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 Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2006 3:15 am
One thing that you seem to be missing is - why does Dr. Moreau want the subject, and why the serum? Sure it makes an ironic sense for your character, but you really don't have logical reason behind it.
Critique of my character back would by nice! biggrin
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Posted: Sun Dec 17, 2006 9:12 pm
thank you for the critique, I'll have to think about it, and actually I am thinking about changing the serum.
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Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 1:33 am
Here's a thought... A burrowing creature? I don't think there's a single one on he island, and that alone may cause the good Doctor to choose that serum. Given your character's introverted nature, burrowing deeper and deeper may be a metaphor for the burying of your emotions inside yourself. Thus 'coming out of the hole you made for yourself' may be quite the challenge for your character!
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Posted: Mon Dec 18, 2006 8:45 pm
Well yeah thats why I thought the otter woked,because its a very timi creature that hides...although burrowing sounds good *goes to research*
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Posted: Thu Dec 21, 2006 2:35 pm
ok I have begun to change my character more and so I need feedback, please if you read critique my character
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 7:14 pm
I like the entire idea f your charecter. Your background, your personality, and espically what she would be transforming into.
But, one thing, I dont like the 19 age, Tehre are way too many young people running around, and really if feral labs went around abducting every young'en, folks would catch on, wouldent they?
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 7:23 pm
how old do you think she should be?
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 7:34 pm
Not shure, If your going to pick an age, you need to rethink your entire charecter, ya know?
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 7:49 pm
hmn maybe but I think I can get her to maybe like 22 - 23 without changing too much, you think that would be a better age?
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 7:57 pm
Yes, Then again the whole 18-29 is mostlly overused, but then again anything can work. 3nodding
Maybe you can make her a botanist with a degree in medical studys also?
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 8:03 pm
yeah I was thinking about botanist to make the plant transition better, hmn maybe.....*goes to tweak*
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Posted: Fri Dec 22, 2006 8:06 pm
do what feels right to ya.
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Posted: Fri Dec 29, 2006 2:54 pm
^.^ hmn what about this, I made her a bit older
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Posted: Mon Jan 08, 2007 4:38 pm
Hay Walloon long time no see heart
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