skratches turns herself into a crown the same color as its body there are three gems of cats eye which adorn the jewelry. While in this state it utilizes ninjutsu through glowing gold. While in this state the wielder of the ring grants the user the means to apply another sense to their genjutsus. This cannot exceed the three limit without the use of the Master of Deception Discipline.

▰ Cat's Perception | Rank C | Cost: Passive
Skratches is able to perceive the sense the presence of those nearby. Anyone within fifteen feet the cat can sense their chakra, as well as any deviations of chakra being used such as curse mark or celestial. Yagabayal can utilize this feature as well if she is within five feet of the cat.

▰ Scaredy Cat | Rank B | Cost: Chakra
Allows Skratches to make herself and anyone she is within contact with invisible. This hides one from first stage dojutsu sensory, but not stage two. In addition, obscures the target from sensory techniques B-ranked and lower. This technique last for six post.


▰▰▰ Keeper
Rank B | Chakra: 1,850 | Stamina: 200
Str: 4 | Spd: 2 | Agi: 2 | End: 0
Keeper is a barn owl completely black in color. He rest naturally on Yagabayal's shoulder.

Ability: Cherish Defender
Keeper is able to make any technique which defends an oncoming strike one rank higher in potency. The caveat is that any technique used to defend must only defend and cannot have any offensive prowess. This benefit is also given to anyone who wields Keeper in his robes form.

▰ Arcane Robes | Rank D | Cost: Chakra
Keeper turns himself into arcane robes. These adorn the user with a flowing sensation. While adorned in these robes the user may fly and hover in place. When Keeper utilizes ninjutsu in this form the robes glow with golden arcane symbols.

▰ Flight of Feathers | Rank B | Cost: Passive
Whenever Keeper, (or the user wearing Keeper in his robes form), utilizes the body flicker technique, an assortment of feathers is left in its wake. As a supplemental activation Keeper can have these feathers fire at the target.

▰ Winged Shield | Rank A | Cost: Chakra
Keeper's wings expand and grow in size in order to block an oncoming strike. If used in robe form then the wings emerge from the robes themselves. Keeper can korabo this technique with himself at the cost of two activations.


▰▰▰ Konstricter
Rank A | Chakra: 2,350 | Stamina: 200
Str: 4 | Spd: 2 | Agi: 0 | End: 2
Konstricter is a black python which usually finds refuge around Yagabayal's neck. Alternatively she is known to keep herself concealed within the sleeves of Yagabayal's robes.

Ability: Demolition Expert
Offensive techniques utilized by Konstricter considered one rank stronger against techniques specifically designed to defend. This does not apply to collisions of two offensive techniques. This benefit is also given to anyone who wields Konstrictor in her staff form.

▰ Staff of Ruin | Rank D | Cost: Chakra
Konstrictor turns herself into a wooden staff. There is also a hidden blade in the staff should the user unsheathe it from the top. This staff is black and glows with golden cracks when Konstrictor performs ninjutsu in this form. The wielder of this staff is able to have their overwhelming properties extend to both the staff, and any additional summons being worn by the wielder.

▰ Snake Trap | Rank A | Cost: Chakra
Konstricter creates a giant construct of chakra in the shape of a snake in order to bind a creature. This can be used to impose the restrained condition to boss size summons and demons. A technique bound by this snake cannot use body flicker. This technique last six post.

▰ Backbone of the Mage | Rank S | Cost: Passive
Allows Konstrictor to provide any technique used by itself or its wielder the supplemental chakra cost to turn the technique into overwhelming. In addition, if the user is wearing multiple summons, then it allows Konstrictor provide this supplemental benefit to their techniques as well.

So there's a few issues, the biggest one being that we are not comfortable with the overtly suggestive nature in the descriptions of the first two. This is a PG13 forum, and we'd like to keep things pretty tame here, so please reflavor these and keep this in mind going forward. Second is just that the titles both being listed as "Keystones", but I couldn't find on your profile where you would get a keystone from. If I'm mistaken please let me know, if not then just remove that bit as "Keystone" has a specific meaning for techniques and we'd like to avoid confusion. Mechanically, both techniques also require a duration of kind to be listed. I would suggest checking the customs rules for more information on that.




