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 Posted: Sun Dec 07, 2008 11:20 am
Life is like a dream without any plot,
Death is like a song without any beat,
Love is like a square without any sides
Hate is like a hole that always echoes.
This is my first poem.
It may not be very good because I came up with it,strangely,when I was having my breakfast.
Say your worst,I want to know what I can do to make me a better poet.
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Posted: Thu Jan 01, 2009 2:30 pm
it amazing i love it i dont think anything could be added to it...
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Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2009 4:28 pm
I love it. The part about love and hate are very true.
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Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2009 5:09 pm
I like it. It feels a little mischievous, like a riddle lacking rhyme, but not rhythm.
Say that three times fast.
L + V,
~Valens/Andrew
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Posted: Sat Mar 21, 2009 1:35 pm
It was good....if not extremely overdone....
But hey, what isn't overdone I guess?
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Posted: Sun May 03, 2009 10:17 am
Not bad; I think you should talk more about these things and make it a longer poem!
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Posted: Thu May 07, 2009 2:58 pm
Its really cool, but you could probably add a few things to make it more interesting. Like a few more metaphors about other feelings, or perceptions.
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Posted: Thu Jun 04, 2009 11:50 pm
Seems a bit cliche, but if you got a sudden inspiration and wrote it down, you're on the path to success as a writer. Never let a good inspiration slip away from you.
~KK
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