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 Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:05 am
Elemental Draconis Thank you for your opinion.
I think I might keep saved, since I already have a "free" word in the poem.
I'll wait on J's reply.
But I think you're right. Well I probably would have used freed, but you are right, you already used free so... Saved is a good path to take. However, in some cases Repetition is a good concept.
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:10 am
Oh crud, 50/50. xD
I think repetition works better for longer poems, i.e. songs and whatnot. Smaller poems lack the variety of words, so I think the repetition would be picked up more and maybe.. an eyesore. *shrugs*
I'm no poem master. xD Clearly.
I'll use "saved" since that was the first one I was going to use.
Thank you, both of you.
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:11 am
*bows*
Poetry may not be my thing, but word scheming IS.
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:15 am
*hugs*
Just glad to help, ED~ ^ .^
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:22 am
Bahaha, thank you both again.
I'm completely finished with my drawing.
Poem and all. No color though. It smudges.
I'll get it up on DeviantArt tomorrow, if anyone is interested.
Right now, I'm tired, and all drawn out today. I'm glad I at least made something this month, drawing-wise.
Now I shall head off to sleep.
Again, thank you both.
Maybe I'll talk to you guys tomorrow. :3
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:27 am
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 2:29 am
Goodniiiight~
Sweet dreams and congrats on finishing stuff! :D
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 3:06 am
I don't know if either word was perfect. It's that second last line, it makes it seem more as a plea for someone to stay in a bad situation because the teller knows that the torment is only temporary.
To be honest, like how you might tell a dying person that everything will be better.
Reading it, saved works, but I do like freed. Saved implies that there will be external help, but if the poem is about someone's inner turmoil, I would suggest; you will prevail.
And I am rambling on. :'3
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problematic briefcase Crew
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 3:14 am
THE DECISION HAS BEEN CAST ALREADY GLARU
also i'm moving my steam folder to my external. this is going to take awhile
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 3:34 am
I like the small poems I wrote. I should dig 'em up.
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 5:35 am
I'm the best there is at what I do, but what I do best isn't very nice
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 6:58 am
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 7:50 am
babies.....Everywhere......
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 8:38 am
Medeus babies.....Everywhere...... FOUR HUNDRED BABIES
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Sharkbutt The Orgiastic Crew
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Posted: Thu Jan 06, 2011 10:00 am
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