This one is mostly fine, but I would like to see some more specific targeting info even if it's just for easy reference. As far as basic "environment damage" goes I'm okay with this as if, but due to the way combat targeting works (especially in regards to Customs rules), we would not be able to let this do S+ damage to an uncapped amount of people within the range of "Chakra Chains: Barrier [ Kemono Fuuin: Kekkai ]". It would still need to follow the rules of damage splitting based on technique rank, i.e. "1 person at S+, 2 people at S, 4 at A..." and so on.


Please make the changes listed, and resubmit when you're ready. If you have any questions please feel free to DM me, or get ahold of me or another mod through the Guild Discord!











"This kamui redirection must occur in the same post or up to the following three posts while the Yatsuki Shield is up. " Just cut this bit so it redirects the same post and you're approved.

▰ Character: Kenshin Hyuga
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▰ Hiraishin: Flying Raijin Shuriken | Rank X | Uzumaki [ Raiton ] | Spiritual
Kenshin forms a handseal and creates up to three giant lightning shuriken that can be 30 feet wide per rank of the jutsu. These shuriken are of the raiton element and are made of violently crackling dark blue lightning and will produce a loud thunderclap when they land. The lightning shuriken are covered in an array of raijin seals that allow Kenshin to perform the Flying Thunder God technique to get into close range of a target if he chooses. On contact, these shuriken will place a raijin seal and apply tiered paralysis equal to the rank of the jutsu.

▰ Hiraishin: Raijin Mirror Image Method | Rank Null | Uzumaki [ Raiton ] | Taijutsu | Training
After mastering this training, Kenshin can manifest one lightning-based after image automatically after using the Flying Thunder God technique. This after image is either left at the raijin seal that Kenshin is teleporting away from or appears at the rite he is teleporting to. This after image is subject to the training abilities of the Mirror Image Art style and is treated as a shadow clone with all of the shadow clone technique's benefits and limitations. This lightning image can apply raijin seals and tiered paralysis on physical contact. The tier of paralysis is based on the rank amount of chakra that Kenshin gives to the raijin clone. Additionally, the raijin clone has a complex array of raijin seals on its own body automatically and can be teleported to. Finally, this after image is created for [20] chakra and is considered a supplemental activation of Flying Thunder God.

▰ Hiraishin: Raijin Battle Dance Sealing Array | Rank B-S+ | Uzumaki | Bukijutsu | Complex
While wielding his blade and pursuing a target, Kenshin creates a sealing array of glowing raijin seals. This glowing raijin script rotates around the target like a sphere. Kenshin then disappears and reappears around the target in a series of Flying Thunder God movements. He is able to perform a series of three basic combat sword strikes while he blinks in and out of teleportation around the target. This technique is incredibly difficult to dodge and increases Kenshin's speed by [2] for the following post and lowers the enemy's agility by [2].

▰ Hiraishin: Raijin Barrier Array | Rank X | Uzumaki [ Raiton ] | Spiritual
Kenshin places his hand on the ground or a lower surface and creates a large array of Flying Thunder God seals. These raijin seals then glow and form a dome-like barrier of rotating raijin script over himself. This barrier is up to twenty feet in width per rank of the technique. The raijin seals crackle with lightning and will inflict tiered paralysis and place a raijin seal on physical contact. If a weaker technique collides with the barrier, the technique will be teleported to a different raijin seal in the location (topic) in the same post. This barrier lasts two posts in duration per rank applied to the technique.

▰ Sage Art: Hiraishin Truth-Seeking Orbs | Rank S+ | Uzumaki [ Raiton ] | Sage | Spiritual
While in sage mode, Kenshin creates up to six gigantic truth-seeking orbs that can be up to one hundred feet wide. These orbs are made from dense lightning chakra and are covered in glowing raijin seals. The orbs hover around Kenshin for up to twelve posts. They have natural homing abilities and will chase after targets and inflict tier four paralysis and place raijin seals on targets on contact. The orbs can create fifty foot thunderclap explosions to apply the paralysis and raijin seals as well. The orbs fly at high rates of speed and can be teleported to using Flying Thunder God. However, the main function of these orbs is that they can home in on enemy attacks for one free defensive action during their duration.

DarkMockingbird

Approved